What really grates my nerves on some Stories here..... · 6:40am Jan 18th, 2013
Hello to all that reads this blog post of mine. Lately, I've been going around on this site as well as Fanfiction and you know what really grates my nerves when I think I find a good story? BLOCKS AND BLOCKS OF WORDS!!! BLOCKS OF WORDS CRAMMED INTO ONE SINGLE PARAGRAPH!!! I wonder to myself...DID YOU EVEN PASS ENGLISH OR LA? Goodness sakes, I'm just...! GRRRRR!!!!! RANTING!!!!!
Here's an example that I see in some stories, here as well as fanfiction...
"Blah blah blah blah blah blah blah?" Blah 1 asked with a confused expression. "Blah blah blah blah blah blah?! BLAH BLAH!?" "Blah blah blah blah." Blah 2 replied with a smirk. Blah 1 gave a angry glare at Blah 2. Blah 3 was laughing his ass off on the couch. "Blah blah blah blah! Blah blah!" Blah 3 said through his laughter. Blah 1 grows a tick mark on his head before he runs into the kitchen, a series of crashes come before Blah 1 comes running back out with a frying pan. Blah 2 jolts into a run from his position and laughs at Blah 1. Blah 3 also continues to laugh his ass off from the event. "Blah blah blah blah blah blah blah!" Blah 1 shouted. "Blah blah blah blah blah blah blah?! HAHAHAHA!!!" Blah 3 replied with a howl of laughter. "Blah blah blah blah blah blah blah!" Blah 2 taunts at Blah 1, Blah 1 growls more menacingcly as he chases after Blah 2 trying to whack him with the pan.
GOOD GOD!!! MY EYES!!! THIS IS WHAT I BASICALLY SEE IN A BADLY TYPED STORY!!! WHEN A NEW PERSON TALKS OR SPEAKS PUT A NEW FREAKING PARAGRAPH FOR THEM!!!! DON'T JUST CRAM THEM INTO ONE!!!! THAT KILLS OUR EYES!!!!!!
Here's one that's actually more readable than a block of words.
"Blah blah blah blah blah blah blah?" Blah 1 asked with a confused expression. "Blah blah blah blah blah blah?! BLAH BLAH!?"
"Blah blah blah blah." Blah 2 replied with a smirk, Blah 1 gave a angry glare at Blah 2.
Blah 3 was laughing his ass off on the couch. "Blah blah blah blah! Blah blah!" Blah 3 said through his laughter.
Blah 1 grows a tick mark on his head before he runs into the kitchen, a series of crashes come before Blah 1 comes running back out with a frying pan. Blah 2 jolts into a run from his position and laughs at Blah 1. Blah 3 also continues to laugh his ass off from the event.
"Blah blah blah blah blah blah blah!" Blah 1 shouted.
"Blah blah blah blah blah blah blah?! HAHAHAHA!!!" Blah 3 replied with a howl of laughter.
"Blah blah blah blah blah blah blah!" Blah 2 taunts at Blah 1, Blah 1 growls more menacingly as he chases after Blah 2 trying to whack him with the pan.
ALSO WHEN YOU ARE DESCRIBING OTHER EVENTS AND STUFF DO ANOTHER PARAGRAPH AS WELL!!!!
Example....
-Bad
"Blah blah blah? Blah blah! BLAH!!!" Blah 1 shouts at his friends angrily. Blah three cracks as he and Blah 2 run away from Blah 1. They both continue to laugh as they run with Blah one hot on their trail. They could do this for days and not tire out at all! Life was so much fun in their world. Blah 1 continues to chase them across his home shouting curses at them while they were at it, this only made Blah 2 and 3 grin and chuckle.
-Good
"Blah blah blah? Blah blah! BLAH!!!" Blah 1 shouts at his friends angrily.
Blah three cracks as he and Blah 2 run away from Blah 1. They both continue to laugh as they run with Blah one hot on their trail. They could do this for days and not tire out at all! Life was so much fun in their world. Blah 1 continues to chase them across his home shouting curses at them while they were at it, this only made Blah 2 and 3 grin and chuckle.
Now I hope some people will at least try to take on this advise, make it a less pain to ready some stories. You'd probably get more viewers if they can read it easily!!!
Yup. This also irritates me to no end.
I actually like using creative line and paragraph breaks in my writing to invoke certain—dramatic stylistic elements—that otherwise could not be replicated with conventional textual format.
Especially when writing scenes using first person stream of consciousness.
By the way, saw that you followed me, decided to comment on your blog.
I've got one too.