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I was just your averge human, until I discoverd a treaser which teleported me to equestria, but also turned me into a Draconequess. Will I make friends with the ponies or become a lawn ornament for the Princesses? Read and find out
This takes place long after The Crystal Empire, the rest of Season 3 didn't happen.
(This is my first story so its ok if you dont like it much) please review.
Warning: Spelling and Grammer Errors, I will fix them ASAP
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2181005 I don't blame you, but whats done is done.
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Hmm, could this possibly be an interesting HiE? Maybe I should read the next chapter.
2181134 I have the chapters Im just getting them set up.
And thank you for your review.
Perhaps you would like an editor?
Havoc is coming?
Quick, run for the hills!
You most certainly need an editor. Feel free to ask in an AN, you'll get your very own pet Grammar Nazi soon enough.
the story funny good and just plain epic keep going and for all those who hate it just 3 words haters gonna hate
I like your story, you have good ideas. But you only downfalls were the spelling and grammer. But other then that this story gets a tumbs up.
It's an ok fic but it needs an editor
Your work is getting better and better, soon it will be up to snuff .
My advice to you is to try and get a proofreader or an editor and also elaborate on you characters suroundings more.
Keep writing and you will get better as you go along.
^yes I agree with the link and comment
Also nice analogy "All in all I wish I could just start a new life in Equestria but theres a better chance of getting slapped by a ninja-robot-pirate monkey than that ever happening."
okay, I'm hooked
They are however Royalty
Not bad at all, I rather enjoyed this as it was a good read and took up a few hours
Great story but its mane6 not main 6
liked your story bro
is the gonna be a sequel
dont mess it up havoc
I liked it but you need to work on grammer but I liked it and fav it
the ending is perfect write more stories like this
terebal?!
TEREBAL?!
TEREBAL?!
Oh my god.
I think you mean courtesy
why good sir....YOU ARE SOOOOOO BUCKING AWESOME!!!...so far...
now i watch in mild interest......i....he means read
mild interest hauled himself up and onto the cloud resting at the peak of the mountain."wow....what a view..." suddenly his mane caught fire and he was......REALLY INTERESTED!
yes the rest of my comments will be like this
really interested turned and immediately wished he had not as a large wooden creature that resembled a wolf glared at him. He stepped back and lost his footing on the cloud. he fell! He franrically tried to grab a handhold on the mountain as he fell. after several seconds he caught one.
HE WAS NOW ON A CLIFFHANGER!
cli......screw it....K I RAN OUT OF WAYS TO WRITE SHORTS ABOUT A PONY WHOS NAME KEEPS CHANGING!
only two...how sad...
good story though
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yeah RIGHT HOOKED*punches in face*
anyway GREAT CHAPTER! this story to me is like cocaine to a filthy drug addict.
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to each their own. also dont be a jerk. just cus you don't like it does not and I repeat DOES NOT mean you have to talk trash about it. If I see anymore trash talk from you I will pimp slap you with my mighty hurtful insults.
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refer to below comment.
Story: Okay. Spelling: Needs serious work.
Good story, but you really need to work on your spelling and grammar.
I like this idea, but Havoc/Riles is a Mary Sue, at least from My opinion, I also think that this is very fast paced, I suggest making the princess' more suspicious, he is the new spirit of chaos, therefore they should be more suspicious. I give this a 4/10 rating. (Sorry if I sound mean.... :( but he really does seem like a Mary Sue, if you wish to know how to avoid making a character a Mary Sue, read this: http://www.fimfiction.net/writing-guide (Again, sorry if I am being a jerk :( ))
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Do you mean Gary Sue? (You gotta be gender sensitive
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Maybe because He is a strange new creature asking to see their rulers. What the FUCK did you think they would do?
good story.
Apart from having a grammar heart attack, this is definitely going on my top 10 list of stories.
Grammar (5/10) Maybe
Actual Story (9/10) At least
Totally could go for a sequel to this.
Many mustaches for you!
only faults i constantly see are the spelling errors. funny story, but those errors...
Ex: whyle = while
filed = field, filed is like saying i just filed some papers
there were other minor errors that i see here and there, but all in all, not bad
I laughed SO HARD at that...
In a room with people watching a movie...
Anyway, think about how that ended for yourselves.
You have my interest.
I'm so sorry, but I just have to say this.
Is Rarity drunk?
Okay, do you need an editor? This REALLY needs a spell-checker.
I'm open for editing, I'd be glad to help.