Growing up, you always thought getting an eye-scar would be cool. Like it would be a symbol of your many victories in battle. Now that you have one, you realize that it's just a testament to your weakness. That you couldn't be stronger. That you failed.
Now you walk the streets of Ponyville alone. The ponies you once called your acquaintances shun you and pay you no mind. All except for one cross-eyed Pegasus who's blatantly unaware of your hell.
Perhaps she's the first in a long time you can call 'friend.'
Here’s a theme I think could work for the story. Got a better one? Let me know in the comments. Take Us Back by Alela Diane.
Hey, if you liked the story, you think you could add it to a group or two?
Intresting. I like it
Could use some spelling and grammar work, but not bad at all.
is this it? I. want. more.
Awesome, keep it up!
Tortured for almost a year and celestia just gives him a month. If I was her he would be living it up his whole life
1. In real life I have a lot of scars, no eye scars though
2. THE FEELS!
...An explanation will come.
next time using colors changes between people talking would help.
You know what? I'm probably dead wrong, but I'm just gonna go on ahead and say that this is all in his head, because
A) its a torture and interrogation technique designed by Chrysalis to make him think he's safe, or
B) this is just a fantasy world he created to try and escape his misery in the dungeon
3160639 Thanks for the tip. I fixed it up.
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*Huddles in close*
Don't tell anyone, but I'm saving it for the next story.
*Injects needle*
Just lie down... Shh....
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*struggles in vain*
No! No! Noooooo!
*falls to the floor unconscious*
holy shit this is awesome
fav'ed
3160648 So it's either The Matrix or Sucker Punch. Not an ideal situation.
I'm still saying what I said in my comment in the previous chapter
awesome chapter
*reads chapter*
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Thats it. Blaze needs to die
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I agree with you Anon...... and solve the problem with cousin love
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Man, he´s been through some shit, but he´s a good man, definitely trustworthy.
Hoorah!
Well.
Hoorah.
i like the addition of the jacket, since i practically live in hoodies also great chapter, although i would have liked it if we could have knocked out a few teeth
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Oh, then you'll just LOVE what I have planned for our little friends here.
...Both Blazer and Anon..
3248653 WELL then i have something to look forward to
you are really good at character building though short, still a great chapter
ATRGJHGLKHEFGWEIDHLSUJKNG! When will this poor guy catch a break?
Wow if i had any doubt about following this story, you just destroyed it with Mad world, instantly i heard Gary Jules version.
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He will catch a break when he dies. For death is the greatest curse to be laid on someone but then also the greatest blessing. A curse for leaving your friends and family to deal with your parting and the hole left without you while they are forced to live, and a blessing for the release from your stuggles and whatever plagues you. To finally not have to worry about anything anymore....
Ok I really need to get some sleep. I get a little philosophical when I'm tired.
awesome also mini chapters does this mean that you will be uploading more frequently?
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Great chapter
Milkshake is good..yes...
My word the feels in this story...it's deep.
Awesome Dinky is awesome.
So, Are they humans with wings and coats? Ponies with fingers? I'm getting confused.
All efforts you say? I approve.
My god The feels!!!
More chapters I demand IT! because its such agreat story!
More please.
This story is so good! More chapters please!
Johnny cash - hurt. Check it out, I think it fits for this. Great work. MOAR
So its been what 6 months since a chapter? Hopefully he releases a lot at once or they're longer instead of just 1000 words.