"Some people just need a high five....in the face....with a chair"
James is a twenty eight year old man who is driving to meet his girlfriend, they have been holding a long distance relationship for a long time now, but James wanted to surprise her by visiting her, but on his way there he feels a strange tugging sensation in his chest, he is knocked out by a strange force and everything goes black, when he wakes up he finds himself laying on the forest floor, he soon discovers that he is no longer in his body.
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It's "Propose" darling
I'm not gonna nitpick through this story but I give this a 7/10 So far. Keep continuing this, this has potential to be a great story. Little rough 'round the edges but you'll improve.
And why did you turn off the ratings?
Story is pretty good, you just need an editor.
8426855
thanks and yeah pretty much my first time really writing
and I didn't know I turned them off..
8426949
yeah I don't know how or where to get one..
8426953
It's probably just me. Your welcome!
8426961
Maybe I could, just maybe?
8426967
if you would like to id be very happy if you did
8426969
Yeah, I'd like to.
8426973
thanks, so to do it all I need to do is set that password right? then send you the password?
8426982
Pretty sure
8426991
Ok I'll try that
8426996
Okie dokie
loving the story so far keep up the good work
thanks abunch
Great story. A few missing commas but still really good.
Pretty good!
8428334
thanks
8428102
thanks
A comedy-drama-adventure-tragedy... So you're aiming for the level of "Adventure Time", "Gravity Falls", "Mighty Max", and "Steven Universe"... them's some big foot prints to step into.
And you say this is your first story ever... I do hope you're at least thinking the plot through carefully and outlining.
Interesting idea, minor spelling errors to deal with though
8428351
well im not trying to make it as good as those shows, that would be nearly impossible for me, but I have seen almost all those shows you listed so I could make this story almost as good? but I don't know we'll just have to see.
and yes I am making a plot for it
8428709
yes I have an editor whos really helping alot
The universe's voice sounded an awful lot like John DeLancie...
8430951
Hehe yes, that or Morgan freeman
Nice c:
8432529
Thanks
Wait. wut?
So Human Guy is now in Chrysalis' Sister's Dead-But-Somehow-Mysteriously-Recreated-Body?
Why is this happening even?!
8450921
The next chapter will explain somewhat but the rest of the mystery will be explained with the rest of the story
Sooo I waitet ONE full day and no new chapter NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
8464244
Well I did just post two new ones, I'm afraid you'll have to wait a bit to read the next one, it's still being written
8464355
I know I know its joust hard to stay quiet if you a bit over hypet
8464364
It's really good to hear someone is this excited for my story though, I'm glad you like it so much
Well, no one can say I didn't give this a chance.
You reaaaaaaaally should have focused on the goofball comedy. I might have given the terrible pacing, frantic escalation, feeble characterization, and grating plotting a pass.
But now it's trying to take itself FAR too seriously for a ridiculously cliché idea.
8465217
Huh well I'm just trying to write what I like, just trying to get it out there.
Sorry you didn't like it
:p
8465574
good comment
8466021
lol
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what are we even doing honestly?
8466598
Heck if I know
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.-.
Changeling 1: did...did we just score new jobs?
Changeling 2: uhh, looks like it.
8470777
Son of a arghhhh!!!!
8470777
Also thanks for noticing that it's now fixed
NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO CNAT BE OVER
Or will there be a sequel
i hope a sequel coming out soon from this fanfic...
Well i have to wait for a sequel(is there's a posibility of course) c:
8475264
I'm really glad you liked the story enough to want a sequel
8474665
Yes it is over, the story was my first in here and I'm glad some people liked it
And who knows?
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There could be