Story Promotion. · 5:58pm Jan 10th, 2014
Okay, I don't usually do this... well, ever... but for once I've stumbled on a genuinely exceptional fic that's disgracefully underappreciated, and I feel like I need to post a blog in order to alleviate this terrible injustice.
Written in first-person, the fic centers around Ahuizotl's thoughts after he has defeated Daring Do. It's a nice little foray into the 'What if Ahuizotl won?' concept and touches on the almost bewildering pointlessness of the rivalry that him and Daring share. Their very existences seem to rely on harassing each other, to the point that when one is without the other, what is really after that?
The fic also mentioned that Ahuizotl had read the books. At once, the idea had occurred to me of the possibility of Ahuizotl realizing that the series would now never be finished. Perhaps he would even go so far as to write one last adventure for Daring, fueled by his own sorrow and nostalgia? It's the kind of thing that could make a really interesting sequel, while conversely also having the potential to be a complete flop.
My only criticism for this fic is that I debated to myself whether it would be more effective to have a monologue as opposed to the current first-person narration. Perhaps I'm just biased against first-person (Which isn't completely unrealistic, to be fair), but it would have been easier to convey the emotion. With that said, I did enjoy his current choice; a lot of actions that are going on have to be interpreted based on what the narrator (Ahuizotl) is thinking. While this is really effective at times, I couldn't help but feel that there were a few times that it came across as forced.
Will I turn around and see that magnificent pony behind me, crouched and ready for battle. Will she wait for me to first finish my soliloquy and turn before attacking, just so she can see my expression of surprise? Her description of it will be hilarious, no doubt. I am turning, Daring Do! Prepare yourself, for I am turning!
There are far too many examples to quote where it is done very well, though. I got the feeling of watching the scene play out through a murky glass window, and I had to deduce what was really going on based on what little detail the narrator supplied. It was made only better by the fact that he was talking to Daring Do (albeit in his head), and she didn't reply. It wasn't strictly mentioned once, but we know that Daring is dead. It was very reminiscent of the first stage of grief and loss, and there's no doubt in hell that this is coincidence; the writer clearly knows what (s)he is doing.
I definitely recommend giving this one a read if you have the time. I wouldn't normally recommend a fic unless I felt that I had just reason to. In fact, I avoid posting blogs, really. It's very bad of me; it disconnects me from my followers—from you guys. And that's kinda bad, so I should really blog a little more. Consider this the first of a little bit more activity from me.
Thanks for reading. 
I was hoping my description was enough to imply that this was all dialogue. I have added quotation marks for clarification. And, again, thank you.
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You know, I'm going to say I wouldn't include those quotation marks
If you're going to include them, then it would require a little editing to make it sound right, and to be honest, it sounded fine the way it was before.