My adventures in "the magical land of Equestria" according to the huge white pony standing in front of me.
Bonus points if you get the reference in the title.
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You need to work on your grammar and formatting. Starting with capitalising your I's in the title.
You really need to flesh it out a bit more.
>> Scipio Smith Yeah, the "I" thing in the title really bugs me, as I am usually a Grammar Nazi when it comes to anything written, I have to, I'm the son of an English teacher. It will soon be rectified.
2729642 Thank you, I felt it was a bit rushed as well, so in coming chapters, I will try to flesh things out a little more
2730144 The general feel is like-worthy
I'll keep this in my 'read later' section, so I don't need to fave until I can be certain about it.
2730144 Title is a quote from The Doctor in season 7 episode 1 premier asylum of the daleks
2735356 A bit long, I know, but it serves its purpose.
And you are correct
Heyho, I read your fanfic, and I actually liked it!
Okay, some grammar there, some spelling here and it would be better, but I simply like your writing style, it's short and entertaining and I read this on my mobile, so it was a perfect little shot. 
Keep on writing! 
You may be wondering why I said I have a class to teach when I am a flight attendant in this story, if not, props to you for not noticing. The reason for this "inconsistency" is this: in my canon for this fic, I work on the side as a teacher in evenings, so technically I literally moonlight as a teacher. Glad to clear up the "mistake" in writing.
Could use some spacing between the paragraphs to make it less of a WALLOFTEXT, overall at 7 of 10...
One could work on detail a bit more... gona read the rest of it and ill say something there too...
okay seems a little rushed... and as i said before, a little more space between chapters, im going to follow the story... hope it gets better
Reference is from Doctor Who Season 7 Asylum of the Daleks. P.S Do any of you know where the button for emoticons is on a Droid phone?
Invader zim
Timelord12 I have a question the story is fine by me but your name has a 12 are there 11 others or is this your twelth regeneration P.S. Did i spell twelth right? or is it tweflth argh the choices!
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I named the account "Timelord12" because everyone who knows me calls me The Twelfth Doctor (to answer your question, I believe it's spelled twelfth, but I'm not sure) because I am not Matt Smith, I'm The Twelfth Doctor. Hope that helps a bit.
Keep going!!!
Rory! Don't be fair to the daleks when they're firing me at a planet!
Heh, I was just watching that Doctor Who episode the other day