Keep calm, Celestia. You're stronger than this.
The white alicorn paced around her bedroom anxiously, occasionally stomping on the floorboards in frustration. She took in a deep breath, running a hoof through her disheveled mane in a futile attempt at relaxation. With a quick flash of golden light, Celestia focused her magical grip on the offending letter and brought it closer to her, reading it one last time.
Sighing, she dropped the scroll and tried to compose herself. Despite the state that she was in, there was one pony Celestia desperately needed to see right now.
-~{>L<}~-
Luna stared down at the table in fear, unable to do so much as blink. She knew what was about to happen, but a part of her still didn't want to believe it. A trickle of sweat ran down her forehead as she considered her situation. She could only blame herself, and now the younger alicorn was going to have to pay for her mistakes.
"Check," Twilight said triumphantly as she levitated a bishop into position, a wild grin spread across her features.
Luna frowned, cursing herself inwardly. Hesitantly, she channeled her magic, and a blue aura enveloped the black king, effortlessly sliding it out of its offending spot on the board.
The lavender unicorn chuckled softly, pushing her knight further into the alicorn's defenses. "Check,"
The night princess growled, shooting Twilight a glance that would make any normal pony shudder in panic. But no, Celestia's faithful student was far from a normal pony. Her chess playing abilities were far beyond that of even the greatest of scholars, and it was arguable that this type of skill was impossible to achieve. Luna made a mental note to ask her sister for permission to magically scan Twilight's brain, but for now, she had a decision to make.
Luna studied the board carefully as a wide smiled appeared on her face. "Ha! I have you now, Twilight Sparkle!" she boasted, once again moving her king out of harm's way. "What do you have to say to that, Twi-"
"Check-mate," the star-flanked mare interrupted, rolling her eyes as she gently nudged her bishop a few spaces over. Laying down Luna's king, Twilight looked up at the alicorn and smiled innocently. "Want to play again?"
The moon goddess was at a complete loss for words. Her mouth hanging wide open, she studied the board carefully, trying to figure out how everything went so catastrophically wrong. Twitching slightly, she forced a diplomatic smile and returned her attention to the much smaller pony in front of her. "I think that's enough for now, thank you."
Oblivious to the elder mare's distress, the lavender unicorn hopped off her pillow and began scanning the nearest bookcase. "Do you like to read?" she asked.
Luna pondered the question for a moment. Celestia hadn't been lying - her faithful student really was obsessed with literature. "What did you have in mind?"
"Well," Twilight began, focusing her magic on a large green novel and bringing it into view. "This is one of my favorites. It's about a spoiled prince who's kidnapped by his own guard, and sent to live in a foreign country as a slave under a crippled war hero. Does that sound interesting?"
The midnight alicorn chuckled to herself as a certain nephew came to mind, but she quickly dismissed the thought. "Actually Twilight, I was hoping I could learn a little bit more about you. We don't talk nearly as often as I'd like to."
Twilight's wide smile faded as she put the book back in it's rightful place, the unicorn being unable to suppress an imminent pang of guilt. She had wanted to spend more time with the princesses, but her demanding schedule had always prevented any visits from occurring.
Instead of returning to the table she and Luna had been sitting at, Twilight jumped up onto the bed Celestia had given her, reveling in how amazing the satin covers felt. "What did you want to know?" she asked, drawing a circle in the sheets with her hoof as she smiled up at the alicorn.
Luna giggled, somewhat amused at how comfortable the unicorn was around the royal family. The night princess remembered how Twilight had immediately wanted to run up to her on nightmare night in front of a terrified crowd, and was pulled into a bow by her dragon companion. "Well, let's start with something simple. How are your studies?"
The lavender pony lit up with excitement in the anticipation of explaining her research to her mentor's sister. "Wonderful!" she exclaimed, getting a soft smile in response from the elder pony. "I've been learning so much more about the magic of frie-"
The unicorn's speech was ended abruptly as the bedroom door swung open, revealing a panting white alicorn. Taken aback by this, both Twilight and Luna looked at each other quizzically for a moment, then returned their attention to the not-so-princess Celestia.
