TDash of Humanity 2: A New Dawn
MLP: FiM
Romance
Comedy
Slice of Life
I'm stuck in Equestria, which reminds me of the dark ages. Instead of internet and fast-food, I have Rainbow Dash. She's been asked to help me learn to fit in... I'd like a refund.
Sex
Fluttershy
Rainbow Dash
Soarin
OC
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Coming Soon... Dash of Humanity 3: Live, Fly, Reboot. · 5:10am Nov 10th, 2021

So, for the month of November I've decided to write a 50k word Dash of Humanity story. I'm about 15k words in and I realized how quiet it is just... writing... all by my lonesome. And how easily distracted I am. So I had the idea to share my progress and maybe some scenes from the story to help me stay focused and moving forward.

If this goes well, I'll continue to share excerpts of the Comedy: Dash of Humanity 3: Live, Fly, Reboot.*
_{*will replace DoH3: consequences}

Synopsis

Taking place just after Dash of Humanity 2, Dawn's settling into his new life as the Mane Six get called off on map missions. While Dash and Twilight are out of town on a map mission, Dawn realizes he's reliving the same day over and over. Somepony seems to have botched their big evil revenge spell, and it's up to Dawn to fix it.

Chapter 1 Excerpt

Everyone loves exposition, so I wove various scenes across Ponyville into a prelude chapter. It serves to set the scene and also fill in the backstory of the first 2 stories. We meet Lyra, Dash, Luna, hear what happened to Tirek, visit the castle, and reflect on how Dawn got to where he is today.

For the opening we callback to the scene that started it all... Dawn eating a salad.

I shifted in my seat to get comfortable and picked a small tomato out of my salad with my primary feathers. It rolled back and forth across the three longest ones before I brought my wing up and let it roll down into my mouth. The tomato tasted amazing and fresh, which was really saying something given how much I’d hated salads up until a few months ago.
There was a time when I thought salads weren’t food, they were what you fed food. I’d even made it a point to find the one place in Ponyville that could serve bacon to try and escape this cruel fate. But in the end, I’d learned to embrace healthy living. Mostly it was because I had a new set of taste buds that were less appalled at the thought of eating leafy green lawn clippings masquerading as a balanced breakfast.
“Dawn?” Lyra asked.
I blinked and looked over at her across the small purple table of the diner. “Huh?”
“You tilted your head and kind of zoned off there for a minute,” she stated.
“Oh, just reminiscing about the first time I ate a salad—”
“And got zapped to Equestria by Discord.” She chuckled and took a bite of her daisy sandwich.
“Guess I’ve told that story a few too many times. I’m feeling nostalgic.”
Lyra finished her sandwich and took a drink. “For Earth? Do you still think of going back?”
“No,” I shook my head. “Couldn’t even if I wanted to.”
“Guess that freeing Discord from stone and asking nicely isn’t an option.”
I smirked. “It’s really not. Doubt he’s coming back this time.” I gestured over my shoulder towards the sun.
Lyra raised an eyebrow and whispered, “I thought he was turned to stone. Was he banished there?”
Nodding, I ran a hoof across my lips to zip them shut.
“Looks like Celestia isn’t taking chances.”
“Plus, I’m happy here,” I explained. “It was rough going for a while with Soarin dating Dash and getting her pregnant. If it hadn’t been for you and Twilight, I might still be moping around. Since then, nothing terrible has happened. It’s actually been a bit too quiet.”
“That’s just Ponyville,” Lyra explained. “Quietest town in Equestria, until it’s not.”
The salad was nearly finished and the cloudy sky was giving us a respite from the sun. It was chilly out, and the weather had called for clear skies by noon. There would only be about an hour left now for me to handle Dash’s weather duty today.
“I appreciate a chance to have lunch and catch up, Lyra, but Dash is expecting me to clear out these clouds and I think I’m running out of time.”
She nodded. “I wouldn’t keep her waiting. Thanks for lunch.”
I placed several bits on the table to pay for lunch and gave Lyra a salute with my wing, “I’m off to clear the sky and save everypony from the horrors of not getting enough vitamin D!”
After a couple wing beats, I was soaring through the nearest clouds, dissolving them instantly. One after another they burst as I flew through them, and I worked my way out towards the edge of town. It didn’t take long to clear the sky, and I finished about half an hour early. I left one cloud intact to take a nap upon, a trick I’d learned from Dash, and flew up to it. I went to land on it and flipped over at the last second, landing on it back first.
I sighed contently as I wiggled my wings and sank into the clouds, only my muzzle remaining above them. The moisture tingled gently against my skin as my innate pegasi magic allowed me to lay on them. It was without a doubt the most comfortable place to take a nap in all of Ponyville. I yawned and felt sleep taking hold of me.

Brief, I know, but if you have thoughts be sure to let me know. I've completed Act 1, and despite Act 2 having "the good stuff" my pace has slowed down a bit. Though I do have one thing I'm really looking forward to writing...

The CMC are going to try again for their Siege Warfare Cutie Marks, yay! After the trebuchet, the pinnacle of siege weaponry failed to get them a cutie mark they're going bigger... perhaps the deadliest siege weapon ever featured on fim fiction, the kind of weapon you should never just "eyeball it" when firing.

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