"I'm bored." Scootaloo and the other crusaders had been stuck in the clubhouse for the better part of the day trying to figure out what they would try to do next to find out their special talent.
"C'mon Scoots we'll think of something we can do to find our cutie marks!" Sweetie Belle said, trying to cheer up the mood in the clubhouse.
"Seriously Sweetie, look at all the stuff we've tried to do already. I mean, a Cutie Mark in garbage collecting?" Scootaloo held up a shoddily drawn image of a pony dragging a filled trash can.
"Come on Scootaloo, we'll figure out what to do next soon enough. Ah'm sure of it." Apple Bloom said as she grabbed the drawing from Scootaloo's hooves and added it to the —rather large— pile of 'Failed Cutie mark Attempts'.
"And this time we didn't even get covered in tree sap!" Sweetie happily added.
"No, we just got covered in trash which I think is one of the things that are worse than tree sap." Scootaloo said as she got up and headed for the door. "I'm going to Twilight's, I need to do some repairs to my scooter. She has manuals that can help."
"Wait! What?!" Apple Bloom shouted.
"You are going to voluntarily read books?!" Sweetie Belle followed up after Apple Bloom.
"Who are you and what have you done to Scootaloo?" Apple Bloom said with a baffled expression on her face.
"Unless one of you two has an idea for finding our cutie mark. Otherwise, it's better than sitting around doing nothing." Scootaloo said as she stepped on to her scooter. "See you tomorrow at school?"
Apple Bloom and Sweetie Belle looking at each other. "Sure thing, Scoots," Apple Bloom finally answered after an uncomfortable silence. "See ya tomorrow!"
And with that, Scootaloo shot off on her scooter towards Twilight's tree library where, unbeknownst to her, Twilight was busy creating a portal using high powered magic.
"Spike, do you have the charged gemstones?" Twilight asked as she was painting magic circles on the floor of the library."I'm almost done with the circles!"
"Are you sure it's safe to do this in the main room of the library Twilight? This is probably the most high powered experiment we have ever done!"Spike shouted from the basement, which, since Twilight had moved into the library, had been converted to a science lab.
"I don't really have any place else to do this Spike, these circles have to be very large and I don't want to do it outside because of thaumic radiation hazards." Twilight said as she walked to the middle of the circle, "Now can you bring the crystals over here please?"
Spike came up the stairs from the basement carrying a box of glowing gems, "Do we have to use these for the experiment, they look delicious!" Spike said while licking his lips.
"No Spike, I got these from Cadance and believe me, they aren't cheap trinkets. These are the most high-quality gems the Empire digs up." Twilight swiftly grabbed the box of gems from Spike and placed the gems in a pre-determined pattern in the magic circles. "Now spike I want you to get up to the second floor, any disturbance down here will probably cause a catastrophic explosion."
Spike, not really wanting to get blown up today, went up the stairs to look at the experiment from the second floor.
"Now what were we trying to accomplish by doing this again?"
Twilight internally sighed a bit. "We're attempting to make a portal between Canterlot castle and the Crystal Spire, to do that we need to be able to make a rift in space and attach it to an object, link the object with another object to create a bridge between them and then make a physical portal that allows for direct travel between the 2 locations"
"Uhm Twilight, I have no idea what you just said."
"Ugh, just stay up there Spike I'll need to combine a few spells to successfully attach the rift to an object."
As soon as Twilight's horn started to glow, tendrils of magic started to come from the crystals and fed into the circles on the ground. After about 10 seconds the magic stopped coming from the crystals and they stopped glowing right as the circles started to light up.
"Let's do this!"
Scootaloo raced through Ponyville, bobbing and weaving through the crowd. The other crusaders stayed behind at the clubhouse. Unlike usual days, she wasn't performing any stunts with her scooter as there was a nasty crack in the board and she hoped that either something in the library could help or that Twilight would know a spell that could fix up the board itself.
As she approached the Library she sped up a bit as the crowds seemed to thin a little bit. As she crossed the final corner in the direction of the library her luck took a turn for the worse. She hit a rock on the road, causing her scooter to break through the middle and launching her at the library door.
