We have all read the stories about a human waking up as N.M.M in the castle of the two sisters heck even I've read a bunch of them. They were always my favorite with a normal guy trying not to get blasted by rainbows for having the same body as some villain.
But never thought that could happen to me!
Now my hair is on fire, I'm most likely 6 years old and this castle I woke up in looks an awful lot like a certain one that located in the magical land of Equestria.
But that's only fiction right?
Well if there is one positive thing about this...I got to keep my hands.
(level 4 anthro)
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yay small fire child story go!
I like it so far, and am looking forward to where it's gonna go from here!
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In the chart Nr:4 second from the left
I want moar... I need moar... Gimme Gimme Gimme.
I have to wonder, though. Is this version of Equestria one where Celestia went coo-coo instead of Luna? Or is it still a NMM version of Equestia?
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Thanks
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Oh yeah still N.M.M Equestria that's the big thing instead of a human in NNM body we got daybreaker. kinda like Living nightmare but with daybreaker
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Well, I'm looking forward to where this story goes, you have my attention! :)
welcome to my folder
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Except, that "Stellar Nova" really was a kid, but in the opposite gender, and he came from 1998, died, and was kidnapped three times by bad ponies who thought they were doing good.
the name is*
Nice start👌
given the chart, I like stage 3 anthro the best.
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same
What does N.N.M. mean?
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I believe it was supposed to be N.M.M. Which is Nightmare Moon.
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NMM is short for NightMare Moon
So far it's not bad. The only thing that worries me is what you have planned. I'm not asking for spoilers or anything but just watching the MC try to convince people she's not evil isn't really interesting by itself. In any case I'll at least give it a shot.
Relatable with almost everyone on this site. We feel your pain.
I love the story and I love the picture of the author have a favorite in a like
Ya'know I've only seen one other human turned daybreaked story so I'm liking this sofar
Ah. So NNM was a typo.
Yay
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Eh it was the best comparison I could think of the concept same with smol villain but otherwise it deviates heavily. It was just the best example I could think of
Hello, I am looking forward to new episodes, by the way I have also seen your library and practically read half of your library
Missed punctuation, here and there.
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Pretty much only 3 is counted as anthro. 4 is a "kemono", an anime-ish character with human face and body and some animal features like ear and tail, and 2 is a cartoonish upright quad, heh.
Rather if it was just straight pony and not anthro. Think it would be more interesting if she was actually Daybreaker in form too, since it would give Celestia the willies, where as an anthro DB would be equal parts confusing as concerning. That and to every other pony she’d still be recognisable as a pony and not some weird hybrid.
Beginning was good, until it hit human part, I mean the start was fine but one of the main problems I see this the MC sounding like she's talking in the Royal canterlot voice everytime she shouts which is very annoying personally but after that pretty good, happy the MC didn't just panic and freak out for no reason and saw reason and set herself a goal Plus the fact you made the MC a She, which is something you rarely see on here.
PS: with the MC becoming Daybreaker/solar flare I would have preferred it being normal ponies and not anthro because personally that would have been more interesting but this works fine
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I get that it can be a little confusing but it shows how loud she is screaming. If you're facing down your death at the hands of some magical fire tornado you would be pretty loud as well (at least I would be) XD
Also the anthro part I might MIGHT when I'm finished with this story do another one with the same concept but pony instead of anthro if people still want it when I finish this story.
I get that anthro isn't for everyone but for the story I want to tell its needed. Right now we get smol fire child
Hope you guys understand :D
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Oh I understand completely, but on how loud she is? Uh for canterlot voice I would be fine with this but a human shouting I think all caps would work but it's up to you and you write the way you want to
Love the idea and the writing is good, I just really don't like anthro...
WAS THAT A PORTAL TO HELL????!!!
I love it keep it up
i want more!!
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Oh believe me you will
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For non-bronies....yeah
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heh heh...Yeah, possibly
Me when this chapter got posted:
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S P E E D
luna felt a shiver go down her back while celestia felt a comrad in arms rise
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SPEED IS KEY!!!
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yay update!
Keep up the good work.
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I hope I will
I'm sorry, I really am, but I had to try my best not to laugh at that. It's such a minor mistake, it still made me smile so much. Without the space there it sounds just so ridiculous xD
Anyway, loved the chapter, can't wait for more! :)
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Facking grammarly said it was right ARG
Let the games begin! The fun has just started and I'm about to have a great time!
(This is good so far, well done.)
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Sometimes it's still worth a read over, even if Grammarly (or any other spelling tools, for that matter) tells you otherwise. I use Grammarly myself and constantly get confused by some of the changes it wants to make, I sometimes have to laugh at it. ;D
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The funny thing is I kept on thinking it must be wrong someghow but everytime i corrected grammarly went NOPE so i just went with what it said XD