"Sister, are you okay?" asked Luna, her voice filled with concern.
Celestia took a deep breath, walking towards her younger sibling as calm as she could. Letting out a sigh, the sun goddess sat down next to her counterpart.
"No. No I'm not."
Reluctantly, the elder alicorn formed a golden aura around her horn, and with a quick flash of light she teleported Lord Gleeringas' letter onto the table. She eyed the parchment incredulously for a few moments, before withdrawing and allowing her sister to review its contents.
Worried by Celestia's behavior, Luna levitated the scroll closer to her, and studied it skeptically. As she read deeper into the letter, however, her face visibly fell. Closing her eyes when she finished, the midnight alicorn repressed a shudder and released a pained sigh.
"How?" Luna asked.
Celestia turned to her faithful student before answering, the confused and concerned look on her face only managing to make her stomach churn. "That is what I don't know," she began, leaving her spot next to Luna and walking over towards the lavender unicorn. "But I intend to find out."
Luna turned to her sister and grimaced. "What is that supposed to mean?"
"It means exactly what I said," she answered, staring directly into Twilight's eyes instead of Luna's. "I need to see him."
"P-Princess?" asked Twilight, growing increasingly uncomfortable with the alicorn's gaze. "What's going on?"
Luna rose from her position at the table, walking over to join her sister at the foot of Twilight's bed. "I do not approve," she began, letting out another sigh before nuzzling Celestia affectionately. "But I suppose it isn't my decision. Meet me in the court house in an hour."
As Luna finished speaking, she took a few steps away from Twilight and Celestia, then teleported unceremoniously out of the room.
Twilight, who had her eyes fixed on the spot where the night princess had been, turned and looked up at her mentor. "Pri-"
Before she could say anything, Twilight felt herself being pulled into the tightest embrace she and Celestia had ever shared as the alicorn wept openly on her student's shoulder. Not knowing what to do in the situation, the lavender unicorn returned the hug and remained silent.
After a few moments, Celestia broke the hug and wiped a few stray tears from her muzzle. "Twilight," she began, looking away from her student. "I'm sorry for that."
"It's fine Princess, but what happened?" the smaller pony asked.
Motioning for the unicorn to sit down, Celestia cleared her throat. "A very good friend of mine is very old, and very sick. I've been informed that the chances are, he doesn't have long."
Twilight eyed the alicorn quizzically. "But Princess, you're thousands of years old! You must have lost many friends, and I've never seen you so... Emotional."
The rainbow maned alicorn looked down at the floor. "Maybe not, but this is different. This friend is not only older than Luna and I, but he is also the same as we are."
"What do you mean?" Twilight asked.
Celestia sighed, looking up to meet her students eyes. "He is immortal."
Twilight jumped off the bed, and began pacing around the room in a manic state. The lavender unicorn had studied the different gods and races, and though she knew very little, she knew one thing. Immortals don't die.
"But how is that possible?" she asked.
"I don't know, Twilight. However, I intend to go see him in Avania."
The unicorn's face fell, and she looked down at the floor. "But Princess," she began, pawing at the ground. "Wasn't this the one week we were supposed to spend together?"
For the first time that night, the white alicorn grinned. Gesturing for her faithful student to follow her, she and Celestia walked into the hallway and were greeted by two members of Luna's night guard. With a nod from the Princess, the genetically altered pegasi saluted and flew off in different directions.
"There is a treaty among the world's nations," Celestia began, smiling. "That one country cannot bring it's army into another. That means I will be traveling to Avania by hoof, and I would like you to join me."
Twilight's jaw dropped. "Me!? But Princess, I'm not fit for that kind of journey!" she protested, still in disbelief that it had even been proposed. "What about Luna? Can't she go with you?"
Celestia chuckled grimly. "And leave Equestria for the buzzards while both it's leaders are away?"
Twilight furrowed her brows in thought. "No, I guess not." She said, pawing at the ground. "But won't I just hold you back?"
The alicorn looked down at her student with a soft expression. "Twilight, this is very hard for me. I would really like your company, and look at the bright side - there's so much for you to learn out there! We can have magic lessons again, just like we used to."
