This looks promising! The constant bolding of 'you' is really upping the creep factor. The writing and narration are also very solid thus far, though I hope we get more characterization in the near future. Few grammatical errors are to be found, which is always a good thing. I can tell you've either had some practice writing or spent a lot of time on this.
As of yet, I'm at a loss for what else to comment on, but know that this is some good work! I'll be sure to track this and look forward with both excitement and dread as to what's coming. I'm sure it's only downhill from here .
Thank you so much. Definitely more characterization for sure. We'll be delving pretty deeply into Winter's past, though I won't give any spoilers. Not to mention a huge reveal in chapter two. I hope you'll really enjoy the story going forward and that it'll keep you at the edge of your seat.
This looks promising! The constant bolding of 'you' is really upping the creep factor. The writing and narration are also very solid thus far, though I hope we get more characterization in the near future. Few grammatical errors are to be found, which is always a good thing. I can tell you've either had some practice writing or spent a lot of time on this.
As of yet, I'm at a loss for what else to comment on, but know that this is some good work! I'll be sure to track this and look forward with both excitement and dread as to what's coming. I'm sure it's only downhill from here .
Thank you so much. Definitely more characterization for sure. We'll be delving pretty deeply into Winter's past, though I won't give any spoilers. Not to mention a huge reveal in chapter two. I hope you'll really enjoy the story going forward and that it'll keep you at the edge of your seat.