Spike is invited by Smolder, to the Dragon Lands for the annual two week holiday. At first Spike is anxious yet excited to spend time with his dragon friend but when he overhears Smolder telling others that he isn’t “dragon material”, he starts to consider backing out leading to a HUGE argument between them. Will Spike’s anxiety get the better of him? What exactly is going on with Smolder? What is she hiding? Will their friendship remain soaring or go up in smoke?
This story explores the complex yet inspiring friendship between Spike and Smolder, and their emotional self-doubts. I don’t think this will be canon since this will take place before Garble is revealed to be Smolder’s sister to Spike and couple days are after Sludge abandoned Spike.
The part where Smolder explains about diet was inspired by "Smolder, the Dragon Tutor" by Smart Mouth
Nice premise here, wonder what Smolder's hiding though?
I have no idea what she´s hiding but I´m intrigued with this story
You have a pretty nice story, although if I’m being completely honest your grammar is severely lacking throughout much of it.
I’d personally suggest switching to google docs or some other software that automatically corrects mistakes like these if you haven’t already, and if you have make sure to proofread before uploading.
Unfortunately grammar is something that can easily make or break an otherwise interesting story, although luckily it’s easily fixed. You have a good story, it just needs a little polishing.
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Thanks. Glad you like the story. Yeah, I admit the writing was rushed. Could you please tell me the areas in the story for grammar mistakes? If not, then that's cool.
I'll look into Google docs and write on that for the next chapter.
Thanks for the criticism.
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Thanks! Both of Spike and Smolder aren't being truthful to each other
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Thanks for checking it out! You'll find out, soon enough, why Smolder feels alone.
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Everywhere, to be honest. I could edit it if you’d like. I won’t mess around with anything, I’ll just fix mistakes, like in your first paragraph where you wrote “were” instead of was.
I could easily copy and paste this into goggles docs.
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That would be very generous of you and I'd really appreciate it. Thank you!
Can I please get a link?
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Sure! Here
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/410595/smolder-the-dragon-tutor
I love how insecure Smolder was being.
Good to see she values Spike's friendship.
Well consider me intrigued, I've always found the relationship between smolder and spike interesting. I look forward for the next chapter!
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Hey! Thanks for checking out my story! Yeah, that's a good point! Smolder is insecure but so is Spike and they're both hiding it from each other.
We know that Spike is clearly dealing with an identity crisis and is hiding his emotions, trying to convince Smolder that he's completely happy with himself. But that increases Smolder's insecurities considering what she has to go through and what she's planning, which is not yet explained until later on!
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Thank you! I'm glad you're intrigued! Yeah, I consider Spike and Smolder's friendship to be inspiring yet complex since they're both dragons from different upbringings. They both have their own different issues to deal with, which they're not being truthful to each other about. You'll find out what the problems are later on! Especially Smolder's...
Intriguing start. I'm thinking Smolder feels more alone and isolated in the Dragon Lands than she lets on. At least, she doesn't have many there she can call friends like she would at the school, let alone those who are fellow dragons. But we'll see.
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Or most programs grammar check, honestly. Microsoft Word's grammar check and I are not always on speaking terms due to some it's ideas of "correct grammar," because while I won't claim I always have perfect grammar myself...there are plenty of times when I know better than what grammar check thinks it knows.
Ha! I wouldn't put that much faith in Google Docs grammar check.
Besides, grammar checks tend to be programmed with a grammar nazi perspective that's not always strictly necessary.
Personally, I would suggest an editor--someone alive that can communicate and explain the hows and whys with the author, and listen with the author when they hesitate or have questions. It's better in the long run, trust me. I learned a long time ago that just trusting a computer to catch or correct all of your errors will only set you up for it burning you in the end. It's still usual to have it on hand, to be sure...but not to be too reliant on it either.
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I find that google docs helps me, although I don’t have a serious grammar problem and I generally skim over anything I’ve read to check for mistakes.
Google docs shouldn’t be used as a replacement for proofreading, but it’s a decent crutch.
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I've just met a few writers who think a grammar check and spell check are all they need when it's not and shouldn't be expected to be. So I just wanted to be absolutely sure that wouldn't happen here.
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No problem. I can understand why you’d be concerned. Even if a program was 100% perfect at grammar checks it still wouldn’t improve your wording choices.
Something can grammatically correct, but still written terribly, which again, is why proofreading is important.
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Thanks! (I will have an editor for the next chapter for sure)
Smolder feels more at home in school, however on the holidays, everyone goes back to their own homes to see their families.
Hmmm well this is interesting, I can't wait for the next chapter. (dont worry i can)
Pls continue.
Is this gonna continue?
Spike&Smolder fics are fun to see.