Devon is a newly awoken conduit. The only catch is that he wasn't awoken on his world. Instead, Devon will have to face against something even more stronger than the DUPs... ponies.
Will our poor little Devon become a hero or infamous, that is up to you...
InFamous univeres X MLP crossover
that will be answered in the next chapter
:O LAUNCH IS MY FAVOURITE PASSTIME! Launch is great. :3
4918386 how odd, I'm sure I fixed that typo before uploading that chapter. Oh well, it's fixed now
That was there should be did.
interesting concept to use .. you have my full attention on this story
when the next update appears ...
4918440 Awesome.
Well done, I hope to see another chapter real soon. Like A Boss.
This is the most odd crossover, yet it's done so well...
my compliments to the chef...
4919505 Thanks man, and if I may ask, what did you find odd?
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Just the thought of inFamous in MLP... it baffles me. You, however, have done a smashing job!
8 year old from cod... I just lost my shit .
you my friend just got another fav
I'm doing a InFamous x Mlp crossover.
Its much different from this though, so rest assured.
4919846 In that case, I wish you good luck
i platniumed second son and play first light The SECOND it came out
4918706 Another interesting thing about glass is it is technically a liquid.
And molten glass is also incredibly painfull.
Is he like coles brother or something
Awwww shit son! This is gonna be great!
The pacing is a bit iffy, and, glass? really? Why not give him the power of oxygen? or sunlight? I mean, I guess that's pretty cool.
"Oh, you look exotic." With your lack of colorful fur besides the patch on top of your head. And your oddly shaped face. Also with you weirdly positioned ears. "I think I'll be your friend."
Don't get me wrong, the idea of it is nice, but... 6 out of 10.
That's all I'm going to say because I don't want to sound like a hater on this.
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By making it combustible
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Not really, concentrated oxygen tend to....burn
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Beside, if that didn't work, take out the air inside their lung....FORCEFULLY....LIKE A CHESTBURSTER
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Hmmm....You are very reasonable and logical.
I accept your explanation. Still, in the hand of mad man, everyone will die due to lack of oxygen.
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Though should Pinkie be a Conduit, what will her shall be? If saying cakes, does she really need to absorb all the cake ingredient? Seem impractical
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ALL THE BLOOD!!!
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Holy shit! If Pinkie was a conduit she would be like a final super hardcore boss or something
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Imagine her with the power of Conduit mix with reality breaking power
She is NOT a super final hardcore boss......SHE IS IMPOSSIBLE TO BE DEFEATED!!!!
4922467 She will become... GOD!
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ALL HAIL PINKAMENA THE CONDUIT GOD!!
4922475 Sacrifice all the virgins!
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PINKAMENA DO NOT NEED SUCH PATHETIC EXCUSE OF SACRIFICE....SHE REQUIRED CUPCAKE SACRIFICES, ESPECIALLY RAINBOW COLOURED ONE!!!
4922480 b-but we don't have cupcakes. a-are you sure a nice little virgin isn't good enough...
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UNLESS THEY COVERED WITH CREAM. PINKAMENA GOD WILL BE PLEASED
(now that for some reason sound like a fetish to me )
4922488 Someone needs to write a clop of that right now
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*looks at you VIOLENTLY*
4922501 Uhh, fine... I'll write it... are you happy now!
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*smiling at you VIOLENTELY!*
Okay, I really like the setup, and the fact that you used one of Second Son's rejected powers just adds to the awesomeness (damn I wish I had a PS4 right now), but I also don't want this to become Second Son 2.0 per se,
I'll like and favorite for sure though
2nd comment.... Yaaayyyyy...
I've got to do an inFamous story now, dammit. Whatever, give me a few days.
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maybe son?
Since I always went hero in my InFamous games I feel it would suit Devon good to be a Hero. He seems good enough.
4923939 I'll try to keep him natural until the first karmic choice (which will be next chapter). After that we'll see if he becomes hero or infamous
4923946 A'ight. Please be hero, please be hero, please be hero!
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that idea is actually pretty good I considered a long lost relative with delsin letting Scootaloo
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That joke is going to my library of insults.
4922273 I don't know, I was just trying to make a point. In a city like manhattan, if this story is making an accurate depiction of it... oxygen and sunlight would just as plentiful as glass. Just a little, I don't know... over powered? It's like throwing a conduit with plant powers into a forest.
I was a little confused at a part in this chapter. I'll elaborate with a quote. Bold parts indicate what confused me.
The dialogue in the bold section has no subject, no way of smoothly transitioning into a clear back-and-forth discussion between Devon, Octavia and Vinyl.
Since there's no subject for the first two bits of dialogue in that section, we are led to assume that Octavia said the first bit, or;
When in actuality, it was Devon who said that. Due to a lack of explanation, this likely confused people. It confused me. A fix for this would be;
And so on and so forth. If it comes to that, it's always best to reassure yourself and put the subject who is talking before the dialogue in narration. That way there's no risk of the readers being confused.
Aside from that? I noticed that you're taking a hint from the Reapers in inFAMOUS 1. Loved that game, glad someone's using the idea of the Reapers as inspiration for a gang. And, glass powers. Vitromancy! Haven't seen anything like it so far, they should've implemented it into Second Son. Good thing you're using it as a focal point, it was free game.
I enjoy the story so far, and I hope you continue. There are flaws here and there but, as a writer of an inFAMOUS crossover story myself, I can say you're doing solid so far. The only concern I have is pacing. It was a bit fast, in all honesty, but overall it's a good start!
Keep up the good work man!
Have a good one.
4924341 Thanks for the tips man. And as for the glass power, I think sucker Punch might add it as a DLC side story to Second SOn, as it was implied in one of the last audio log in the game and I quote:
Did you ever wonder how many powers you can hold? Augustine does. She doesn’t like the idea of you ever finding your way to Curdun Cay. We’ve got a lot of different counduits there. Not just the ones you’ve seen here in Seattle. Glass, wire, paper… Man, it’s a long, strange list. Imagine what would happen if you came to Curdun Cay, and if you got all those powers. What would you become? Man that scares me, and I bet it terrifies Augustine.
I might use wire and paper because it would be awesome!