Meanwhile…
For the most part, Ponyville had remained unchanged over the last two months. The salesponies shouted their advertisements in the town square during the day and slept soundly in their beds at night. The farmers worked their fields around the town and visited occasionally for the odd necessity they needed to keep their crops healthy and fruitful. In all actuality, only two things had changed in Ponyville.
The first was the absence of the town librarian, Twilight Sparkle. At first there was a bit of commotion as to the why and the how, but once Luna made the announcement that Celestia’s prized student was travelling abroad to avert some new threat, things things calmed down. It had taken less than a week before the townsfolk stopped asking Spike and the Elements questions about how Twilight was doing after they realized that there were no answers to be had.
The second change was the construction and staffing of what Luna had named ‘Harmony Keep’ on a hill just outside of Ponyville. As with the disappearance of Twilight, such a change in Ponyville was met with concern due to its suddenness. Luna had explained this away by citing that many threats had first made themselves known in Ponyville before spreading elsewhere, and a constant presence of the guards would deter trouble before it truly manifested. At first the townsponies were skeptical of the necessity, until they realized the amount of business that it would bring.
The vast majority of soldiers that would be stationed there took it as something akin to a paid vacation, as well. The hours were easy and their duties light, and Ponyville was filled with folks that were more than willing to show their appreciation to ponies in uniform. For a small percentage of the guards, however, the posting was not to be taken so lightly.
The keep consisted of four stone walls with walkways and turrets on the four corners, and a brief gatehouse to control entrance and exit. A large courtyard dominated most of the space in the keep where drills and muster could be held for the guards stationed there. Next to the yard was the barracks, mess hall and storage areas for weapons, gear and supplies. All in all the keep was what one might expect for a small garrison to occupy.
With all the hustle and bustle of the keep and its occupants it would be easy to miss the small stone structure at the northern corner of the keep, and the quartet of guards that seemingly never moved from their posts except when the shift changed. Unknown to all but themselves, these were Celestia’s Solar Guard and were tasked with the true purpose of the keep.
Within the small stone structure four more guards, all experienced unicorn battle magi, stood at constant attention around what looked like a massive block of pure black stone. Unlike the guards outside the structure who faced outward to spot trespassers, these four unicorns faced inwards towards the black stone looking for any sign of change or movement.
And for the last two months, nothing had changed. Nothing that they could detect, at least. The block of ebony stone wasn’t solid. Within the stone there was a small room and within that room sat Discord. And once Discord was absolutely certain he was not being directly observed, he grinned.
Ah, humans, he mused, so quick to judge. So quick to punish. Discord’s mind drifted back to the first few hours of Twilight’s time on Earth and that critical moment where the humans could give her a chance or not. The stern one in the room wanted a solution to the Twilight problem. The spiteful one wanted the Twilight problem catalogued like a dissected frog. The old one…the old one was the one who would give Discord what he wanted. He had nearly tapped the old one’s mind to switch his certainty with curiosity, his suspicion with trust when Discord received his first surprise: The old man spoke and was willing to give Twilight a chance.
The development shocked Discord, pleasantly so, which wasn’t something the avatar of chaos was able to experience often over the past millennia. And so he had distanced himself from the little scene while contenting himself with simply watching Twilight’s little herd grow through her own merits. Then the cheerful one went and got herself killed and threatened to ruin everything, and Discord had to intervene.
Any further attempts to assist Twilight were curtailed when the spiteful one made her little machine that could see magical energy. It was child’s play for Discord to view the events on Earth while keeping his presence hidden from everyone, but direct action would likely get himself caught or at least suspected.
Speaking of being suspected… Discord’s grin faltered as he felt Celestia’s magical signature approach is cell. She hasn’t visited since this whole thing started. I can guess why she’s coming by now. Has my touch made you so sentimental, Celestia?
The stone wall before Discord’s conjured throne split open to reveal the white alicorn in all her terrible glory. She stalked into the cell and stopped before giving Discord the most frigid glare he had ever experienced.
“Your Majesty, I must protest! You shouldn’t be this close! You shouldn’t even be h—“ One of the unicorn guards shouted as loud as he dared but his concerns were cut off when the stone wall closed behind Celestia.
