Vinyl Scratch has never been a fan of the classical and jazz music her parents force on her. All they want is to see her make her way to the top of the world of refined music. She resents this fact, but is there any other path for a filly from such a prestigious family of musicians?
Cover art and inspiration for the story come from this art. Thanks to UP1TER for allowing me to use it.
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2407090 Awwh~ I'll pick it up, Vinyl!
2407090 "awww" "No words can't describe."
Looking good so far! Can't wait to see more
Well... you sir get a favourite very nice work can't wait to see where you go with this
2407224 Oh, I'm a ma'am, and thank you! I hope you all like it!
2407231 whoops >.< shoula picked up on the name lol I can read all that but not username hmmm slightly worrying haha but you're welcome all the same
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It seems she got better at guitar throughout the years.
I'm surprised this story didn't get featured, did it?
2408598 xD No, but it is in the "Popular Stories" section right now. When I saw it there, I literally squeed!
I don't really say this to a lot of OCs but I really like how you made Gliss, I really am surprised this isn't featured,
(Dammit Knighty, what are you doing!)
I will soon read your story and then write up your review.
This is Kalash93 from Authors Helping Authors reviewing your story.
Grammatik: 7 -- You need to revise how you do dialogue and direct addresses. You also need to mind your paragraph breaks. Lastly, some of your diction is awkward.
Pros
1. Your pacing is good.
2. Your characters all have distinct personalities.
3. Your dialogue works.
Cons
1. You are completely without subtlety.
2. You use some odd syntax.
3. You seem to be missing a dark tag.
Notes
I don't know how you did it, but you've managed to get things moving at exactly the right speed. Some things take a little too long, such as the class introduction, but the tale is moving at a good pace. Nothing is rushed. Nothing is prolonged. The scenes develop and then they end at just the right moment before they get boring. You did a good job at creating characters with distinct personalities. This ties directly in with how you used dialogue. It's not easy to write a lot of dialogue, let alone good dialogue, especially in large quantities. Somehow, you pulled it off. This story is a massive improvement over your previous one. Now, you do way too much showing and not enough telling. You are often redundant. It is also much less engaging to read a story where you just tell us everything instead of letting us use our minds to compliment the idea you plan in our heads. Your syntax can be odd at times. I recommend going back through and editing the parts that just don't feel right. I found such glitches to be grattingly jarring, although not too common. Finally, it seems as if your story might need a dark tag. It says sad, but a child's mother is dead. And I have a feeling that it's all Vinyl Scratch's fault.
I hope you enjoyed your review. I remember that I asked you to take a look at my story, Racer And The Geek (http://www.fimfiction.net/story/81159/racer-and-the-geek), more than a month ago. I am still awaiting your review. For this one, take your pick of any of my other stories. Try to have at least one of them done within a week, and both done by the end of the month.
Your story is of middling quality. You earn a fair 5/10 flutteryays.
2444100 I was debating on the "Tragedy" tag for a while.
This story is a bit of a diversion from Frozen Over, I'll agree there. I wanted to try something in the third-person, with more time spent on events in general. Thank you for the comment about their personalities, I actually try to have most of the classroom characters have personalities directly related to their names, and as for Vinyl and Break Beat, I think of them as foils.
Thanks for the review. I'll be honest, the reason I haven't gotten to Racer and the Geek yet is because I'm just a bit intimidated by the word count. Mind if I do my review in sections? I'm sorry if that seems lazy.
2444200
You can do your review in sections.
Oh man, I feel so sad for gliss, that's messed up her mum dead and her dad away still love reading it though
Poor Glissando...
2407090
2407090 shhhhhh vinyl don't cry it's okay I'll pick it up.
2446100 dude she's blind her mother died and they can't get in contact with her father, could be worse she could be an orphan with no extended family.
2536934 ah man I hope it don't come down to that she's so nice she deserves better :(
2537362 yea no shit I bet you 100,000 bits that she and Break beat get together. nctransgirl you can't tell us what is going to happen if you do I know pinkimenea and she always wants to play.
'two pony.'
You... might wanna fix that
Done.
I finally finished reading this chapter...
Wow...
The feels...
Still not quite as sad as last chapter, but still...
2648166 I know right so much D'awwwwwwww I kept expecting Vinyl to hug Break beat tightly.
2652588 YEAH!!!
Technically, the proper word for it is 'staves,' just like you'd say 'wolves' or 'knives' rather than 'wolfs' or 'knifes.'
Also, it goes one ledger line above and below the bass and treble staves, respectively.
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Says the one named 'Vinyl_scratch' to Vinyl Scratch.
Really?
I really liked this story, when's the next update?
please update
i would like to know if i could snag this story? it has a really good baseline and it seems a waste to let it sit
also just got a cold and have nothing to do