A Couple Changes · 1:40am Mar 14th, 2016
Alright, I keep looking back at chapter nine and thinking, 'I can do better than this. I SHOULD have done better than this. I'm glad a lot of you like it, but I shouldn't have rushed to post it like I did. I told Cyberfire I was going to spend a couple days going over it, and then I promptly ignored my promise and posted it anyways.
My biggest mistake was the scene where Twilight called Spike her son. I want to have Twilight and Spike develop a mother/son relationship eventually... but I'll admit after some thought that I could have handled that far better than I did.
My next mistake was making Twilight wake up in the first place. I have finalized a lot of details in my notes and mind regarding Twilight, her powers, and how they affect her life and her interaction with the world, and if I have Twilight wake up like this as if she had just been knocked out... It'll be a plot hole I will never get to leave me alone.
So I'm going to spend some time heavily editing chapter nine, and then I'll post the edit. After that I'll restart chapter ten and see if I don't back myself into a corner... again.
Also, I'm doing away with that stupid four day update schedule. I was hoping it would motivate me to keep working on this in a timely manner, but all it's done is stress me out as I worried over whether or not I'll get a chapter done on time. I give you my word, however, that I will let all of you heckle me endlessly if I go any longer than two weeks between updates. The only time I won't allow this is if I have a good excuse for why I'm not updating, like a vacation, family emergencies, hospitalization... stuff like that. Other than that, so long as I have access to a computer, keyboard, and the internet, I will work on this.
Nos Non Facimus Normalis. (New signature. Like it?)
Huh. I thought that the chapter was alright as it is, but I suppose you know best for your story. Good luck with the new edited chapters. By the way, did you see the email I sent you?
I took it to be about a week for a new chapter. With Twilight realizing that Spike is her son I felt it worked and felt natural. It depends on what Spike thinks and how he handles it. I would recommend this story about adoption Three Gems and a Scooter. It is still on going but does deal with both parties accepting the other. Still if you wish to tidy it up a bit go for it.
3806801 Nope, I'll go check that right now.
3806861 I... think I know the story. I'll check it out after I look at my email.