Even a Princess deserves a little treat every now and again.
Now, if only she can find the time...
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Was this inspired by the picture?
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It was indeed; after seeing it - and thinking it was adorable - I felt compelled to write something amazing.
Instead, I wrote this.
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When it first popped up, I immediately had it saved in my gallery!
Rather nice story. Reminds me of what could be a prelude to Celestia's Dark Side, a bit like a slow but scintillating build-up to that cake addiction.
Fine job, mate.
Good job. Short, funny, believable, and no grammar errors glaring out. Just a couple spots with word repetition, but it doesn't take away from the story.
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Now all we need is a sequel about Celestia storming BonBons shop demanding an explanation.
Very nice!
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Explanation, for what? If anything, it should be Celestia doing damage control over what she bellowed at the unknown visitor which, taken out of context, is quite... lurid... for the "pure as the driven snow" princess!
Any sequel will have to include Celestia filling out all the forms and permissions (thanks Sgt Ironsides!) before dragging a veritable royally oversized entourage to Ponyville and Bon Bon's candy shop to secure a lolly. This would include the media circus that follows since it's already primed by Celestia's angry faux pas earlier. And, being herd minded creatures, nobles would swarm poor Bon Bon for their own lollipops because "monkey see, monkey do" when it involves Celestia.
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How about an explanation for why that lollipop tasted like actual crud. Or maybe a sequel where it turned out to be another one of Rainbow’s pranks, followed by Rainbow nearly gets roasted alive and running for her life. If you catch my drift.
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Celestia was commenting on what she could taste, but then she realised what she shouted - for practically all of Canterlot to hear - when she was interrupted for the third time. So 'Crap.' wasn't used as a continuation of her previous sentence, but rather as an expression of disbelief.
I guess I need to work on my phrasing, as I'm honestly quite surprised that I have to explain this.
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Yah well. Don’t sell yourself short. That little mistake of mine just means you added a bounds joke without realizing it. That deserves thumbs up in my book. 👍.
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While most of us would have said a stronger word for "crap" upon dropping a sweet treat, I understood the reference to her dilemma immediately. Not sure how I was described as not in my first comment...?
Either way, love the mini story. You should think about a mini story for Luna and, er, I dunno, a proper cup of coffee?
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You were part of the conversation, so that's why I replied to you.
OI...thot's BRILLIANT...!!!!!
That has to be the subtlest dirty joke I have read here for several years now.
BRAVO!!! WELL DONE!!!!!!
Getting lolli-blocked can be frustrating.
What? What happened???
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Go back two paragraphs and read again; it'll hopefully become clearer.