Would this make for a good story? · 5:36pm Dec 16th, 2015
Serious blog.
I need some opinions on this. Anything I can get.
This is based of some odd dream I had around a week ago or so. If i do make a one shot, some things might change, but here's the basic.
It started off as a... I was standing in a smokey room. Filled with so much smoke. I was looking all around the entire room. Then, I realized I had something in my hands. A... It was a weapon. A gun. An M4A1 Carbine. I looked back up, and I still couldn't see anything through the darkness..
I was holding the rifle so tightly in my hands, I thought the grip would break. I was shaking and nervous. And frightened. So, so frightened. I didn't know why. But I also felt strong and determined at the same time...
Then... The smoke cleared in front of me by God knows what or how. The first thing I saw was a door. A wooden door. It was severely battered and beatened, with some blood and scratches all over it. Along with a huge blood trail in front of it. It looked as if it was gonna break any second..
I looked to the left side of the door, next to the wall. And what do I see?
Rainbow Dash. She's.... God, she's injured. Almost and understatement. She had cuts and bruises all over.. Her forehead was bleeding.. She was breathing heavily and hoarsely.. She also had a slightly bloody hoof on her stomach. And her stomach was.. A bit bigger than usual. I didn't know why... But I think I do now..
She gave out a small whimper and I immediately rushed to her side, holding her face in my hand as she smiled that beautiful smile of hers... Then she told me something before she... Passed out. I think. I hope.
I was now in front of the door.. Holding my gun. Waiting in silence and anxiousness. Then... The door was suddenly ripped out of its weak hinges. Then.... I saw something. A couple things..I can't really remember what but... It was like... A mutilated pony. From what i could see fromthe smoke.. Except it had something different to it. But I couldn't put my mind to what it was exactly..
Then... One of them snarled at me and the next thing I knew, it leaped/flew at me. That's when I pulled the trigger and let out everything I had. And that's when I woke up crying.
But what shocked and surprised me the most is that it had a Rainbow colored mane..
Would this make for a good one shot of sorts? I need opinions and thoughts here, guys. Please.
This would make a great story!
So you're thinking a zombie type fic?
So you just needed help with you next story? Plus SG2030's avatar is bucking ugly
I think it'd be a grey story if you could dramaticize it a little, like lengthwise and by giving the whole experience. I mean, the generality of your dream wasn't too long.
3622296 T_T Thank you Captain Obvious.
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I hope so.
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In a sense, not really. But something that might involve it?
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I need opinions and help on whether this would make a good base for a one shot.
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I'm gonna improvise and lengthen it with something. I was thinking this could make fora good base.
3622385 Well it sounds promising and has a tragic event.
3622390 That's what I was thinking! Most if my stories are improv. The ones I work on anyways. The ones not here!
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Do you like Soarin? (Not as, you know.)
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Couple wise? No.
As a pony in general? He's a cool dude.
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I've been thinking in a break up story. Have you watched Rarity Investigates?
3622371 just a joke. No offence intended.
At least your fics won't give people terminal diseases. The story sounds dark too.
Like Zero Dark Thirty dark.
Sounds pretty operator, like operator with a little operator sprinkled on top--(<==Le Dash) the point is I'm no operator but that sounds pretty damn operator.
Replace that M4 series jam fest with an A-10's GAU-8 Avenger firing 30mm shells at a rate of 4,200 rounds per minute and you've got yourself a 120% operator approved fic.
Stay operator kids.
3622589 Decided to update my avatar.
Sounds good! I'd read it.
3622616 I seen that. Still not as cute as
mine..
3622992 I know
3623107 What was this blog about again?
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If this gets derailed any further, you're blocked.
3623150 It deals with TheLoyalPatriot's dream that he is thinking of making a story.
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3623155 Oh don't be that way! Yes it would make a good story!( as I pat you on the head and give you a cookie) No! A great story!!! ( hands you a glass of milk). Sorry for the derailment.
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Don't worry, man. I'll take the cookie and milk, but I was just joking.
3623172 Don't you just hate a condescending blank hole? LOL( making fun of myself)
3622385 Read this it may help