Hello there,
so I tried to write a story from the first person view for the first time and because I have no expirience with it so far, I really could need a few opinions about the first chapter. Not only from the style itself, but also what I could improve or make different in my way of writing, be it the dialogs and such, or the descripting of the scenes and also what you think in general about the plot.

It is a mature story, so no link, but don't worry though, there a no real explicit scenes yet. There are some fighting though and yes, two characters die in the first chapter, but again it is not so much detailed that you get nightmares from it.

If you are interested in giving your opinion, send me a PM please and I send you the link to the gdoc.

Tags would be: Romance, Adventure, Gore, S**, that means when it is finished the current chapter is, like said, less extreme. :)