At the thought of being taught by Celestia again, the lavender unicorn lit up with glee. She nodded furiously, prompting a giggle from her old teacher in response. Once the moment passed, however, the grave nature of their situation settled back in with both ponies.
Sharing an empathetic look with her pupil, Celestia put her hoof to Twilight's chin. "You've had quite a long day, my faithful student," she said, managing to maintain a smile. "Go rest, I have to speak with my sister."
Twilight smiled softly. "Goodnight, Princess."
-~{>L<}~-
Luna sighed as she regarded the High Equestrian Council, the members' judgmental looks sending shivers down her spine. She had never enjoyed speaking with the noble ponies, but the topic at hoof made it exponentially worse. One grey unicorn in particular was staring at the alicorn harshly, as if she was suggesting to set fire to the entire country.
"And how do we know that this isn't just some trick designed to take Equestria for yourself, your highness?" the unicorn asked.
Annoyed by the accusation, Luna took the opportunity she had. "Because if it was," she said, walking over to the unicorn to whisper in his ear. "You would be dead."
The grey noble gulped, a few drops of sweat running down his forehead. "Uhm, no further questions, your majesty," he said as the rest of the court room laughed unsympathetically at his misfortune.
"Miss Luna," began a portly pegasus, unable to contain his chuckling. "You have a grand sense of humor."
Finally winning them over, she thought. "Thank you, but now isn't the time for joking, I'm afraid."
A painful silence hung in the air for a few moments before the same pegasus spoke again. "Ahem, but, how long will her majesty be away?"
"As long as I need to be," interrupted Celestia as she walked regally into the court house. The nobles immediately bowing to her as she came into view. "I am not aware what complications may be ahead."
"Your highness," began the grey unicorn. "Why don't you bring your chariot and fly to Avania? I'm sure that the Grand Court would allow your passing given the situation."
Celestia raised a brow at her sister when the noticed the nervous state of the unicorn, getting an innocent smile in response from the younger alicorn. "Because," she said, turning back to the noble in question. "In the time that it would take for my appeal to be even reviewed, I could make it halfway across the globe on hoof."
"That seems to be just about the distance, doesn't it?" asked the large pegasus in his usual chuckle.
"A bit more than half, but yes." Confirmed the white alicorn. "I trust that you all will not give my sister trouble while my student and I are away?"
"Trouble?" the pegasus asked sardonically. "I look forward to this!"
Celestia cast another glance at Luna. "Right, then. If you all don't mind, I would like a private word with Princess Luna."
Nodding respectfully, the council ponies made their way out of the court room and into the hallway. Once they were gone, Celestia stared blankly at her sister. "What was that?"
"I like him," she said. "Why isn't he paid more?"
"Never mind about it, Luna. I assume you've prepared a map for me?" asked Celestia.
Luna blinked. "You didn't ask for a map," she said, raising a brow at the older alicorn. "Wait, what do you need one for? Don't you know the way to the gilded city by now?"
"It's been awhile," defended Celestia.
The midnight alicorn wanted to press the issue, but decided that it was in her favor to just remain silent. Motioning for Celestia to follow her, Luna walked over to her large, black desk and began rummaging around in its various drawers. "Hmm, not there," she said, forcing a tiny door shut with her magic. "Aha!" she exclaimed as she opened another cabinet, revealing the scroll she was looking for. "One map of the northern hemisphere."
Celestia wrapped the parchment in her golden aura, bringing it into view. She looked at the map in approval for a few moments, until a small note in the top right corner of the paper made her frown in annoyance.
"Luna," she said.
"What?"
"This map."
"What about it?"
"It's four thousand years old."
"Beautiful condition for such an old map," Luna appraised, smiling sheepishly.
Celestia facehooved.
-~{>L<}~-
Twilight groaned in frustration as the morning sunlight hit her eyelids, forcing them open. Slowly, she pushed the covers off of her flank, exposing her to the soothing draft from outside her room. She had been tired last night, and forgot to close the door behind her as she entered her room. She was still safe however, as Luna had provided her with two night guards who had been watching her door for intruders.
