Hey what up im rainbow skies this is my profile thing hope you like my stories and some other stuff as well but stay frosty later
Page generated in 0.256 seconds
Total duration
651 users online
937,935 hits today, 2,130,388 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
Here's my constructive criticism:
Put it through the design phase and have someone check it over for spelling.
While making a fic, you have to ask yourself, "Do we really need this?"
Think it over.
7476208 also i think about if y'all need this and in my head no out side my head hell yeah
I see potentional in the story, but you need to work on spelling and grammar.
Also question if he's a ghost why didn't he pass through the walls or let their weapons pass through him.
I think this was written in M3M3SP3AK
Moar!!!
7477552 YES!
MOAR!!!
7477088 i well he only looks like a ghost fox hes not actually a ghost
7477088 also if he was a ghist he wouldnt be able to take or hold Ragnarok
7479000 *ghost*
7479000
7478941
If that's the case you should describe that the fur that covers him seems ghostly white. Also some ghost have been known to pick up objects and or in some cases people.
But the story is yours do with as you will. Just don't make any one op please
7479570 sorry i forgot but i did say he had ghostly blue fur and i wont make no one op they have my characters are always different power levels
7480143
From one writer to another I was just pointing something out. This story is yours
This needs an editor, badly. Other than that, its a good story.
7494260 can i be a editor?
a lot of spelling errors
you really need a editor or at least double check your work. Because there are so many small errors that should be easy to see
Update?
7511874 soon i pinkie promise just have school to deal with
You need an editor
You need an editor
7529844 I agree.
I have a story similar to this, except it's pokemon and Lloyd is an asshole.
I like the idea of the story but....... it's a mess. There are too many issues I have with this. Like misspelled words, improper grammar, etc. But I'm just some 13 year old. What do I know?
I just noticed, this has a sex tag! I wonder how this will turn out if the last chapter is anything to go by.
Can you call them the vortex gauntlet and stardust sword?
7612470 sure
7612684 k
This story seem interesting, but I can't make any sense out of where it is trying to go. I read about a quarter of the way and I could not find what was happening. I am sorry, but you need a proof reader and editor to see what you have.
This looks like a good story, but I just couldn't get past the broken English. I'm not voting either way. If the Author can get a proof reader to clean it up I would be happy to give it another chance.
7620512
7618588
I agree with these two
I love the story dude! Sure your grammar could use more work, but it's still AWESOME!
waaaaay to rushed.
p.s. find an editor
7612684 need more chapters got into it
7612684 are you ever going to continue this story?
7931256 maybe havent really thought of a plot maybe but when i do its probably gonna be a long story
7931397 ok
Well it is pretty unedited but it is still readable, which is nice. Pretty sweet story bruh :).
Yes new chapter
Good chapter rainbow as always
WOOOOHOOOOOO!!!!!! New chapter, alright!
Mmk
Downvoted without reading. Sorry, not sorry.
Capitalization and punctuation are not a luxury. If you haven't bothered to make your story description presentable, I doubt the story itself is much better. Yes, I'm judging the book by its cover.
It's not that hard to run your texts through a spellcheck, at least.
Think like anime and it's fine.
7947713 think like anime,
media1.giphy.com/media/AtEPupW96C2g8/200_s.gif
be like anime
7947953 *clap...clap...clap* well done sir i tip my hat for you *tips hat*
7949536 nah but seriously thats funny
Sheit is actually shite in irish slang which is also shit
7951534 you know at first i spelt it shite then thought that was wrong and put sheit didnt know it was shite the more you know