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EMy Little Pony Friendship is Magic The Movie: What If?
MLP: FiM
MLP: Movie
Adventure
Drama
Thriller
(Takes place within my "What If?" rewrite series, familiarity with its volumes is recommended.) An alternate take on the 2017 movie exploring if scenes had played out differently, and some characters were written differently.
Alt. Universe
Twilight
Spike
Other
Main 6
Tempest Shadow
SuperPinkBrony12 · 25k words · 21 2 · 376 views
TA Student Turned Princess
MLP: FiM
Adventure
Drama
A young student opens his eyes on his first day of college... in the body of Princess Celestia herself.
Violence
Profanity
Human
Alt. Universe
Twilight
Celestia
Luna
Main 6
FlightfulPone · 2.4k words · 189 3 · 2k views
EPassing The Badge
MLP: FiM
Slice of Life
Rainbow Dash is uncertain how she'll balance her life as Captain of the Wonderbolts. The former captain has a few words to say.
Rainbow Dash
Spitfire
6-D Pegasus · 2.5k words · 54 3 · 428 views
TCadance The Crystal Princess
MLP: FiM
MLP: Movie
Dark
Adventure
Princess Mi Amore Cadenza is not who she said she is, she had no idea WHO she really is
Gore
Violence
Death
Alt. Universe
Cadance
Shining Armor
Main 6
King Sombra
Princess Amore
Sean Tan the Brony · 31k words · 33 3 · 740 views
EShow Me The Stars
MLP: FiM
Slice of Life
A young boy in the city dreams of seeing the stars through the smog. Far away, a certain Princess hears his dreams.
Human
Luna
6-D Pegasus · 4.3k words · 70 0 · 553 views
EHer Majesty's Special Helpers
MLP Gen 5
Comedy
Drama
Slice of Life
Follow Thunder Flap and Zoom Zephyrwing on a typical day in the service of Queen Haven: Overseeing security prep, smuggling Alphabittle in for a not so secret rendezvous, waiting for Zipp and Pipp to show up. All in a day's work.
Other
Queen Haven
Thunder
Zoom
SuperPinkBrony12 · 4.8k words · 19 0 · 290 views
TClan: Adventures In Another World
MLP Gen 5
Adventure
Slice of Life
Hitch leaves his home of Maretime Bay to help his son.
Violence
Profanity
Crossover
OC
Hitch Trailblazer
Sparky
Snugglewarmscale · 8.6k words · 142 views
TAvenge me!
MLP: FiM
Drama
Random
Tragedy
After the death of Pinkie Pie, Rainbow Dash swore to get revenge on the pony responsible for the crime
Violence
Death
Second Person
Rainbow Dash
Pinkie
Starlight Glimmer
Anonymous15 · 9.6k words · 8 11 · 279 views
EEclipse Awareness (Or Lack Thereof)
MLP: FiM
Comedy
Slice of Life
Following Twilight's coronation, Celestia and Luna organize a mutual solar eclipse to celebrate the end of their rule. Unfortunately, they forgot to let anypony know of this.
Twilight
Celestia
Luna
6-D Pegasus · 4.3k words · 187 5 · 1.7k views
EDiamond at a Crossroads
MLP: FiM
Sad
Slice of Life
(Takes place within the universe of "The Sitter with the Diamond Tiara" and its semi-sequel "A Dazzling School Daze".) Plagued by uncertainty about her future, Diamond Tiara visits Cheerilee in hopes the teacher can guide her one last time.
Diamond Tiara
Cheerilee
SuperPinkBrony12 · 2.9k words · 16 0 · 154 views
EAurora By The Sea
MLP Gen 5
Romance
Primrose remembers the very first date her and her husband went on.
Other
Hitch Trailblazer
Sparky
Snugglewarmscale · 12k words · 124 views
EA Wild Date
MLP Gen 5
Romance
Comedy
Slice of Life
Visiting your crush’s parents is rather an experience. Especially on a date
OC
Other
Lulamoon-Crystal · 14k words · 12 0 · 309 views
EThe Tale of Spike's Egg
MLP: FiM
Sad
Slice of Life
Tragedy
(Collab with yodajax10. Takes place immediately after "Father Knows Beast".) Spike flies to Canterlot to ask Princess Celestia for answers about his past. Princess Celestia opts to tell Spike about how his egg ended up in her care.