“Well, welcome to my humble home, Celestia,” Discord greeted affably and with a toothy grin, “I don’t have much to offer in the way of hospitality, but I’ll do what I can.” Instantly a teapot and cup appeared beside Discord and a small stream of piping hot liquid leapt into the cup without the pot so much as moving. “Ever had Earl Grey, my dear? It comes highly recommended from a friend, though he’d deny up and down that we were so close.” He smiled a toothy grin and the cup floated over to her.
“Bring her back,” Celestia commanded, and the cup of tea shot back at Discord like an arrow.
Discord didn’t so much as bat an eye as the scalding hot tea flew at him. A portal opened up an inch from his face and closed immediately after the tea disappeared into it. “I’m afraid I can’t do that, my dear. Her task is not yet complete,” the sing-song reply was intended purely to aggravate, and it was successful.
“Bring. Her. Back.”
“Oh my, my! Someone’s getting a little huffy!” Discord grinned again. “Besides, it’s not like you haven’t done the exact same thing to your precious Twilight when it served your own ends.”
“You sent her away to deny the use of the Elements!” Celestia declared with absolute certainty, “And with her gone you can no longer be--”
“If my goal was to break up the Elements, I’d have killed her or turned her to stone like somepony I could mention,” Discord interrupted before looking to the side to scratch his chin, “Come to think of it, there once was somepony who did that all the time. What was her name again?”
“DISCORD,” Celestia snapped, and she brought one hoof down to emphasize her point. The black stone cracked beneath the impact. “I have never done anything as cruel as you have to Twilight. I would never!”
“I see your mouth moving but all I hear is, ‘I’m a hypocrite!’” Discord snarked with Celestia’s own voice coming from his mouth before sighing and waving a hand at her, “Are you honestly going to deny that you banished Twilight from the environment she felt safe in to make allies against a foe you could not combat yourself?” He gave the words just a moment to sink in before he continued, “I’ll give you a hint: The Summer Sun Celebration.”
Celestia’s barely contained rage fizzled visibly as she made the connection. “Twilight needed friends! She shouldn’t have spent so much time in the library!”
“Mhm, yes, she did need friends, I won’t argue that.” Discord’s gaze narrowed. “And what about all the other lonely ponies out there? I don’t see you going out of your way to put them in friendly environments. Oh, you might say it was for Twilight’s own benefit, but you sent her to save Equestria from your dear sister.”
“And…you sent Twilight away for the same reason? Impossible! The Elements can handle any threat to Equestria!”
Discord’s first response was a snort of laughter. “Need I remind you of the weaknesses of the Elements? They’re bound to the six mares who wield them. I thought I might wake you up to the dangers of losing the Element Bearers when I first broke out, but I didn’t anticipate Twilight or you being quite so resourceful in reversing my tender touch. After all, you’ve had a thousand years to try and reverse the first time I used the power and I’m not seeing any progress there!”
He thought to let loose a braying bit of laughter but the look on Celestia’s face stopped him. “I was also kind enough not to kill them, in case you forgot.”
“The Bearers are far more formidable and resourceful than you give them credit for,” Celestia ground out through clenched teeth.
“I’ll grant you that,” Discord said with a shrug of his mismatched shoulders. “Of course, there’s also the other flaw in the operation of the Elements that you’ve quite understandably neglected.” The alicorn’s anger cooled somewhat and she replied with an arched eyebrow, so he continued, “The Elements operate on the principle of ordered systems. They restored your sister to sanity after a thousand years of Arcanite addiction because that was the natural order of things. They petrified me twice because, let’s admit it, Order and I don’t get along.”
“I fail to see the weakness, Discord. You play at serious discussion when in reality you say nothing at all.”
“You want serious? Fine. Do you think yours is the only system of order in the universe?” Discord’s voice lost all of its jovial tone as he steepled his paws in front of his face. Before Celestia could reply, the stone behind Discord began to crack and crumble to reveal Equestria in flames. “There are things in the dark, Celestia. Things that would devour this little system of Order that you’ve created on this world. And they have just as much chaos in them as you once did. The Elements will fail against them because they perfectly adhere to their own system of Order.”
The burning terrain cleared to reveal monsters that had never been seen before in Equestria. Gouts of green flame rained down from giant metal ships in the sky, and the cities all across the globe burned. Equestrians, Griffons, Zebra… all races were herded into massive factories and were processed. Any resistance was ended brutally and swiftly. And by the end, the metal ships left Equestria as a burned-out husk devoid of life.
