• Member Since 30th Nov, 2015
  • offline last seen 21 minutes ago

Rambling Writer


Our job is not to give readers what they want; our job is to show them things they never imagined. --Walt Williams

More Blog Posts157

  • 2 weeks
    New cover art for How the Tantabus Parses Sleep

    Recently, I decided to commission some new cover art for How the Tantabus Parses Sleep, and I think Harwick did an excellent job of it. I did some resizing and added some text for the actual cover, but I'd be remiss to not show the full version from

    Read More

    6 comments · 418 views
  • 3 weeks
    Urban Wilds art commission (Content warning: blood)

    A while ago, I commissioned Moonatik for some Urban Wilds art, and I think it turned out great. But fair warning: it's pretty bloody, taking place shortly after Amanita kills her two attackers, so only open this post if you're okay with that. (I checked the site's rules, and it fits in the postable "borderline" category".) Got that? Good.

    Read More

    6 comments · 247 views
  • 5 weeks
    New Hinterlands sequel

    I've been working on another sequel to Hinterlands for over a year, and it's finally ready to be published! Check out the continuing adventures of our hapless necromancer and her bounty hunter friend in the great white north:

    TDeath Valley
    Hostile lands. Frigid valleys. Backwater villages. Shadowy forests. Vicious beasts. Gloomy mines. Strange magics. And the nicest pony for miles is a necromancer. A royal investigation of tainted ley lines uncovers dark secrets in the Frozen North.
    Rambling Writer · 105k words  ·  128  1 · 615 views
    6 comments · 182 views
  • 5 weeks
    Barcast: Last Call, Last Mini-rounds, I'm on Tap

    As you may have heard, the Barcast interview group is sadly closing its doors. But before they do, they're having one last stream: a series of rapid-fire five-minute interviews this Saturday with as many people as they can manage. And guess who decided to sign up?

    Read More

    0 comments · 115 views
  • 62 weeks
    Hinterlands / Urban Wilds fanart

    Recently, Moonatik decided that Hinterlands and Urban Wilds were somehow good enough to merit fanart and drew a picture of Bitterroot and Amanita. I think it's neat!

    Read More

    8 comments · 576 views
Apr
13th
2018

In Which I Suffer Through New Moon: Chapter 22 -- Flight · 2:50pm Apr 13th, 2018

As Bella, Edward, and Alice leave behind the vampire blood orgy (that’d be a great name for a death metal band), Bella slowly freaks out at what’s going on in the room she just departed. One of the Volturi’s human servants asks if they need anything, but Edward sends her away. According to Edward, she’s aware of what’s going on and is fully aware she could end up as a vampire’s dinner, but goes through with it in the hopes that the Volturi will turn her.

I felt the blood leave my face. “She wants to be one of them?”

He nodded once, his eyes sharp on my face, watching my reaction.

I shuddered. “How can she want that?” I whispered, more to myself than really looking for an answer. “How can she watch those people file through to that hideous room and want to be a part of that?”

You tell me, Bella. You’re desperate to be a vampire. What, did you think that just because you were with the Cullens and were going to drink animal blood, that your thirst for human blood would be just gone? You’ll always want to drink human blood. Carlisle wants to drink human blood. Edward wants to drink human blood. They’re just really good at self-control. You, on the other hand, go catatonic the moment your boyfriend dumps you.

Soon, the Volturi allow them to leave. Alice steals another car for them and drives them through the night. Edward advises Bella to get some sleep, as she’s been up for a very long time.

“I don’t want to sleep. I’m not tired.” Just the second part was a lie. I wasn’t about to close my eyes. The car was only dimly lit by the dashboard controls, but it was enough that I could see his face.

CM + 1

They fly to Washington — the entire trip taking four pages, and they’re not even at Forks yet — and meet the Cullens at the Atlanta airport. Esme tells Edward to never put her through that again, as if almost committing suicide was just a phase. Edward takes Bella home and Charlie, naturally, is furious, at her and at Edward. Given the situation, simply threatening to throw Edward out of the house shows a remarkable amount of restraint. Edward takes Bella upstairs to her bed, where she falls asleep.

Clinginess Meter: 68 x 4

See that? See all that? That takes twelve pages. Simply going home takes twelve pages. Naturally, it’s because Bella keeps thinking about Edward, even if she remains relatively unclingy. I know I went over something like this several chapters earlier, but the point of slow pacing is to dig deep and uncover ideas that linger. I’ll admit that I prefer faster pacing over slower, but I can still recognize when slow pacing is done well.

Before Sunrise is a romance film about two people who meet on a train ride. As they talk, they enjoy each other’s company so much that, when the train stops in Vienna, they decide to spend the night there until they have to go their separate ways in the morning. The bulk of the movie is them wandering around Vienna and talking. And even though its pacing makes molasses look fast, it works. Remember how Twilight skipped over the “getting to know you” stuff? This movie is basically nothing but “getting to know you” stuff. The conversations always reveal some aspect about both of the characters and develop their relationship. It’s the kind of movie that makes you think. That’s the purpose of slow pacing, not long scenes of couples staring into each other’s eyes.

Previous | Table of Contents | Next

Comments ( 1 )

I see Bella has all the self-reflection of a parsnip. Goes nicely with her general intelligence and charisma.

Login or register to comment