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Sounds.. Interesting!
My favorite line;
"You're so beautiful and kind."
"Yes I am."
Nice.
Wonderful!
Simply divine!
That was quite good . . . short, effective, and everyone was in-character. Always enjoy a bit of Spikity
Two small critiques:
You've centered the text instead of left-justifying it. This makes it a little harder to read, for me anyway.
"I never said that." Declared Twilight, "Declared" should not be capitalized, since it's part of the same sentence. You also use periods at the end of a character's dialogue where there should be a comma.
It's a bit rushed, to be honest. You shoulda spent more time on it to flesh it out.
Mate...
Don't want to confuse you or anything but... You know that Finn is a person that lives in Finland
That should be 12:35 PM, since it wears off just after lunch rather than just after midnight.
3104865My bad. Fixed.