“There is no free will for these things. There is no creativity. No thought. No chance. No life. No hope. No souls. They are an abomination in my eyes, and I cannot stop them from devouring this world. Not on my own,” Discord finished as he continued to stare at Celestia even as horrific scenes played out around him.
“Then release me and I will deal with them myself!” Celestia commanded, and Discord did not miss the small note of concern in her eyes at the scenes around her.
“And what then? Oh sure, we might thwart one apocalypse on this world, but then who would stop the next?” Discord asked, and with a snap of his fingers the scenes of fire and death were replaced with a mockery of the Solar Court. Dozens of ponies as well as guards lining the walls but none moved, or spoke or even breathed in their petrified state. At the head of the room was a pedestal made of petrified ponies with a marble throne upon it, and upon that throne sat a pale blue alicorn with a mane and tail not unlike a blizzard of snowflakes. The alicorn surveyed her silent kingdom and laughed.
“One tyranny leads to slavery and extinction. The other is cold, unfeeling stone,” Discord summarized before snapping his fingers and banishing the horrifying predictions. “Which is why it’s a good thing I’m exploring other options. Twily’s helping us avoid both of those bad ends. Really, you should be thanking me!”
Celestia was silent for a long moment as she simply stared at Discord. A mortal observer might have thought the Alicorn was simply a statue from how still she was, but Discord had spent far too much time with Celestia to miss the subtle signs of emotion flickering across her face.
“If there was such a threat, then why didn’t you just tell us? Tell me?” Celestia asked slowly.
“What’s this? An honest question bereft of accusation of threat? You’re making this old heart ache with nostalgia,” Discord clutched his heart dramatically and hunched forward like an elderly creature before turning his gaze to the Alicorn. “I’ll pay you the courtesy of answering your honest question with one of my own: Would you have believed me if I told you?” The question caused Celestia to wince, and Discord chose not to prey on the moment of weakness.
“You have my attention now, Discord,” Celestia recovered quickly before offering Discord an olive branch. “If this threat is so dire then I will assist you in defeating it, but you must bring Twilight back.”
Discord arched an eyebrow before throwing his head back and laughing. “Oh you thought I was doing this to convince you to help me? Oh that’s just precious,” he giggled before sighing and waving a hand. “Oh don’t get all huffy again. I know that when the time comes I need not ask for you to defend this world and its people. I’m happy to say that you’ve learned to cherish the lives of your people over the past thousand years, even if I had to force you to.”
Discord snapped his fingers and the stone cell disappeared only to be replaced with the desolate landscape of the moon while a blue and green globe hovered amidst the void. He waited for Celestia’s eyes to widen as she realized the planet in the sky wasn’t Equestria before continuing. “As I said before, there are things in the dark. Terrifying, heartwarming, revolting, reassuring, monstrous, courageous things. And in one tiny corner of the vast universe is a world filled with people not like you or me or any of your little ponies. The defining trait of these people isn’t magic or honesty or kindness, however, it’s sheer stubborn-minded determination! They don’t look at the impossible and lament, they scratch their chins and bang their heads against the impossible until it becomes possible!”
“I fail to see how that is a virtue…” Celestia answered with a smirk.
Discord’s only response was to pull out a small box with a grille and two buttons on the front. He arched an eyebrow at the alicorn before pressing one of the buttons.
“Four forward, four forward. Move it to the right a little,” The box said, though its voice was clouded with crackling background noise. Any further speech from the box was missed as Celestia nearly ducked by reflex when a shadow crossed over her.
Her gaze rose to the stars to see a curious sight. A metal vehicle of some kind soared serenely through the star-filled sky before slowly descending onto the moon’s surface on a small set of stubby legs.
The box beeped and another voice came from the box. “We copy, you’re down, Eagle.” A second voice answered the first. “Houston, Tranquility Base here. The Eagle has landed.” “Roger, Tranquility, we’ve got you on the ground. We’ve got a bunch of guys about to turn blue but we’re breathing again. Thanks a lot.”
A hatch opened up on the side of the vehicle and a figure emerged. It was bipedal but the entirety of its features were hidden beneath a massive white suit and backpack, and its head was covered by what looked like a mirrored fish bowl. It clumsily descended the latter on one of the vehicles’ legs before taking its first steps on the moon. “That’s one small step for a man, and one giant leap for mankind.” The box crackled one last time before Discord tapped the second button to silence it.
