A Kingdom torn and betrayed, destroyed in one nights passing. a lone paladin-king that was once hellbent on revenge. during his revenge evil was his choice. death knight, blackguard, hell warrior, all these names were known to him.
And after he found his vengeance when in the end it was his own deity that betrayed him, and what if she gave him a second chance. To save the broken balance on another world with a new life?
Can he live with the actions he committed in the name of revenge or will they haunt him till he returns to the ways of evil?
Chapters (8)
I also sent the edited copy of this chapter as well.
Just found this today and I must say, great work. I usually despise OP characters but so far so good. Keep it up.
Sounds pretty good. The sad moments where nicely fitted in the story. I'll read further on, and I'll decide if to fav it, but if this'll keep up, I'm sure I will. For now tho, have a thumbs up.
If I'll got some ideas or criticism, I'll let you know. For now it's good read.
I think you meant "stop".
Must.
We have.
...purple to a fiery orange, his mane going from light purple to red.
I think that he's too soft. He's a brutal warrior, so he should show it. I don't mean that he should be uncaring or heartless, but for someone with the back story as his, the "shushing" is a bit too out of character.
BTW. I found this story through the "Wolfpack", so I've been waiting for this without result. Where's the wolf? Customary to the group, he should be one, but he isn't, so...?
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early on. or actually brought the wolf back to life. they will be reunited. patience my good friend. patience
i have not brought the wolf to the story yet. it was shamelessly plugged
Moar chapters please.
It's an interesting premise, and I think that it holds a lot of promise.
However, I think you seriously need to proofread your work a couple more times before each chapter, and perhaps get an editor. I can see multiple spelling and grammar mistakes right off the bat, and that ruins the presentation a bit.
But, yeah. Interesting idea, I'm looking forward to seeing how it all turns out.