Going out of my Mind with Stress and Disappointment · 1:40pm Sep 18th, 2016
So it seems that my most recent story is doing even worse than Human Magic, which as you can imagine is a real kick in the nuts for me. But don't worry, I'm not giving up again. I've invested too much in this series to give up on it. Hell, if anything, it has made me even more determined to make this series succeed. I've changed the title and made some other minor adjustment, I've finally found an editor, and I am aggressively pursuing new cover art, which I suspect is a major issue. If it comes down to it, and it isn't against the site rules, I may just delete this story only to re-post it exactly as it is, but skip what is essentially the prologue and go directly into the next chapter, which starts with Sunset in school. Does anybody think that would be better?
Now that all that's said, I just can't understand why this story is doing so poorly. I mean, I literally cannot understand why. A Daughter Not His Own was my first real success, and I put just as much care and work into A Heart Full Of Valor. I'm not saying that I expect it to automatically do just as well, but it boggles my mind how much difference there is between them. I've been told that my strong point is writing about emotional connections, which is what inspired me to write A Daughter Not His Own, but that cannot be the only thing I'm good at. On that note, can anyone give me advice and writing fight scenes?
haven't read the story yet, but i think you should keep the prologue, you could use it to set up some Chekhov's Guns. you did say you invested a lot into the series, so i assume you have it planned out
as for the fight scenes, i have heard Somber is pretty visual in his fight scenes
I don't think you should get down on yourself so soon. I can understand why you are frustrated, it seems to have a lot of views but not many people have up-voted or down-voted it yet, but you shouldn't jump to conclusions just yet. I say keep the first chapter as it is and just try to focus on more chapters for now. Once this story gets out there a little more maybe people will notice it and give it another look. Sometimes stories take a while to get popular, and sometimes some stories aren't as popular as a previous work by an author, but you still have fans that appreciate your work no matter how many or how few likes you get, and I will always appreciate your work.
Your story isn't actually doing bad so far, despite its low votes it is apparently being tracked by several people and in a lot of bookshelves. I wish I could help you more, but I hope you know that all of your stories are good and even if not all of them are as good as each other I still find them all fun.
I thought the chapter was good, and well written. I'm just not a big fan of what kind of magic you seem to be using. That's more of a genre thing than a story thing.
4215805 For what it's worth, it's not actually going to be a Dark fic. There are going to be some pretty dark moments, but hopefully nothing that'll force me to add the tag.
4215679
I guess you're right. It's just that the overnight success of A Daughter Not His Own and many other stories convinced me that if a story isn't successful right away, it isn't going to make it. But I suppose you know of some stories that prove me wrong.
I've noticed that, especially when it comes to some of the more successful writers on this site. One day they write a fic that's pure gold, the next they write one that everyone treats like crap.
But I really want my H&V series to be a big success. Guess I'll just have to keep at it.