“Do you not comprehend the significance of this?” Discord threw his hands up when Celestia appeared less than impressed. “These people, these humans found a way to leave their home world and set foot on their moon without magic! They saw something that their instincts and common sense said was impossible, then they threw out their instincts and common sense and went to the moon! Without magic, or anyone to guide them along their path to progress. No one like you or me, Celestia. They did this all on their own because they are all alone in the dark against everything that seeks to snuff them out. Twilight is with them now.”
“You sent Twilight to them? Why? To help them fight whatever darkness is about to assail them?” Celestia asked evenly, and her tone was drenched in disbelief.
“Prepare them? It’s a bit too late for that, the darkness is already upon them,” Discord replied darkly, and he raised one paw.
SNAP.
The moonscape disappeared and was replaced with a sun-soaked cityscape with smooth paved roads and several towers of glass and steel surrounded by several more modest buildings. Any sense of wonder that the beautiful city might have had was marred by several black plumes of smoke that dotted the horizons. Any sense of wonder was dispelled completely by the screams.
Several creatures, humans in light clothing were fleeing in droves towards an impromptu barricade where several more humans waited. These new humans could only be soldiers based on their armor and uniforms, though their weapons were black boxes and tubes. As the lightly clothed humans fled behind the barricade, the soldiers advanced to cover their retreat.
Monsters appeared from the alleys around the barricade. Massive insects scuttled forward on blade-like legs and orange glowing eyes locked onto the humans hungrily. Their howls filled the air and they charged after their retreating prey.
“Go, go! Don’t stop running!” One of the soldiers shouted as he spread his stance and raised his weapon towards the closest of the monsters. A rapid burst of BANGs followed by a gout of fire erupted from the weapon in his hands and the monster staggered and fell. The human switched to his second target before the first stopped moving and that one fell to the ground as well after a staccato burst from his weapon. He began to back up and pull a curved box from a pocket on his belt just as a similar box fell from the weapon in his hand.
And just as the box hit the ground, a second story window shattered and a third monster leapt from the window and charged. Warming shouts and weapons fire filled the street but the monster charged the soldier and swiped with both of its claws. One claw knocked the helmet off the human’s head while the second cut a horrid gash across his face and jaw. As the human fell the monster’s jaws shot forward but stopped dead when the human jammed a knife into its serrated maw and twisted before extracting the blade.
SNAP.
The scene shifted to a building where nearly a dozen humans in black uniforms and armor fired their weapons out of doorways and windows at unseen enemies. In the center of the room sat a massive pylon that glowed green and slowly pulsed faster and faster as two humans worked furiously at the pylon’s base.
“No pressure, milady. Take your time. Not like all of Cardiff is at stake,” One of the humans said cheerfully as he sorted through the rats nest of wires on one side of the pylon.
“Shut it, Finch!” the other human snapped, and she gave a panicked look at the pylon as its pulsations increased in frequency. “DAMN IT!” She screamed while grabbing a wire and pulled. The pylon winked out and for a few brief moments neither soldier moved. When the pylon’s flickering did not return both humans shared wide grins before being interrupted by a bolt of green fire that struck the wall behind them.
SNAP.
“Helfen sei…”
Four soldiers in tan body armor leveled their weapons on a fifth that staggered out of the darkness of a warehouse aisle. One of the soldiers stepped forward with a first aid kit only to be shot the moment he got within arm’s reach. The shooter screamed pitifully and exploded a second later and the whole warehouse erupted into chaos as lances of green fire were met by the booming reports of the humans weapons.
Two of the humans died in rapid succession which left only one. A near miss destroyed the human’s weapon but he quickly drew a second one and dispatched his attackers while screaming profanity as he tried to back away. A second group of humans entered the warehouse just as the survivor collapsed.
SNAP.
The darkened warehouse was replaced with an empty warehouse where Twilight Sparkle spoke with several humans with every sign of enjoyment. She spent time with one human in particular and gave him several words of encouragement, and moments later a coin began to levitate out of his hand and into the air. Twilight gave one of her winning smiles and clopped her hooves together in approval.
