The story next on the list is "The New Timeline" https://www.fimfiction.net/story/293280/the-new-timeline

Now this story is a little different from the others. It seems the first five chapters differ from one another, not really sharing much of a connection. This is enough to convince readers that each chapter will be almost completely unrelated to the chapter before. (Though this is not the case as future chapters eventually start a flowing story.) Still, that is a problem because they may stop reading then and there. If chapters aren't really connected it often discourages the reader from continuing on or simply not liking it. They may think that's there's not much of a point to getting invested in the characters or remembering many details if the next chapter is going to be completely different. If each chapter is going to be different, then you need to make sure that they're good enough to be liked on their own and be satisfying enough. They are not. About chapter six or so the chapters connect and form a pretty good story worthy of attention. Still, it's pretty misleading for about 5 chapters and readers shouldn't have to wait that long.

On the plus side after the unconnected chapters the story does become pretty interesting. It uses emotions pretty well pretty intriging as well as near as I can tell. I didn't read ALL of it but some of the chapters after the first five were quite good. Again, it's not good to keep readers waiting so long so that detracts from the good.

The New Timeline: 60/100
Not great but if you skip the first 5 chapters you may find it pretty interesting.

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Thank you for taking your time.

5786085 No problem at all. Thank you for taking this so well.