Ninety three million miles away, perfect aim. I'll have to ask the Princess about that some time.
Though she was still groggy, the lavender unicorn made it down to the dining room where she greeted a plate of eggs in earnest. The chef had obviously remembered Twilight's favorite meals, they hadn't changed much since she was just a filly.
As she was munching on a danish, Twilight felt a hoof poke her in the back playfully. Turning around, the unicorn was met with the wide, smiling facing of Celestia. "Good morning, my faithful student," she said.
With a gulp, Twilight swallowed the last of the pastry she had been working on. "Morning, Princess. Did you sleep well?" she asked, returning the smile.
"As well as anypony could in our situation," Celestia began, her tone growing slightly darker. "We should be leaving soon."
"I haven't even packed yet," Twilight argued.
Celestia laughed and shook her head as her horn filled with a familiar golden aura. From behind her, a small pair of white saddlebags with a symbol of the alicorn's cutie mark floated towards Twilight and attached themselves to her back. "Now you have. I thought of everything you might need, even Miss Smarty Pants," she said with a wink.
Twilight's cheeks blushed furiously as she shied away from her mentor. Giggling, Celestia stood up and motioned for her student to follow. "Luna will be watching over Canterlot while we're gone," she said as they made their way out of the dining room. "I do hope that the nobles don't pry her too much. They seemed to like her enough, one in particular."
Twilight considered what Celestia meant for a few moments, but then dismissed the stray thoughts of Luna being involved in such an... Intimate scandal. "Princess, forgive me, but where exactly are we going?" asked Twilight, as they walked through the castle halls. "I've never been out of Equestria before. Actually, up until last year, I had never been out of Canterlot before!"
Celestia smiled as she pulled out Luna's map and showed it to the lavender mare. "This is Equestria," she said, pointing to the bottom of the parchment before moving her hoof upwards. "And here is Avania, the gilded city of griffins."
Twilight gaped at the distance between the two nations. "But that's all the way across the globe! How are we going to get there before your friend..." she protested, trailing off as she considered how to word the end of her sentence.
"Dies? Twilight, Lord Gleeringas is a very powerful creature. If he has a reason to live for awhile, he will trudge on." she said, looking up to the sky with a bit of nostalgia. "Do you still have that cloud walking spell that you used to attend the best young flier's competition?"
"Of course," Twilight reassured. "Why?"
"We'll need it," said Celestia. "Avania is like Cloudsdale, however, the entire country is built on top of clouds. It's also made of gold."
"That sounds beautiful, Princess," said Twilight. "Have you ever been there?"
The white alicorn chuckled to herself, thinking carefully before answering. "I used to live there."
Before Twilight could press on about the alicorn's residence in the northern lands, she and Celestia found themselves at the palace gates. With a nod to the guards, Celestia dismissed them and pushed the ornate doors open with her magic. As they approached the borders of her estate, Celestia turned to her student.
"Our journey begins," she said with enthusiasm. "Take the first step, Twilight."
Nodding, the purple maned unicorn took a deep breath, poised herself, and walked slowly towards the palace gate. Slowly, she raised her hoof and brought it down on the other side of the fence, marking the beginning of their travels.
Twilight looked back at Celestia. "Well, that wasn't very climactic at all."
Hello there!
You're probably wondering why such a short chapter took three weeks! Well, I was busy, and to be honest, I've only been able to really focus and write for the past couple days. I'm sorry, I suck, I know. Now, for some news. I won't be here from Friday until Wednesday, so no working on chapters then. I'll get back to writing on Wednesday, and you can probably expect a new chapter the following Friday.
This chapter was relatively short - it was just a transition into the real 'beginning' of the fic. The chapters from now on will be 10,000+ words, and they will be much more entertaining than this. While you wait for me to get back, why don't you go read Twilight's favorite fic?
Also! A huge thanks to my main pre-reader, soundslikeponies. Go show him some love!
~Hato F.
Update! Yeeehaw!
The lavender unicorn had studied the different gods and races, and though she knew very little, she knew one thing. Immortals don't die.
Oh, that's a real professor here.
