Sometimes you lose yourself in your own narcissism. That's when you find out you might be the bad guy.
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Twilight Sparkle gets sent to Appleloosa to learn about the magic of friendship and get a job. Twilight will have to learn how to get friends and deal with the crime that a frontier town would have to deal with. Not to mention the problems that the Equestrian Industrial Revolution brings with it. The frontier will never be the same...
Inspired by the movie Wild Wild West.
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I take it, that this is your steampunk story?
This is looking excellent so far How can only 5 people have seen it so far... this is looking like it will be your best yet.
I'm looking forward to seeing more of this. Great to see Natura in it.
I like the hints of RariJack and also Flutterdash. I'm really hoping for some more Flutterdash...
Exporting rocks... LOL! Sounds like Pinkie is on the hard labour line this time.
At first I was thinking you might have TwiLuna shipping... but now... I think you might simply have the good ol' Pinkie x Twilight.
and Re: your authors notes... Am I one of your loyal fans?
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Yes, you are
I might do Pinkiex Twilight. I might do TwiLuna, depends on how I feel. (and in this I made Luna drop the old english because if I need her, I am terrible in writing old english.
Thanks again
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well it is in no Groups, i took care of that and added it to two Twilight Groups, hopefully it will increase the amount of readers for this ^^
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Thanks for adding it to Twilight groups.
I hope you'll like the story.
Hmn, looks interesting. Western/magic/steampunk? I like the sound of that.
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if i wouldn't have liked this Story i wouldn't have added it to the groups.
Best way would be adding it to the shipping groups, but for that i don't have enough information (namely what kind of ship it is) , i probably gonna do that when the story did process to that point.
EDIT: i just noticed that it got deleted from one group, since i didn't add it compeltly'(i dint add it to the romance folders since i don't knwo which one it takes), sry
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No problem. I don't know who I'll ship her with anyway.
I usually ship her with Pinkie Pie, but I don't know if I might ship her with Luna. Or I go with a crazy way and figure out how Pinkie and Luna get together. 
So give me time. Glad you loved the story. I have more planned and as my longtime followers would know, it gets pretty crazy up in my stories.
*spittake*
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Thanks for enjoying that part. I have always thought that would be possible. Since it is a form of personal communication, stuff like that would happen.
Well there is a Quote for that:
"The character of a character makes the character. So if you change the character for your story, why use the character at all?"
in other words:
A etabliset figure has certain personality traits, which define the figure. If you change this traits, you don't have the figure anymore, just someone who has the same name.
Seriosly i could replace 'Fluttershy' with 'old pete' and no difference was made. If i do the same with Pinkie, it would be very noticeable, since Pinkie still acts IC.
TL;DR Even in AU if you use a character at last make sure he can be recognized as this character.
I love how you have the core of each character still totally intact. That is a total winner. ... Except maybe Fluttershy. She I'm yet to be convinced about...
When Twi went to meet Fluttershy I expected her to walk in on FS and Dashie kissing... sadly that was not ment to be...
Oh well. ... hopeing for some Flutterdash later then
I knew that letter was going to be good as soon as i saw Twilight call Celestia "Celly" . Twilight must have been Seriously Drunk to write that one ...
actually i am kinda surprised she did not end up in bed with Pinkie ...
Sry to say this but you lost me. The first chapter was really neat, but i didn't really like the second and third.
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Thanks for trying out my story. Sorry you didn't like it.
A Little busy were we?
Great chapter!
My only issue was how much talking filly RD and FS did while their airship was coming down to crash. Aside from that, things like RD and Fluttershys interactions was fun
and the royalty vs Pinkie that I see could be upcoming (if Luna or Cele compete for Twilight or Cele tries to find Twi a date that isn't Pinkie) will be a good ol laugh.
Sorry it took so long for me to get to the chapter. But at least I've finally found the time for it.
Oh and... Natura will be making her first appearance in one of my stories in under a weeks time
I hope you will enjoy it. and that she will be accurate.
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Thanks for the comment and I'll love seeing your story in a week. Yeah I know how much speaking they were doing in the airship when it was falling I tried to strike a balance but sometimes I get a little wordy.
Next chapter is going to be a blast to write and actually have some of the things planned for it that you just mentioned. 
Dun dun dun... And things begin.
You really have set it all up nicely for the next chapter. I can't wait to see what you come up with for it. 
I personally might like a little more Flutterdash in the story... But it seems the TwiPie is going to feature in its stead.
glad I finally got to reading this. At least Pinkie didn't have to do what I thought she would have.
Dang! This got dark fast
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Yes, mood whiplash and all. I wanted to show that Doctor's idea of a Republic is not completely all sunshine and rainbows. I am going to add the dark tag now, because then I can really go full stop towards a "season finale" of this fic.
BTW- I knew this was going to be a reaction. I came up with the idea of Cadance being hit with a mortality potion yesterday and it really got me out of a writer's block. Can the same thing happen to the other alicorns? Short answer: yes. Longer Answer: Yes, because they, in a psychological sense, want to have a normal life like their subjects. The morbid joke potion takes that up to eleven and makes them have no powers, Will this screw up love? No, because I view Cadance as the Princess of Love, an abstract idea. Love is not like a heavenly body. It would just diffuse throughout the land.
On the getting dark fast point: After looking through my stories, I seem to hit the dark event horizon around Chapter 5, So par for the course.
