At Canterlot High, Rainbow Blitz, the new kid in school, goes through his new life, since his parents died. Now, he has to make new friends. And one of those friends? A tomboy named Rainbow Dash. He talks to her, and they become friends. Then, they start to hang out, then forming the most awesome couple there has to be!
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Fan Without A Face
Charles Spratt!
Art: JaquelinDreamz!
r63 shipping? Meh, I liked it.
6107844 Many thanks. I hope this isn't a fail. I just seem to like this rule 63 couple very much.
6107849 It's not without flaws, but I'd give it a 6/10.
6107864 Do you know any good proofreaders that can help? I'm kinda scared and alarmed right now.
I really like where this is going. I want to see how blitz would react if rainbow dash or her friends found out about his brother's nickname for him.
Enjoyed. And looking forward to more chapters!
6107921 I know two good ones.
Charles Spratt
Never2muchpinkie
6108383 Many Thanks! I do believe I need a little fix with proofreading, so that my story gets slightly better. Still, you are awesome. #StayAwesome
I do not know if you have any comments on your story yet, however, I personally liked it, for me, the mark of a good author is a story that can draw me in, yours made that mark, so, not only did you take an upvote from me, but you got hung on my Favorites list.
Only comment I can make is there were some issues with Grammar, but beyond that, I really did enjoy the story, going to upgrade you to my readers choice level.
6108633 not too bad to start off. A few grammar issues but not too serious.
Aside from the fact that you switch tenses constantly, it's not too bad, from a grammatical point of view. It's certainly interesting, so... you have that. Anyway, I just finished editing the first chapter. It should be in your PM box soon. Cheers
Im down cant wait for future updates
I'm pleased with what I'm seeing so far.
What kind of motorbike does he drive?
6134341 Let's say Razor.
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Hmm.
Not...bad, actually.
I'm pleasantly surprised at the quality of this story. It's not the best, of course, but it's pretty enjoyable.
Pretty interesting character, Rainbow Blitz. Reminds me of Batman. (Then again, I've been watching a lot of Arkham Knight vids lately; Batman's on my mind.)
You have my upvote and my Tracking.
6148899 I love Mr. Pyg in Arkham Knight. Don't have game, though. But thanks for review.
This sarcasm line though:
I really like where this is going
need I say more...
6149491 I honestly think Charles made that one.
Enjoyed.
6149725 Eeyup
6149725 Nicely done.
Mm it appears the author loves Gatorade.
6216595 You bet your candy ass I do! quickmeme.com/img/25/257886cc34dfc1f08a4a14d47886e3518fe5e4b0b2c36a5689223b400e17bf56.jpg
I do not like Gatorade.
...I'm dead, aren't I? Yep, very dead. I just signed my own trip to ten feet underground and in a nice suit.
6216625 Your not alone. I don't hate it but I rarely drink it.
you should introduce Twilight in the next chapter.
6216602 I drink plenty of the stuff. It's awesome.
6216602 great stuff keep up the good work. Love the cover art.
Wow... *gasp* oh my celestia I love this story so much x you probably get this alot but..... when's the next chapter..... .... anyhow GREAT CHAPTER AND GREAT STORY X
Well, this is embarrassing, considering that I'm the one who originally edited this dang thing, but... I noticed a couple of errors I missed the first time:
Missing question mark after name.
What the heck is grink?
Missing question mark again.
Sorry bout that . Cheers
6316132 But hey, doesn't mean I'm eliminating you. You rock!
6316150 Thanks. Would you mind fixing those few grammar errors I pointed out for me? I'd do it myself, but... well, as I said before, I'm not a hacker.
looking forward to the next chapter!!
6316170 Did it!
once I got the controls down, I'd have a field day with that class. but if its PG to mildly PG-13 rated, I'm screwed. I never was nor have I ever been good about filtering out expletives, then again I never really bothered to.
Ouch!
oooooooooooooooooooooooooooo things are getting good!!
Im surprised this isn't more popular, it's really good!
Loved it!
I already punched the like button in the face like a boss, slapping it would just be overkill. also great chapter, its very similar to what happened when my family found out I had a gf.
1,000 views! Thanks, guys!
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Oh, that son of a—
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When Blitz threw that last ball, I couldn't stop myself from picturing the ball doing a Sonic Rainboom into Rush's face.
Wow, I didn't know he could lip read fast. In fact, I didn't know he could shout quietly.
6471724 bruh... Unnecessary sass...