Inquiry v2.0 Patch Notes · 6:17am Feb 4th, 2017
Minor bug fixes:
Several spelling, grammar, and sentence structure mistakes have been corrected.
~300% increase in proper hyphen usage
~150% increase in proper em-dash usage
Fixed a bug where the old library caused significantly higher rates of proper noun address than intended
Luna's dialogue has been toned down ~20% to match emotional tone where necessary
Twilight now has better idle actions during tea time
Twilight's penultimate reaction in the last chapter is now ~90% less cliche
Bonus: New final paragraph added for more emotional resolution
Less cheeky, I finally posted the updated version after, what, like two years of it sitting nearly finished in my folder. Whatever. 99% of it was just fixing my mistakes from being awful and grade school level grammar. I toned down the visceral reaction a bit to Shiny's outburst (thought about scrapping the property destruction entirely per the EqD recommendation, but it still feels like an appropriate big-bro thing to do), Luna's dialogue with Twilight is less fluffy, Storm is less annoying with his constant use of direct names, Twilight's a bit more animated during tea, and there's a new ending paragraph that, I think, rounds out the emotional journey a bit better.
Better late than never, yeah? If any of you go through for a second read feel free to point out any other dumb things I missed.
Have a great weekend, everyone.
4409407 Pretty much exactly what I said. Finally posted the fixed up version. Lots of basic grammar and dialogue cleanup, some more emotive movement, and added a new paragraph to the very end.
Didn't, like, do a 2nd chapter or a sequel or anything like that.