Celestia’s face was a study in shock, and tears rimmed her eyes as she saw the image of her prized student. “You… you actually sent Twilight to help them? You said they were all alone in the dark…”
“Help them?” Discord scoffed at the notion. “Heavens no! Why would they need help? Had I not sent Twilight there would have likely been more deaths, but the human race would have persevered the same way it always has; by making the impossible possible.”
“Then why!?” Celestia screamed as she finally snapped, “Why would you put Twilight in so much danger?”
“Because they are alone in the dark, and they need not be.” Discord steepled his paws before his face and looked at the Alicorn meaningfully. “You should know why by now, Twilight’s been writing to you on the subject for close to two years now. The humans have a saying, ‘the enemy of my enemy is a friend,’ and they need to realize that they have friends in faraway places if they’re ever going to help us.” Discord finished somberly before his eyes lit up. “Plus they have the best toys.”
One paw reached behind him to produce a curious device covered in buttons and knobs. One button press and a knob push and a little metal cart zipped out from behind his throne. It was gray and sat on squat tracks for a low base of gravity, which was the only thing that kept it from toppling over onto its side from the top-heavy turret mounted on it. The little cart skidded to a halt and the little turret twisted to the side to face Celestia. An insect like buzzing issued from the turret, and a hail of projectiles no larger than grains of sand flew out at the Alicorn only to be stopped dead a foot from her. With its initial assault defeated it rotated on its tracks and attempted to ram one of her hooves, only for said hoof to raise and crush it flat.
Discord recoiled in mock horror. “You see? This is why we never get along, Celestia. You break all my things.” He let out a mock sigh before tossing the device in his lap over his shoulder. For a brief second a portal opened up to reveal a unicorn guard drenched in tea just long enough for his discarded device to pass through. A shout of warning and the start of an explosion was cut off as the portal disappeared.
Celestia arched an eyebrow at Discord’s antics before looking down at the little thing she had crushed. “Promise me that she’ll be alright. Promise me that she’ll come out of this unharmed. Please!”
“I cannot.”
Celestia glared at Discord and brought one hoof down on the stone in front of her to further flatten the toy. “Then bring her back. Now.”
“I cannot. We made a deal, and there’s only one way she may return to Equestria. I cannot interfere,” Discord refused as he continued to stare at Celestia over his steepled paws. “Have faith in your student, Celestia. After all, she is far more formidable and resourceful than you give her credit for.”
The anger slowly bled from Celestia’s face as her own words were used against her. “Princess Cadance can feel Twilight’s heart, wherever she is. If that heart goes out, I will return and erase you from existence even if I am destroyed in the process. Pray that she does return, Discord,” Celestia said sharply before turning back to the stone wall which parted before her.
“If she does not return, then we shall all soon cease to be, Celestia,” Discord whispered as the cell wall slammed shut.
A long moment of silence passed before the avatar of chaos finally spoke again. “You are rather daring, to sneak in as Celestia was making her exit. Invisibility implies a certain degree of mastery of spellcraft… or infiltration. Which is it, hmmm?”
Moments passed before a brown unicorn mare shimmered into visibility in one of the far corners of Discord’s cell. Her mane, coat and eyes were all brown and her cutie mark was a daisy, while her expression was that of dour disinterest. She blinked and for just a moment her eyes were replaced with bright green before a second blink reset them. She stepped forward and bowed before Discord before speaking, “I am but a messenger for my lady, great one. Queen Chrysalis congratulates you on your successful banishment of Twilight Sparkle. You have struck a mighty blow against Celestia and her regime, and as such my queen wishes to offer her assistance in any endeavor you may undertake against the tyranny of the Sun.”
“Oh my, what a generous proposal!” Discord said and he clapped his paws with glee. “I don’t suppose I could speak with Chrysalis now? Ever since her own attempted plot in Canterlot I’ve just been dying to let her in on a secret. Can you…y’know, connect me to her?”
The fake mare closed her eyes and spoke, “You speak to Chrysalis now, Lord Discord.” The mare opened her now vividly green eyes to look up at Discord--only for them to go wide with sanity-bleeding terror. Her jaw hung wide and every impulse screamed to flee the horror before her.
A hundred, a thousand, a million eyes stared down at the changeling. Pony eyes, gryphon eyes, changeling eyes, fish eyes, insect eyes, and eyes beyond all description stared into her very soul. A smile, a gaping maw filled with a billion teeth from a billion different sources smiled. “My dear Chryssy,” A thousand voices said simultaneously as the impossibly toothy grin only grew, “I haven’t forgotten what you tried to do to Celestia!” Before the changeling could do so much as flinch from the implications, a thousand limbs rushed forward. Tentacles, claws, paws, hooves, pincers, and a thousand other limbs that defied explanation engulfed the changeling.