'Facehoof' may be a neologism created by the fandom named bronydom, but it still gets spelled mostly with 'f', even in the finite versions of the verb.
//edit: 10k words updates? Sounds fun!
//2nd edit: took a look at 'Twilight's favorite fic' - exactly the story which I had in mind as Twilight described it
A good update, it set the right tone. Though I am curious why Celestia would be willing to break down emotionally in front of Twilight but not Luna...
Also, Twilight has read a lot of books, she should know that tempting fate like that is just ASKING for it.
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more entertaining? i found this very entertaining already, I’m curious how you gonna improve that
Poor Luna, she does not get to star gaze with Twilight.
And why did Luna's guards not close Twilight's door for her? They must be really strick about following orders to the letter.
And is that a Lord of the Rings reference at the end?
To long chapters and the real beginning of the story.
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Doctor Who, not LOTR.
I am excited for this!
Oooh. I spy lots of wonderful world building! Hooray!
Very nice update. A little short, yes, but that's fine. I liked the hints of the emotional/character development and overall it worked a lot better in this chapter.
I am very intrigued to see what kind of magical and wonderful obstacles you will have waiting for our characters. It should be awesome!
Keep up the great work!
Twi was a bit whiny.
Celestia: A friend I've known for thousands of years is about to die, and I'm crying all over you, the only time I've ever let my emotions slip out.
Twi: But you promised me this week was MY time.
But good update!
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I would consider that an indication of how important spending time with Celestia was to Twilight.
Nice build-up so far. I thought story was going to get a bit darker from the first chapter's end, but it's lighter than I expected. Have to agree with a person above that Twilight here is a bit whiny. Also, it would be interesting to see Luna's antics with high council along with Twilight and Celestia's journey, but it's up to you I guess.
Few Questions if you don't mind:
1) The story about the spoiled prince that Twilight almost told sounds familiar. Is it a reference to old fairy tale or something? Definitely read it somewhere.
2) What's up with Twilight's remark about "Ninety three million miles"?
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1. I linked the fic in question in my first comment on Chapter Two.
2. Was referring to how the sun hit her eyes.
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-looks at romance tag-
hmmmmm i wonder why...
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Hehe, I know, but I was just curious what the basis was of Twilight and Celestia being that close... It was such a sweet scene though!
I am very much looking forward to more Celestia and Twilight screen time!
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*Looks at character list*
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I wonder if that will ever happen!
meh
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I see what you did there.
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now you know how it feels
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Yeah, I probably deserved that.
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The Story features Twilight and Celestia!?
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"I don't know, Twilight. However, I intend to go see him in Avania." "But princess-" "No."
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"Dammit."
A dying immortal?
[not sure if tia will be okay]
Huh, I can't really say I feel Princess Celestia is in character in this story. To be honest, she acts too emotionally. And seriously, giggling at the smallest things?
Whenever we've seen Princess Celestia she has been composed, collected and in control of herself and her emotions. The only time we've ever seen her really emotional, is when facing Luna after she was freed and when facing Discord. Even then, the lack of composure was only temporary. In contrast, your Celestia projects her emotions all over the place. She doesn't feel like the immortal ruler who have had to protect and watch over Equestria for thousands of years, rather she comes across as flighty and unpredictable. Some of the things she said also make me think of her as careless, at least in this story.
Of course, having her act like in the show all the time isn't particularly fun either, but a thing like having Celestia crying on Twilights shoulders is something that deserves build-up, rather than the rather odd approach it took here.
To summarize this lengthy analysis: The relationship between Celestia and Twilight doesn't feel right. It doesn't feel like a student/teacher relationship like in the show, rather it feels more like they were "close childhood friends". Again, I'm not saying that Princess Celestia is above showing feelings, and I could certainly see her as playful when the time is right, but here that regal air that surrounds her is dispelled with almost her every word and action.
Do note that I still enjoy reading the story, this is just my take on the characterization.
"A bit more than half, but yes." Confirmed the white alicorn.
Waaaiiit. If the distance is more than half way around the globe, wouldn't you...go the other way?
IDK man, fucking magnets, how do they work?
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Not very big on the psychology involved in leadership, are you?
