Hear a little bit of my story I'm wirting

Our story begins in the year 1 April 2002 in a hospital for old war veterans on the outskirts of Helsinki, simo hayha was drifting in and out of consciousness. Simo reached for an old photo of his friends from ww2 he closed his eyes for the last time with his friend's photo in his arms, but far away in the realm of the timekeepers they were currently in a meeting. They were having a chat about whom to give a second chance at life to, and this was the 800 hundredth time the timekeepers have done this.

Brothers and sisters, I have called you all here today because it's time to give someone a second chance at life. I have an idea of whom to give a second chance at life too, called one of the timekeepers. Who was or so simos guardian timekeeper? Zadkiell you are simos guardian timekeeper, is he a viable candidate for giving a second chance at life too.

Yes, he is Zadkiell replied. He's lead a simple and quiet Life farming and Botany flowers. That sounds like a very nice life, replied one of the timekeepers, .yes it was replied Zadkiell and if you would excise me, I'm off to have a chat with my good friend st Peter.

Now ladies and gentlemen, if there's no other order of business, let's call it a day. It's about for lunchtime, informed the grand elder timekeeper.

Comments

[M4i]

Pretty nice.

[three apples]

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