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The stone wall split open and the unicorn magi rushed in with spells ready to identify the source of the screaming. They found a bland unicorn mare trying to press herself through the opposite wall of the cell while screaming her voice into disuse while Discord did nothing but sit upon his throne and grin innocently.
“Discord! Who is this? What did you do to her?” The arch magi accused while the other guards dragged the hysterical mare to safety.
“How should I know? It wasn’t me who let a perfectly normal unicorn into my cell. Perhaps you should be replaced with someone more competent,” Discord snarked, and he gave a finger wave to the screaming former changeling just as the wall closed shut.
Good evening folks!
Was ambitious over the weekend and cranked this out really quick, I hope everyone enjoys this final Meanwhile chapter.
Now, while in the prereading process it was brought up that I should probably reveal something I've been playing -very- close to the chest. As I've hinted, the end is in sight for Stardust. But with this chapter I've laid down quite a bit of foreshadowing that would be impossible to wrap up in the few chapters that I have left in Stardust. What does this mean, you might ask? I have a sequel planned. Now, you might ask, 'Why split the story up? Why not make it one gigantic story?' I have two reasons for this.
One, I want to watch Season 4 of FiM from start to finish so that I don't have to run the risk of retcon issues after canon developments come out.
Two, to be perfectly honest I'm tired. Over the past seven months I've written over 180k words. This is an order of magnitude greater than anything I've ever written before, and by far the longest I've ever stuck with a creative project. Not that I'm complaining, I've enjoyed every second of writing Stardust entirely because of you the readers! But I need a break, and I'd like to resolve this story rather than leave everyone hanging.
I hope you all understand and thanks again for all of your support so far!
Dang it, Q! Quit fing with humanity already! Just go back to bothering Picard!
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Well that was fast. Wasn't expecting someone to get through this so quickly. Or did you see that line and commented? >_>
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Read that line and couldn't help myself Almost finished now. You really need to make these things longer
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Perfectly understandable and I look forward to the sequel!
Oh: "The salespones shouted"
What is pone
Hmm.... some good back story, some interesting moves and motives by Discord.
I liked it, and I can't wait for Meanwhile Pt. 4!
Finished reading. Smart Discord is best Discord.
Yay, sequel! Take all the time you need.
This Discord is strange. The story alternates between portraying him as omnipotent and invulnerable, yet also worried about a threat; which is strange for a being who can raise the dead across galaxies.
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The 'Meanwhile' chapters are meant as something akin to intermissions. They're breathers before or after dramatic events. They're meant to provide a glimpse of what happens elsewhere. A glimpse and nothing more.
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Thanks!
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Whoops!
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I'm afraid this is the last Meanwhile. >_>
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Thanks! I had hoped Discord would be memorable in how I've depicted him!
I knew Discord was secretly a good guy all along. Well, for a certain value of 'good'
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Is there going to be a substantial shift that justifies the creation of a whole new story? No offense, but Twilight in the XCOM-verse is an order of magnitude more interesting than dumping the human cast into Equestrian against the aliens, which would be my first guess for what the major shift would be. Nothing wrong with taking a hiatus if you need one and picking up the story at the end of S4.
HIS cell.
So are you going to try and add MELD to the story? I am interested to see how you will add that if you do.
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I meant chapters overall. There is no such thing as too long of a chapter (save for ones that never come out) MOAR!
Wow. Chryssy screwed up big time by making the mother of all assumptions. I almost feel sorry for her.
As for Discord, it's no wonder he's fascinated by humans. We're like him in a lot of ways, not in others, and so very amazingly stubborn. As contrary as we are, maybe Celestia'll actually learn something from us.
Ooooh, a sequel! I look forward to hijinks with the X-Com crew getting used to Twilicorn.
"Errr ... why does a chorus of unearthly voices start chanting in Latin whenever you use magic now, Twilight?"
"I don't know! It's so embarassing!"
*Back on Earth*
Vahlen: -Muton's pancreas appears to be made of an especially ridged substance which we believe allows the alien t-OH GOD MY FACE!
