This story is a sequel to Not Just A Bug
So, here I am. Settling down in equestria, A place I can finally call home. Remember my last journal? Yes? Then you know Thorax, right? Well he turned out to be one of my best friends in that time period. At first, I trusted him as far as I could throw him, which probably would be kinda far, but I never tried. Now it's nice to have a friend who you can talk to without having to worry about him bitting your head off..
Well shit just got real again. After news comes to the Empire that there might be changelings like Thorax in the Everfree, Shingning, Me, and Thorax (after some presution) and some guards go out to see if it's true.
As you can guess, shit gets real. Real fast.
And now I'm lost in the damned Everfree. Again. With nothing but my rifle and pick.
This seems familiar...
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No editors?
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Not yet, but I'm having a friend edit very soon.
CAN'T WAIT TILL NEXT CHAPTER PLZ HURRY
Giving me a clear view
I also noticed you kept spelling Shining with double N.
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Sorry about that, autocorrect didn't say anything.
I don't think that phrase means what you think it means.
*you're
they're
you're
PFFGRRAKUKEKEKEKEKEKEKE!
if things are not shitty enough now we have Timber wolves in the mix of all this.
In not is
Months not mouths
Throw me in this. I'm a changeling.
*arrow hits the leg*
"FK!"
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XD auto correct. Gotta love it.
Am just so happy that it is a season 2.
Love Not just a bug,
keep up the good jobb
And stay just as cool
Mentioning the knife twice.
You mean ‘wether’?
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Thank you for pointing them out. They have been fixed.
I love telltale stuff, and this story keep going
(Make yourself known)
known
known
(Make yourself Known)
He gonna be seen
go say hi
Um make you self known?
Known. He is not a pony so they will be less hostile. Plus in the wood with ponies hunting changelings you need every help you could get. And if shit happened, he still has gun.
You mean ‘‘sense’’?
‘‘the pain in my knee’’
You forgot an apostrophe.
‘‘a blast’’?
The ‘‘Know’’ is missing an ‘n’.
Also, I go for option one. It seems likely to me that they become aware of him, eventually, so he might as well go for the inevitable.
dont u mean at all? not all all
make yourself known
MAKE YOU SELF KNOWN!!!
And then meet Nightshade the runaway changeling.
reflexes
themself
us
‘‘what I say’’
The ‘‘but’’ is not necessary
you're
‘‘what I say’’
‘‘and one of their arrows hit me in my leg’’?
you're
met, past tense
agree with Luo.
don't go to the town, why you ask? because it's obviously Sunny Town!
Let march back to the castle, better stick around familiar ground.
castle
My gut says castle but my head says town...i say castle
were
Emoticons may be used in an author's note, but not in the actual chapter
1: changeling's
2: The phrasing makes it seem like he asked if the name was alive.
Either ‘‘That's’’ or ‘‘That is’’
that
catch
except
the
Wait, what?
an
met
descend
Eight what? Meters? Centimeters? Feet? Goombas?
me
they're
their
Second ‘‘changelings’’ needs an apostrophe before the S.
they're
an
Also, the ‘‘That’’ I put in italics would make more sense to be a ‘‘The’’.
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Is Sunny Town something from the show? I do not remember.
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Sunny town is a mlp creepypasta. It has its own game, which I don't remember the name of.
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it's not from the show is a fan fiction. Applebloom find a village in the everfree forest, she met ponys with no cutie marks how call theme self "the blanks."
it's a horror story.
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Something about "Village of the blanks" or summat.
Go to the castle. Anyone who don't afraid changelings one site after invasion should not be trusted.
the town is sketchy as fuck, the castle probably only has ghosts and boobytraps.
i'd take the castle.
I agree with Sean, let's go to the town.
GO TO THE FRICKIN CASTLE BC THE TOWN IS OBVIOUSLY F*CKING SUNNYTOWN
Now what is left for them to do is to get out of the castle without those hunters noticing.
...Which will probably end up being very difficult.
Now for the (potential) errors.
the
‘‘get moving, then’’?
‘‘be moving, then’’?
‘‘That vine that you see right there?’’
Not sure what that is supposed to be.
there
‘‘I can also hear’’
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Thank you for point those out.
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They have been fixed.
I want to say, 'go to town,' because it might be starlight's town. I then realized her town was nowhere near the everfree. Then people started going on about sunnytown.
I now think that going to the castle is the most logical choice.
"But, what fun is there in making sense?"
let's go to the town!
What about the changeling that attacked him that he shot in the first story?
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David didn't think much about killing that one because he didn't know much about changelings then. He didn't think changelings were intelligent then.
(In reality, I shamefully admit that I forget about that scene in the first story, so... yeah. I feel pretty stupid now. Probably going to go back and it, or at least explain it like this comment says. ;-;)
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maybe you could play it off as him acting more defensibly against the changeling while here it was closer to him initiating the attack
Ooh the f*ckin dramatic flashbacks
Also I have an idea... you could double the rifle and give them to Sean and Luo, although then there’s another one there, and let’s try to guess who gets that one..
(Maybe another changeling or a pony on ur side?(
yep it is starting to hit the fan now.