Spike is a dragon who was raised by ponies. Rarity is one of the most successful fashionistas in all of Equestria. This is the story about how a certain drake won the heart of his special lady and the lives they build with each other. Many challenges await our intrepid heroes, from threats to Equestria to the matters of the heart.
(The story will mostly be Sparity, but like a newly opened harbor they'll be more ships in future. Would hate to make anyone feel left out.)
Editing done by the ever reliable Misty Dolphin
Oh man this is great. It if fun seeing all the crazy shit Spike had to deal with on this day. I hope next chapter can be from Rarity's perspective and we get to have some idea on how she feel, or bud of feelings for Spike. So when she gets back he can confess to her.
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As much as I HATE spoilers, I will say that it is in deed from Rarity's perspective. Bit of a writer's block on the chapter, but I'll power through it :)
Heck of a job, Wit.
You did well in creating an active world. The characters act as they should amidst the chaos. It's been a while since a story hooked me into seeing a pairing like a carrot dangling from a string.
Beware to proofread. Nothing major. Sporadic missing punctuation. Nothing to hamper the story but hurts immersion.
Keep writing.
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Darn, I thought I fixed the punctuation. I'll be more careful next chapter
This was great for sure. I love how you wrote Rarity hunting for the comic. It got the feeling of us when we are on the hunt for a comic down. What I am hoping now is we get to see Rarity really think of her relationship with Spike and just how much he means to her. It could be he has helped her out in Canterlot more than she even knew. Or something else comes up that gets her thinking of Spike. It is just as of now Spike's side of the story can't really move forward till Rarity gets back but Rarity can start to really ponder her feelings for her good friend. Anyway great chapter and I can't wait to see more
Great story so far, keep up the good work.
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Thanks so much for the kind words. At its core I wanted this chapter to show Rarity discovering that she has more in common with Spike than she realizes. Also I should probably mention that you won't be seeing any heavy emotions from Rarity...yet. I'm going for a more slow boil, see the feelings she didn't know she had come to the surface. Love takes time and true love is patient after all.
A delightful chapter.
I like a good slow cooker of a story and this seems to fit the bill well.
Good references.
I look forward to more.
Oh poo....
Spike language!
She hosed Spike dude!
Rarity how could you!
You hussy!
You be giving up his great back rubs
What have I done?
derp.
Hero, Royal connections, good cook, dragon lord, changeling king maker, cute waddle DUH!
Rodolfo?
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Hopefully Rarity will realize what a catch Spike truly is. But that's another chapter, for another time
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You write a very enjoyable story
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I'm glad you like it. My goal is to write a better chapter each time :)
Liking the story so far. Though, I will say this...please PLEASE PLEASE don't go with the cliche where the stallion Rarity dates is your typical bad person where he only likes her for looks or money or fame I'll take any other type of stallion than HIM.
Or whatever it's your story
Keep it up
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I do hate spoilers, but I will say you won't have to worry about the stallion too much. He's more of a stepping stone in a larger story. Glad you're liking it so far, hopefully I won't disappoint
Kicks Magillacutty & Buc McGee at your service
Heavy Hitter meet Tom!
I said we were never going to speak of this again
I'm seeing double,,, Wow two Raritys
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Keep writing.
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I shall 😉
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Good man.
If your gonna make Spike small and weak in here, then you probably should get artwork that signifies that, because he looks like he's in his late teens or something judging by the picture. Uuuunless he's gonna be older later in the story? Hm. I don't know, but if he's the same...12-14 year old? (at best) like in the show then of course it's not gonna work out with Rarity because she is like 21-23 (at the youngest). It's confusing. Am I missing something? Well at least you got me hooked so there's that.
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Uhhh... let's just say, the picture will make more sense very soon. 😜
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...huh. Well then, carry on.
Well, you DEFINITELY wren't kidding about your boxart that's for sure. For the most part i'm on the same boat as you about your decision to do what you did, except add a few more years to every character. Besides, this is fanfiction where people can write whatever the hell they want, i've seen stranger things, believe me, so this is isn't that far fetched. Continue on
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And I shall continue onward. Also, yeah thinking about it now adding a few more years would be beneficial. 😛
Thanks for the new chapter, can't wait to see what happens next
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You are welcome. I won't say much about the next chapter other than I'm going to have fun writing it
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Hahaha you tease
he's big
he's small
he's big!
he's too small
he's too big
he's small again
he's a little bigger
he's gigantic
he's shrinking
Poor dear, quit embarrassing him. He's perfect the way he is...
can I take a nap? All this stuff is tiring
control Spike
easy for you to say, you're not surrounded by a bunch of hot mare's ... oops
eeyep! he's really small again
Please do continue with this story !!!