That whole thing was friggin' awesome. The way you portrayed Discord in a serious, but still chaotic, manner was enough to send shivers down my spine! The fact that the Aliens will probably come after Equestria next is an obvious, but extremely interesting, sequel hook. Could Princess Twilight end up being the Commander of Equestria's XCOM?
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Thanks!
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There lies an interesting question: How much of Discord's power is real, and how much of it is illusion?
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I had an idea on how Stardust was going to end before I had even started posting it on FimFiction. If I got a lukewarm reception on it then I was going to see it through to that ending just for completeness's sake. However, with a small amount of modification things can continue. Trust me it'll make sense once we get to the Stardust finale.
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Technically it has already been added, but I know what you mean. :p You'll have to wait and see!
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I'm hardly one to begrudge an author the rights to an unexpected sequel. Not when my little 20,000 word time loop story spiraled out into a five-story trilogy
I love chaotic good Discord!
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...If it's five stories isn't it a quintet not a trilogy? >_>
Great chapter as usual. Nice to see Discord again, especially after the new season premier he's one of my favorite characters now. As for your break I think you deserve it. There's still plenty of other fics to keep us busy while we wait for you to get all nice and refreshed though I do hope to see you start again sooner than later.
Discord is an abomination.
Oh, and Sachs wasn't lying! He actually did kill a Chrysallid with a knife. And what's better, he stabbed it into the Chrysallid's mouth!
3575340 So your going to use Lana's arm as a way to work MELD into the story. I am interested to see how that will happen.
Non-moronic & magnificent bastard Discord is awesome.
Smart Discord truly is best Discord...
I wonder what the Ponies will think when exposed to the more extreme elements of the human condition...
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Ah I see. I actually like chapters at approximately this length, between 4k and 10k. Small enough to be gobbled up in a reasonable amount of time but long enough for actual development to occur.
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I always felt Discord would be fascinated with humanity.
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I still haven't seen the new episodes yet. Got them downloaded. Just need the time.
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Part of me is regretting that I didn't include a random tea strike in the early chapters, just for randomness's sake. One of the guards outside the cell had to take the tea instead.
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Thanks! I've actually been sitting on this chapter (or the idea of it at least) for a very long time.
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I've always been fascinated with the concept of chaos being neither good nor evil. It's pure chance and can go either way. And now that Discord sees something that will remove all chance, he feels inclined to cheat a wee bit by calling in some outside help.
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Wait, Discord shows up in the season 4 premier? GAH SPOILERS.
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I've always seen Discord as a sanity-corroding eldrich abomination but takes the form that he does just so he can talk to ponies without making their eyes melt.
And that was a peak at Sachs's knife takedown of the Chryssalid!
Fav chapter. Right here
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Aaaaargh! This is my fanfiction pet peeve.
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Oh, I understand why authors aim for this length. Still, it feels like it's too small of a bite to really savior. Even Article 2's chapter lengths (some of the longest I've ever read on FiM) feel too short to truly savior the chapter.
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Lana's arm started out as a lead-in for the eventual introduction of MECs further down the line. MELD showed up in the last chapter (enemy gene mods and the crates).
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Thanks!
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Indeed. Very good speculation.
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Thanks! But we're not finished yet!
And then everyone else had Twilight terminated due to clear signs of mind tampering.
Good luck, their spaceship turns into a black hole when it self-destructs. Even if she is her ridiculously wanked fanon self in this fic where the sun she moves is anything like our own (ha), it probably would not end well.
Interesting... "he who fights with monsters", I see.
Well, that has some disturbing implications.
Is it...
It is!
What does it take, lady?
So he wasn't just talking shit! Badass!
That's the way Team Dai-Gurren rolls!
Damn, I actually really like your Discord.
Uh... well, shit.
...Huh.
...Oh.
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I don't have a pre-reader for my comments! Forgive me!
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Aha, I get what you mean now.
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Ponies are very herd oriented, yes? Does that mean they would approve of self-sacrifice for the good of the group? Such sacrifice can be extreme...from suicide bombers to organ transplant. Would they freak out that in order to fix a broken heart, our best solution is to take the heart out of someone who died and put it in there?
Then you get into human philosophy.