The door was thrown inward breaking the lock and with Scootaloo landed straight into a circle of what looked like some glowing chalk on the floor.
"SCOOTALOO DON'T MOVE!" a heavily distorted voice called out to her, looking over to where the voice came from she found that Twilight was standing in the middle of the room magic floating around her in an intricate pattern. "Scootaloo I need you to slowly walk backwards out of the library." Terror was clearly showing on her face as she tried to keep control of the spell she was casting.
Scootaloo slowly took a step backwards, keeping her vision pointed at twilight, causing her to trip on one of the crystals. The circles on the ground flared around her, the moment Scootaloo belly flopped. The magic tendrils around Twilight slammed into the crystals causing the entire room to light up as bright as the sun momentarily.
And then everything went silent, not even the sound of the wind blowing through the library's leaves could be heard.
"Twilight, what's going on?" Scootaloo whispered.
"I was making a rift in space to create a portal" Twilight whispered back "There was a lot of magic that went back into those crystals, there is no way that the light is the only side effect from the spell collapsing."
A soft humming started coming from the middle of the room as blue light appeared to come from the center of the room opening up in a black sphere. Twilight had jumped towards Scootaloo and put up a shield before the sphere got the chance to grow to the size of the entire bottom floor, only to collapse moments later.
As the sphere collapsed in on itself, it left a gigantic gap in the library wall.
And both Twilight and Scootaloo were nowhere to be found.
Been awhile scince ive seen a new halo story on here
Whelp, I'm tracking this.
It's spelled Sweetie Belle.
Sweetie Belle's name should be capitalized. You are not making her happy right now...
Creating should be lowercase.
Charged should be lowercase. By the way, love the transition line.
Who shouted up from the basement? And Spike's name should be capitalized.
Again, capitalize names.
So, to sum up, you have a few grammatical errors you might wanna take a look at. Other than that, this seems like a good premise. My suggestion is to find yourself an editor, especially if this is your first story. Luckily, there's a group on this website for just that purpose: Looking for Editors
A Halo story with my name on it?
How can I resist.
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just fixed those errors
I'll see if I can get an editor
You have my attention
You have my attention, please keep writing, I would love to see more of this story.
See you next chapter, hopefully soon,
Shadow Quill, Messenger of the Moon.
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I'm putting the next chapter up on Saturday
Don’t have time to read just yet, but you defiantly have my attention
Seems good so far. Hopefully your first attempt at writing fanfiction will be met with success. However the story turns out, I'm rootin' for ya!
You have disturbed the circles! You shall now live in interesting times.
Also, your lucky numbers are, 13, 6, and 117.
Thank you for flying FUBAR lines, we hope you survive your trip. Have a good time!
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LMAO
Well done.
[Spike carrying came up the stairs from the basement carrying a box of glowing gems,]
You used a word in the wrong part of the sentence here.
[I was making a rift in space to create a portal from]
Is that last word supposed to be there?
Well that's all the grammar errors I could see. Hope that helps.
Stories great so far!
When did twilight have time to talk to scootaloo after she jumped after her into the portal?
Question: What about Spike?
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He'll come up
You had my curiosity, but now you have my attention...
Your page breaks are nice and I love the way you show us whose perspective it is. The image are pretty and instantly recognizable.
I thank you because I love these type of stories where a pony end up on earth(or a earth like universe) but what I don’t like is when they just try to make it a prison escape from a hidden lab trying to dissect said pony.
So once again I thank you
Typical Twilight Experiment fanfic. Not that that’s a bad thing, just cliche, lol.
Though I will say Twilight’s logic for doing it in the library is stupid.
Welp, their dead. End of the story. Rap it up, where's the end credits screen, we need to tag that on right here.
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yes, that's exactly what happened.
Accidental Slipspace rupture!
Cutie Mark Crusader Slipspace Pioneer! YAYY!
I have read this like....26 times..... at minimum, and i still find myself loving it every re-read
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When has Twilight logic ever made sense?
So twilight sparkle gets sucked in huh this is going to be an Interesting read
A finished Halo x MLP Fimfiction story?
That pretty rare!
Looking forward to this adventure 👍