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I can understand the dark tag but are you going to eventually add a tragedy tag?
( i am not complaining about the story, i love the concept ... i read pony fics to feel Good , not to want to slit my wrists
heck i read about Ned Stark dying ten years ago and i am still pissed abut it ...
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I might if it seems warranted. Actually sounds like a safe bet, Thanks for the help on the tags.
I aim to please.
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Hope you'll like where it will go cause I have a general idea of how it will end. Just need to get there. Actually when I think about it, adding these two tags will definitely help me take off the final stops my mind has on going full throttle.
Now that I think about it, I like writing tragedies or at least partial ones.
You deserve a
for helping me figure out the final tags for this. I was on the fence about adding dark and tragedy tags cause it has elements but my mind didn't know that until now.
Full steam ahead.
Seems a bit rough around the edges and could do with a touch slower pacing, but it seems interesting enough...
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Thanks I know about the quick pacing and I have been trying to fix that. Its a struggle for me cause I only have so much time in the day (with college) and when I write in sections there is always a bit that is too quick or too slow or I come back and I second-guess myself on where I want to go with the story and it always has been an issue of mine to stop and slow down a bit. I try my hardest though and I'm glad you seem to like it.
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haha yeah. Exposition is an issue with me, I either put too much or too little and it can be a pain to do it, I try though, I was much worse when I started writing.
Well... Things keep heating up don't they...
I look forward to more. Especially more flutter and dashie stuff.
Oh... And side note: most days I take a wee peak at the gdocs to see if anything has been added. Whenever you wish to start the story off or keep adding ideas, I'll be more than happy to join into with you more.
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Yeah I just haven't had any good ideas so far. One of my next blog posts, I'm gonna do some thought on the Changelings as a race (Since I have no homework right now I'll start on that) It might help you create a plausible idea of a thought on how they are run. (was going to outline how I thought about the zebras...but I'll push that back.)
Thinking way too hard on MLP? That's my forte.
Fluttershys past induced a kind of wft is this for a moment when I red the part thad sed her father had issues telling if it was his daughter or wife...
Twilight getting punched by Fluttershy I did find funny though. It will be interesting to see where this goes...
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I wrote that at 1 am. I wrote this to try and explain Fluttershy's kind of weird mentality so-far. Blame the morphine and other drugs I was on with the wtf stuff that happened. This is another new plot point directly connected towards what I will soon call the Insurrection.
If you notice I almost never touch on Doctor Whooves's thoughts. Only Fluttershy's/ now Posey's. His wife's death by the Appleloosan revolt caused by the drought caused him to go off the deep end. He magically put the consciousness on his wife into his daughter. This all connects to the earlier parts of the story: when the Robot was shut off it was the Posey consciousness (what the robots know of as Mistress.) Fluttershy hated Twilight in the beginning because she was related partially to the Princesses and her life's work or robotics was not seen when Fluttershy had traveled to Canterlot.
The Stare/ Windigo's Sight is tied to the Knights of Harmony. All the other knights have other powers as well. And we have five other Mane 5. And as far as I know I think Firefly will be the only current alive member of the knights. Maybe the other knights hold shrines that only activate when their Aspect touches their shrine. (I have been playing Skyrim for the last two days straight.)
Bye spitfire... We wont miss you (much). I'm surprised Soarin wasn't hanging around her.
I found Dash's mum a tiny bit scary and the hints of the story she tells everypony really made me wonder what kinds of havoc Dash used to cause.
Although, no Flutterdash fluffyness in here? Awwww...
All in all, I'm interested to see where this crazy tale will go next
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Sorry for the uncharacteristically late reply. There was a planned Flutterdash moment when I first thought of the chapter. Then I thought of Firefly as an expy of my mom. (Yes, The Talk has happened in real life. It just involved my three friends and my mom stuck in a car for four hours while she lectured us on sex ed.) And the rabbit joke- innuendo. That has been a joke of my mom's for a while.
Plus Flutterdash cuteness wouldn't happen if Dash was in her overbearing parents' house who are also trained royal guards. plus in my fanon, The Talk was cutoff before Firefly became terrifying and asking each and every pony in the room who was Dash's marefriend. (Happened to me. . .)
My mom is weird.
3411896 You mean she didn't know fluttershy was RD's marefriend already?
I guess I'm mostly surprised that Fluttershy didn't keep real close to Dash in that house.
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Continuity. The last time Firefly even knew of Fluttershy was in Posey's funeral. Timewise, it happens after Rainbow and Fluttershy's wild ride/ crash of the airship and before the memory in chapter 7. In my head, it's been at least a decade since the funeral. And details get forgotten after a decade.
And going off the whole "Firefly is based off my mom" thing- bad with faces and names. And in terms of the story, this was the first time Dash had been home for a few years. It's a combo for "hey mom- look who's coming to dinner." Firefly knew there had to be an ulterior motive behind five mares magically appearing out of nowhere. And so The Talk happened.
Truth.
Will Rainbow Dash be beating anybody up in this story?
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I plan on doing something with all this foreshadowing,
I mean building up the Knights of Harmony and all this? 
So there is a very high chance that the 'season finale' that I have planned (since the beginning) will be doing some battling- and actually this Trixie arc I have just started (and will finish this summer due to finals hitting me
) will have a fight scene or two- cue why Chapter 9 references Nightmarity and a decent portion of Appleloosa being destroyed. 