This story is a sequel to Pinkie Pegasus
Earth-pony inventor Twilight Sparkle and her friends discover a world unlike any they've seen before -- a world of fire. And it may offer clues to the history of all the varied worlds of the Space Beyond. But only if they can manage to escape its dangerously powerful inhabitants...
For more of this AU, check out the entire series, starting with:
Again, really good job on the exchanges, characterizations, action, general wrap-up and future story set-up. REALLY loved Rainbow and Pinkie's dialogue before the adventure officially began. Also appreciated Twilight being just as motivated by helping Spike learn where he came from as on exploring in general. And, yeah, the Mythology Gags are pretty well done (such as the "Number One Assistant" deal, the reference to magic being gone (for the dragons, like it was gone for a while for the ponies [other than "magnetic hooves" and the ability to still get Cutie Marks] in the ACTUAL G5 [though the dragons weren't as hindered by the loss of magic as the ponies were] and Spike briefly becoming the Dragon Lord only to give it up to somebody just as deserving), the Blood Scepter and Dragon Lord references. Also really liked the exchanges with Sear (concerning Spike, Rainbow and Pinkie) and Rage (concerning Twilight). Definitely liked how Twilight used her smarts to help restore the Dragons' magic AND appreciated the stuff about Grogar being the Dragon Mage AND the stuff about Spike's egg disappearing from this world. Also liked Sear showing the more sensitive side despite initial reluctance AND the little joking-to-prove-a-point. Also liked the stuff with Rarity and Fluttershy also helping out from a distance and getting briefed on the adventure. And the epilogue where the ending of the story was described by narration to the dragons was another beautiful touch.
REALLY looking forward to more of this series. Especially the possibility of meeting other species like Alicorns, Griffons, Hippogriffs, Changelings etc. and possibly even having a crossover adventure with Sunny and her friends. I wonder how Opaline would take meeting Grogar and how the two Mane Sixes would take meeting each other. But that's for another time.
Yes! Another story in this universe! Always so excited to see another one of these!
Yeah, well...as I recall, that's probably not happening (at least not THAT way) precisely because Commander Bronzehoof's involved.
But more on that another time!
Well, Spike should be glad to hear this, if nothing else.
Off to a great start there, Pinks.
Well, just so long as this doesn't end in a d-d-d-duel!
No, no, not that dragon--he's in the next generation of MLP.
Hmm...I wonder...
Ah...last one got a bit too greedy with the power, huh?
Keep this up, Twi, and you're going to have a title on all of the worlds you visit.
Thought so!
Oh...OH! I thought these dragons you were describing seemed familiar! And here I was about to bemoan how you had seemingly passed up the chance of just using Ember and the such. Silly me!
As always, I hope there will be more entries in this universe still to come!
cant wait to discover more spheres yay. this one smells funny.
I LOVE this AU!!
Ember, that you?
Smolder?
That or? Or this one?
I'm sensing a bit of family resemblance
Oh no, Twilight found his hobby
The actually valuable stuff
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Nope, but keep reading -- the ending of the story is a big clue here.
Shame on You, Hasbro! Some ficwriter works better than You!
Hooray! I've been waiting for the next story in the series, and you delivered wonderfully! I'm glad it was a Spike-based story, and this was a nice alternative spiritual successor to The Gauntlet.
Huh, I would've thought there'd be Ember or Smolder in here somewhere...or Garble (was he the leader of the dragon gang?). But instead, it was all original dragon characters.
Also, I am abit surprised that, upon learning Spike's egg came from the Dragon World, that they didn't try and find out who his parents were. Did Grogar steal his egg? Or was his egg already abandoned? True, he loves his pony family now, but maybe Spike is still interested in whether he has dragon parents that are still mourning the loss of their egg? Maybe Twilight should follow up?
Night Light: Don't forget your lunches!
Velvet: And be sure to take along coats and scarves!
Twilight: Moooom! It's a scorching hot lava world!
Velvet: ....Earmuffs too, then! And sunscreen!
I mean, incipient geysers are kinda geography and geology themselves, so...
Uhh, didn't Twilight call him out on doing the exact same thing and going into the lair to take the scepter in the first place? So he technically passed the challenge long before Sear did. But that's part of why she thought maybe he'd be an okay predecessor eventually anyways? That and he never gave up hope.
Double word there.
Can't help but wonder what it says about pegasi that they apparently need a proverb to tell them 'Fire bad!'
Er, getting the name a few paragraphs before we actually learn it there.
"and I prefer walking to any day. And I hate climbing!” (Don't care if no one gets the reference, it amused me.)
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I think you mean 'reluctantly'. 'Unwillingly' would only apply if someone was literally forcing him to do so - this is still willing, just reluctant.
Mmn, no - the narrative's been appropriately impersonal this whole time; having a sudden informality just doesn't work without an active voice in the rest of it.
Apologies for all that, just the parts that stuck out to me, either as errors or just as amusing. Story was fun, though I'm still not a fan of Pinkie speaking in italics - I get the rationale, but I don't think it works in concept or execution. But still, very neat bit of reimagining and good character work.
One thing I will say, though, is that it'd probably be a good idea to figure out some way to allow more ponies to join these expeditions than just Twilight, Spike and the pegasi. Fun as they are, only allowing them on these trips feels pretty limiting. Don't even have to limit it to the canonical main characters... though I would be interested to see AJ's reaction to these kinds of adventures, even if I don't know that she would.
Wow, hard to believe that it was just about a year since the previous story in this little series. But this was a nice return, and with some excellent world building too.
The mirror to Equestria girls!pinkiehappy:
I hope that it continues and that all worlds become one in the end! Except Grogars!
I guess you could call this, MLP: A New Era. Because well, you know, if you know.
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Typically, it's meant to be a hard-on reboot and let's just say beyond the OG Mane 6 and Spike the dragon, everyone else from G4 is not coming back. Well, in that case I still have a chance, just need permission from the author.
An oddball ghost happened across your fic and read it. Have a review!
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They did just discover the equivalent of a Stargate network I think? Or did I read that wrong?
Can someone please explain the ending. I don't get it.