Spike
Celestia
OC
Other
Main 6
SuperPinkBrony12 · 9.4k words · 25 0 · 693 views
EDON'T WRITE TO PRINCESS CELESTIA AT 3 AM (GONE WRONG!)
MLP: FiM
Comedy
Random
Slice of Life
The Cutie Mark Crusaders test the urban legend of writing to Princess Celestia at 3am. Nothing goes wrong.
Spike
Celestia
CMCs
6-D Pegasus · 2.7k words · 236 2 · 2.7k views
TThe Malevolent Multiversal Misadventures of Mare (April Fools 2024 Special)
MLP: FiM
MLP Gen 5
Adventure
Comedy
Random
Once upon a time, there was a random pony in Ponyville. When a villain shows up, this overpowered Mary Sue of a character must venture bëÿönd Extria im order to find thr Generic MacGuffin. Only then will she have a chef of defeating this boring villa
Violence
Crossover
Alt. Universe
Twilight
OC
Other
Bat Pony
Misty
Admiral Producer · 32k words · 17 2 · 142 views
EOne of Them
MLP: FiM
Drama
Slice of Life
When a setback made Starlight Glimmer seriously consider if she might be undeserving of friends, Spike had an important talk with her.
Spike
Main 6
Starlight Glimmer
ThePinkedWonder · 2.9k words · 35 1 · 523 views
EThe Long Wait
MLP: FiM
Sad
Celestia counts down the centuries until her sister's return.
Celestia
6-D Pegasus · 1.7k words · 107 1 · 1k views
TBatmare and Super Dragon: Worlds Collide
MLP: FiM
Drama
Thriller
(A crossover sequel to both "Batmare Triumphant" and "Dragon of Steel II".) The worlds of two costumed superheros: Batmare and Super Dragon, become intertwined. And the two heroes must adjust to their shared universe quickly.
Violence
Crossover
Alt. Universe
Twilight
Applejack
Spike
Other
SuperPinkBrony12 · 17k words · 10 0 · 124 views
EBlues Clues: Happy Easter Blue!
Equestria Girls
Comedy
Slice of Life
Spike, Inferno, Rarity and Sunset all need to play Blues Clues to figure what Blue's favorite thing to do for Easter!
Crossover
Human
Other
Sunset Shimmer
Rarity (EqG)
Spike (EqG)
Big Imagination E · 5k words · 6 8 · 156 views
EFlurry Of the Royal Guard
MLP: FiM
Slice of Life
Flurry Heart is looking for her purpose in life. Her parents have some concerns about her latest idea though.
Alt. Universe
Twilight
Cadance
Shining Armor
Flurry Heart
Mystic Sunrise · 1.2k words · 48 4 · 557 views
ERarity's Magical Boutique
MLP: FiM
Comedy
Slice of Life
(Based on "Rarity Catches a Cold" on YouTube by Magpiepony.) Rarity becomes sick while trying to finish up an order, and is forced to stop working. However, her illness causes parts of her workshop to magically come to life and work on the dress.
Rarity
SuperPinkBrony12 · 1.6k words · 15 0 · 153 views
TA Talk With A Bully
MLP: FiM
Mystery
Sad
Slice of Life
After the CMC come home with black eyes, Applejack, Rainbow Dash and Rarity take it upon themselves to find out what happened.
Narcotics
Violence
Profanity
Alt. Universe
Rainbow Dash
Applejack
Rarity
Diamond Tiara
CMCs
Artist · 3.5k words · 22 20 · 537 views
TNo, I Don't Want to Face Overwhelming Odds (I Just Want to Sleep)
MLP: FiM
Adventure
Comedy
Thriller
A band known as Underlord performs a series of black magic rituals in the form of rock concerts in an attempt to summon a primordial deity. Pink Scorch will stop them for $6.50.
Violence
Death
Profanity
OC
Power Ponies
Muggonny · 13k words · 26 0 · 250 views
EUnforgiven
MLP Gen 5
Slice of Life
Sparky has been hurt. His father takes him Some place safe.
OC
Hitch Trailblazer
Mane 5
Sparky
Snugglewarmscale · 1.8k words · 236 views

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