Act and Rule Consequentialism would probably screw with them if they don't have it. Whatever act that you can be reasonably expected to know about and accomplish that can result in the most "good" should be the act you take. Though it sort of falls apart as it allows for things like murdering one guy so his organs can save ten or framing a innocent man in order to prevent a riot. Plus it sort of makes all mistakes equal, killing someone because you intended to and killing someone accidentally both have the same level of bad, even though the accidental one was accidental.
Holy crap, discords the good guy! I love these kinds of stories! WOOT!
Serves chrysalis right, she had it coming when she attacked Celestia. I can only imagine the mental pain she was in when the changeling she was possessing suddenly wasn't a changeling anymore.
...
Correct me if I'm wrong but does this imply that Celestia was evil until Discord 'discorded' her? And somehow sealed up a good portion of her power as well? But then, why isn't she grey? Also wasn't Discord already petrified a thousand years ago, since that's when NMM was banished and he was sealed away before that? Did I miss a chapter?
Don't get me wrong, Arad. I'm still loving the story, and Chaotic Good Discord makes for an interesting character, but I'm a bit confused by these new revelations.
Well well well, isn't that interesting... This sequel will be one for the ages
Sooo...
Junkie!Luna
FormerlyEvilTyrantWithStoneFetish!Ceslestia
TriedToHelpAllAlongByThrowingCrazyChallengesAtPeopleAndGeneralRedeemerOfEvilGods!Discord
Kind of Wondering what the Earth shaking revelation about Cadence will be... it'd be totaly unfair if she didn't have a twisted backstory too...
Armstrong's utterance of "a" is contested. Most people can't hear it, if it was uttered at all.
Pretty sure that's conjugated wrong. That's the infinitive "to help," and a conjugation of "to be." If I remember my German correctly, the command "Help me" would be "Hilf mich" or maybe mir? (mich's a direct object, mir's an indirect object.)
Edit: Had the wrong timeframe. Thanks Dagon.
Hmm... a government funded impenetrable black box, mouthless aliens that are always watching and hidden motives... It all seems familiar somehow. (The security on this one's even less effective, though.)
And the White Witch! I do so love a good allusion. (And allusion within an illusion, no less. )
I absolutely love it when Discord goes full Q. He's a complete mystery, wrapped in an enigma, shrouded in illusion, and packaged in delicious irony.
A sequel? Juicy. I won't get tired of reading this any time soon, but I can understand if you need to take a five minute break or so from writing. Be quick about it though, I don't pay you to lie in a corner massaging your aching wrists. ... What's that? I don't pay you at all? I'm still correct, aren't I?
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Speaking of which, chapter 17, Reason:
pbs.twimg.com/profile_images/1659877529/stealth-mountain_bigger.jpg Stealth mountain says hi.
I know you've said that these are meant as brief glimpses but given what Discord has shown Celestia is there any chance of a short piece where she digests what she's been shown (and that Twilight seems happy) with Luna and Cadence and perhaps the other Bearers?
ohoh hot danm me gusta
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Interestingly enough, the first place I heard the 'make the impossible possible' line was from the badass Mwu La Flaga from Gundam SEED. Takes on giant robots with what is essentially a jet fighter, and wins.
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Everyone has their role in the herd I imagine. It'll be fun exploring that in the sequel!
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I imagine it's like when someone picks up the phone to handing it off to someone else, then when that person picks the phone their ears are blown out by screaming.
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Very good speculation sir.
I can't go into my plans, spoilers and all, but I do have something for you to consider: What is the source of Equestrian history in universe?
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Thanks!
3575485 the AU point is set in 'Keep calm and flutter on'
3575518 so when is the next chapter? I'm getting pretty excited to see what happens next!
Ah, Chrysalis, thinking she can play with the big kids just because she got in one lucky shot.
Discord: still an assnugget, but at least an assnugget with a reason.
"The pair stalked into the cell and stopped"
What pair? If you're trying to mention the changeling, I'm afraid that it just confused me.
Interesting chapter… The plot certainly has thickened!
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I'm thinking...chessmaster Cadance. She's secretly manipulating everything!
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Yeah, that was a relic from a previous chapter. As there's lots of german gobbledygook in that chapter and I didn't have a german translator at the time I went with what I had at the time. : |
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Whoops!
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I'm afraid this is the last Meanwhile chapter I have planned. Sorry!
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:)
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Beat me to it.
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Soon... :P
Also, a round of applause to Zaponator for giving me a more appropriate seasonal avatar. :)