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Not to worry, the next chapter is almost done. Sorry for the looooong wait. It's finals season. BUT the story shall go on!
Thanks for the new chapter, I enjoyed the read. tbh though I think I need to re-read the whole story again as I have a bad memory and can't remember what happened before this chapter, woe is me but I hope to see more Spike being bad ass and with Rarity of course lol thanks again, can't wait to see whats next, keep up the good work
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To be fair that's probably on me from the lack of updates. But I'll do everything I can to get more chapters out in a timely manner. I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter
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Hahaha don't worry, I don't mind the wait for a Sparity story I just finished re-reading it all again truth is it's a nice read and I enjoyed it. I do like my Sparity lol
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Well thank you for your patronage and kind words
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Patience dear reader. The most delicious of curry is made over time with a low flame. Then, when you bite into it, you'll experience the wonderful flavors that have accumulated, and after the flavor you get that delightful spice that brings it all together. (Translation: Apologies for the slow start, but their will be Sparity I promise.)
cozy's not a problem
why not
by the power of DISCORD!
YEPPER
thanks for the new chapter, can't wait to see what happens next
Umm, you're friends with Discord? In fact, you might actually sleep at night with Discord, who, as you may recall, also helped Tirek steal most magic of Equestria...just like Cozy Glow helped Tirek steal magic from Equestria? Just a tad hypocritical, don't'cha think? Even if you are correct that Cozy isn't reformed in this case.
Uhh, so we're just going to ignore the whole Nightmare Moon thing and how ponies pretty much accepted you right back into the royalty after you returned and nearly plunged Equestria into eternal night again?
Again, yes, Cozy Glow isn't at all reformed, but still, this is a pretty hypocritical way to go about it, as far as the ponies are concerned. You do good at playing devil's advocate with Starlight relating her own personal experiences, but seem to have other characters with nefarious pasts or incidents just gloss them over with little understanding or sympathy of releasing Cozy Glow from Tartarus. Heck, even Twilight turned Ponyville in a huge brawl after using mind-control magic in the want-it-need-it spell incident, with almost no real consequences/punishment for her behavior. Double standards?
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Hmm, I appreciate the feed back. I suppose having most of the characters being so hypocritical stems from my own untrusting issues, I felt like having someone so close only to stab you in the back would be a pretty good reason to cast doubt. Perhaps a little tactless I'll admit but it made sense to me.
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Though I will admit I didn't notice it being hypocritical. I'll try and work on that in the future
I am so intigued !!! When will Rarity know that Spike grow to protect her ? And what Is Cozy planning ! This story is awesome !
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I'm so glad you like my story. I hope you'll love the answers to your questions when they come up
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And I can't wait to show what happens next. Especially since a very important plot point is coming up.
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That just wants to make me read it more 🤣🤣 now i really cant wait
What? You don't think Twilight has good romantic chemistry with others? You're kidding, she has the heart of a saint, she's intelligent, humble, makes small things a MASSIVE deal, has ZERO knowledge of the world of romance, a dork and most importantly... absolutely and undeniably adorable! Her chemistry with how she interacts with another partner practically writes itself and I've read countless fics where it proves that. For example, this chapter right here, her chemistry with Flash felt VERY genuine and spot on. I really loved what you did with her here.
Granted, I'm bias here since she's my favorite of the mane 6. All I'm saying is.. just...come on man, give Twilight a little credit when it comes romance show her some more love like you did here...after you get back to Rarity and Spike, I'm missing those two
But besides ALL that, keep up the good work my good man.
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I appreciate the kind and passionate words. I'll be sure to show more Twilight love since she is a major character in this piece (and I suppose I'll also keep an open mind when it comes to Twily chemistry) but I am glad that the Twilight and Flash felt genuine. I didn't want Twilight to seem out of character when she approached Flash by gushing over him, norhave her so flustered that she couldn't even hold a conversation with him for more than five seconds. I felt just having a light conversation with implications of interest in each other was the happy middle between the two extremes.
i would of went with Twiluna lol
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You're not the only one to say that lol. But I think part of the fun with working with Flash Sentry is that you can basically make him however you want. I actually had a lot of fun doing Flash's dialogue because of that. However if you're interested I am working on a TwiLuna piece at the moment.
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So I've heard