Important message! · 5:31pm Aug 13th, 2013
Hello everypony, It is nice to be back, got my new monitor/tv and had to adjust my room a little bit...
To get to the point I will be changing up my writing style to be less... robotic and more like a normal person talking.
Sadly this will make time between updates longer.
Ex. Original
Lola, Spike, and Twilight were in the kitchen cleaning the dishes and putting away left over pancakes from breakfast while the rest of the group tiddied up the main room of the library.
"Mother?" Lola asked.
Ex. New
After breakfast, everypony split into groups to get morning chores out of the way. Twilight being in the kitchen with Spike and Lola, both being a great assets to the young princess. With Twilight drying the last of the plates she didn't notice Lola hovering over her putting the soap away.
"Mother?"
What do you guys think?
Not bad!
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I think so too, my old style put all the details into the way the characters were talking and less on the interaction and story itself. It may or may not make the chapters longer or shorter.
It took the reading of over 900 stories to improve. As they say "Learn by example"
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Nice!