Celestia wears a mask, perfected for at least a thousand, possibly more years. She's not bawling in front of her subjects here, she's with her little sister and the mare that's pretty much her daughter, since she did more raising of Twilight than Shimmer Tail did. It's also an extremely stressful event, meant to be shown by the fact the normally composed Celestia needed to cry on her adoptive-daughter's shoulder.
Celestia is acceptable, carry on. So sayeth Aurora Dimmet, General of Ye Dawnmother's Solar Empire.
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That excuse works on normal leaders. It doesn't work quite as well on someone who has been wearing said mask alone for a thousand years. If Celestia had such an easy time getting extraordinarily attached to her little ponies, she would probably have gone Nightmare Sol ages ago. About the time she visited the funeral of her 500th close friend and/or confidant. This in turn makes it all the stranger that she gets upset at this "old friend" dying, she should be used to that by now. (And honestly, how close friends could they be if Celestia still needs a map to even find her way to the city?)
You can't really compare an immortal ruler with a normal mortal one. There would be an entirely different way of thinking. Your part about Celestia raising Twilight is, at that, entirely conjecture on your part. It's unlikely in the extreme for the show, and the story has so far shown none of it. Not to mention that such a relationship would make for an extremely strange basis for a romance story.
Of course, I admit that my own theories regarding immortal rulers is entirely conjecture as well. I can't exactly claim that there's been many of those in the history of man. However it is logical that an immortal would have an entirely different perspective on time, as any mortal would be sadly short lived. They would have to learn to be more jaded about forming close bonds with anyone, as generations would pass in the blink of an eye. In that regard, the perhaps 10 years Celestia has spent with Twilight as her student is nothing. For most of that time, Twilight wouldn't even have been old enough to be a proper mare to confide much in either.
Yes, I have opinions on the Best Ponies, and on Twilestia in particular. I have no fear of criticising when I think improvements could be made. In the end, the author should write the story the way they envision the characters, but as long as they post it in a public venue, they will receive opinions on it. I, at least, try to be constructive and detailed on it, which can't be said about the hoards of people who just say "I love it!!11!!" or "I hate it!!11!!" on anything and everything.
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This friend's death is different; he is an immortal and therefore one being she expected to always be there. Given her and Luna's reactions it would seem this is the first time that an immortal has died that they know of. As to Celestia's giggling, laughter is a coping mechanism for stress and it has been stated she is stressed to the point that she has difficulty maintaining composure before getting this message.
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Until we get to know more of the relationship Celestia had with this "old friend" I'm afraid that doesn't mean much. I could see how it might come as a surprise for her, but it's certainly a not a good use of the word "stress". Especially since we have had precious few examples of these stressful events.
Sure, ruling a country would undoubtedly be stressful, but if she's had thousands of years to get used to that. If she were going to crack and loose composure over every single unexpected event, then she should have done so long ago. (Goodness knows Equestria isn't a peaceful world. What with all the monsters about.) In this case, all the "stress" have been more of the "tell" variety than the "show" variety. We get told Celestia is feeling stressed out, but we're not shown why, or even given many reasons for it. Loosing her composure is a symptom of the stress after all, and not the cause of it.
One plausible cause of stress could in fact be the mounting feelings Celestia has for her student. It might be uncommon, unexpected, and quite a bit worrying for her. But if this is the reason for her stress, then it hasn't been shown. In fact, the only reason we've been given is that living the exact same day as she has always lived is starting to wear on her. But there's been nothing to even hint at why this is the case, or what would make it so. We're simply told that it is and then expected to be OK with her breaking character and, indeed, loosing composure.
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I'm going to clear this up.
The odd, somewhat unexplained loss of control around Twilight was the high point and most important event of the chapter, hence why it is named Stoicism. There's a really good reason for that, and it hasn't been shown yet. Be patient!
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Tss. Where's the fun in that? I'm not immortal, I don't have time to be patient :P.
Though I can't say I see how the scene represents Stoicism. A breakdown of Stoicism perhaps, but then that implies that you showed Celestia as being stoic to begin with. (Again: That is the highest complaint I have. It's alright to see Celestia break out of her stoic mask, it's great even, but she's had thousands of years to practice it. Seeing her break down in a few hours over what is portrayed as comparatively minor issues just seems silly.)
