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I know it is an...exotic way to post a story. But my inspiration worked in such a way, haha. Do not worry, the chapters are supposed to be more like little stories united by one topic, they can be read in any order.
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Sorry! I quite honestly just wanted to check how people would react to my writing and the second chapter seemed more logically complete that the first one, that is still in progress!
Hope it is not too much of a trouble ;-;
DDDDDAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWW!
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:3
Embarrassed Twi is the best Twi
You really need a native English speaker to go over your writing. I mean, no offense, your English is way better than my skill at any other language, but as it is your prose is very awkward. Fun story, though.
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;-;
*dies*
Do you think there is any way I can improve this work in particular and my writing in general on my own? I quite frankly want to stay self-sufficient when it comes to writing. I am still learning to write good fics indeed, but my goal is to master my prose by all means.
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Eh, y'see, English is just a bastard (literally, even; it's an unholy union of Anglo-Saxon, Old Norse, and Norman French mashed together in the most perverse ways possible.). It's big and convoluted and a lot of the time it's just plain stupid. We're really sorry that the Brits and us Americans establishing hegemony over most of the world one after another turned our beautiful, terrible language into the Lingua Franca. It was an accident, we swear.
This all makes it really tough for a non-native speaker to sound 'right' without serious immersion. Hell, I have a buddy at work, smart guy, who's been here for thirty years and I still have to edit his emails for him. But that's okay. Just remember that every good author has a great editor behind them. And this site has a few groups devoted to helping authors find editing help. I'd offer myself, but I'm a completely unreliable flake and you haven't done anything I'm aware of to deserve that level of frustration. Take care and keep writing.
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Haha, thanks for your opinion though! I will do my best, might even look for an editor once I am done.
Still Moon Dancer?
Panty swapping is awesome.
Wow what's next, Moon Dancer shows up with constrictions on her body?
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I like the way you think~
Just imagine Moondancer sending herself to Twilight in a box as if she was merely a fuck doll.
I want to write such a story.
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Mhm~ Especially when the panties were a little worn before the actual swap and now smell of their sexy owners :3
Istorija buvo puiku! Man patiko simbolių tobulinimas ir būdas, kuriuo perėjote tarp scenų! Jūsų apibūdinimas privertė mane laimingai, ir aš tikiuosi, kad tu gerai! Įsitikinkite, kad nedėkite padažo į skalbinius!
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Ehm... I don't speak Lithuanian, but I used Google Translate
Thanks though! It is very important for me that you like it
More petplay. Please?
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With pleasure!
Why do I feel that Twilight will create some tentacles and break them?
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Haha, I don't envy Twilight's girls then
MOREEEEE DOMINATION PLSSSSS I LOVE MISSTRESS TWILIGHT
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Who doesn't~?
Mistress Twilight is laifu
love mistress sparkle
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Good to see I'm not the only one. Everypony will submit to Sparkbutt~!
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yes yes they will
If anything the transition is a bit akward but it's still good.
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Thank you! I am currently trying to improve it yet I don't really know what is wrong in particular.
Twilight needs to be more dominant and take over the world.Everyone should bow down before evil mistress twighlight
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Well, my Twivi is sure not *that* kind of a mischievous girl. But she likes domming her ponies.
Dang, this was hot.
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Thank youuu! <3 It's really pleasing to hear that people enjoy it!
How do yuo manage to write such hot stories? Seriously you are incredible!
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Oh really? I am very happy to hear that, but you must be flattering me! Thank you nonetheless, I love being praised, haha.
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I was being sincere. I liked the story. Anyway think what you like
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Oh no, sorry, I didn't mean it to sound like an insulting thing!
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No offence taken, don't worry. I did not mean to sound angry. Mine was a true compliment and I am sorry if my previous answer sounded rude. If only I could write stories like you do!
Anyway keep up the good work. I am gonna be one of your followers from now on.
Is this going to get a continuation or is it over?
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I am so sorry dear! I feel severely down and depressed due to personal reasons, so the future of this work I love so much is vague at the moment.
This is spectacular, your descriptions are better than mine.
As I understand it, it's not worth waiting for a continuation...