But I'm aware that we don't have all the information yet, I might revise my opinion when I do, but that's something the future will tell. Until then, I base my comments on the story as it is presented :).
Good lord. There's constructive criticism, then there's nagging. And I don't want one of your bricks of text putting on airs in return. Just... chill, tone it down. Let the author write, make suggestions, ask for clarification. Try do it in one post instead of coming off as either kind of a dillhole or aggressive.
"Well, that wasn't very climatic at all."
A common grammar mistake. Climatic: of or pertaining to climate (weather). What you meant, I assume, is climactic: pertaining to or coming to a climax.
[Edit] Hah, forgot to comment on the actual story. I'm liking it so far, but I'm still waiting for the adventure to actually begin, lol. Looks like that's gonna' happen by next chapter. :D
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Don't start a fight if you can't handle the heat ;).
But hey, if you want an ad hominem attack in return, then show that you're more than just a mindless yes sayer. Attack my points with logic and intelligence rather than insults, but even suggesting that is probably giving you too much credit, haha.
"Twilight looked back at Celestia. "Well, that wasn't very climactic at all." "
*Michael Bay takes over* And suddenly, EQUESTRIA EXPLODED!!!
Good chapter. My favorite bit was the interaction between Luna and Twilight.
I have to say that I wasn't a huge fan of some of Twilight's lines. The worst offender in my opinion was, "But Princess," she began, pawing at the ground. "Wasn't this the one week we were supposed to spend together?"
The princess just broke down and was crying. Twilight does not come off as very comforting or considerate.
Still, all-in-all I am looking forward to the next chapter.
I am liking the title of this fic a lot.
Oh well Athanasia is a greek word meaning immortality after all.
How did you come up with this idea using such a foreign(if i can say that) title?
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I didn't know what the word meant until I was reading another fic, where Rarity used it in dialogue while talking to Spike. Looked up the definition, and thought it would be the perfect name for this little story. There's a significant difference between Athanasia and Immortal, however. Immortal means live forever, and Athanasia means deathless. They may seem exactly the same, but the difference will become apparent on the last few chapters.
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Well in greek Athanasia has both of these meanings. We don't use different words to express these terms, and come to think of it we should...
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more like:
*Michael Bay takes over* sunset, helicopter explode, sunset again, flaming helicopter falls down on a giant robot, megan fox ass, ass,dat ass, a bit more ass, suddenly everything explode, bruce willis cry, the end.
and that's how equestria was made.
more on the topic, I'm looking forward to the trip, sound exactly like the kind of stories I love to read! and I for one love the characterization of Celestia
Sorry, but I have to ask... Deathless and Immortal, in Stark... I mean common English, mean the same thing, but I infer that one of them means specifically being immune to natural death, but not immune to being killed. (this in itself is a bit of a farcical concept, since aging to death is actually brought about not by age, but by organ failure or disease, telomeres, which control aging, don't seem to have any discernible direct effect on the body as they shorten, and no one has ever lived long enough to run out of them... but... that's a tangent and I should end it there... )
Anyway, you say deathless, which I would assume to mean unkillable, as immortal is commonly degraded to refer to age involved death...
Another thing that I struggle with in determining which is which, is that the term immortal comes from the terms im-([in-] negation) mort (death) -al (containing, having the capacity for, or pertaining to)
So immortal, would literally mean that which is not capable of being dead.
So, in your vernacular, which is deathless, and which is immortal?
A note: If I sound accusatory or such, it's unintentional... I apparently have a very caustic manner of speech(or so people's reactions lead me to believe). Take no offense.
Any info when next chapter is coming ?
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I've been very busy with things. Soon.
Good stuff. Would prefer friendshipping over romantic shipping. It's more adorable. But good none the less.
the three simple words: i want more! seems appropriate
it has been 6 weeks where is my chapter
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We miss you. D:
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Needs an update. please
I hope this updates soonish...
luna please continue this beautifull story. i mean its awsome but still please