Different decisions can change so many things about the future. How do you know what the right decision is? How do you know what you are doing is for the better? What if something so drastic happened that your whole life changed in an instant. You have less than five seconds to act, and you have no time to think about what you need to do. How are you supposed to make the right decision based on so little time? Even after it's happened, it's impossible to know what would have happened if you made a different one.
No matter what happens, you live with the consequences of your actions.
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YOU GUYS DIDN'T EVEN HAVE TIME TO READ IT WITHIN THE TIME I WAS GONE...WHY DISLIKE IT?!
I'm mad. I'm going to bed.
This tale could be slightly altered to make it seems much more depressing. I mean you could have added in the Mare Do Well incident into the tale as well to show us that Rainbow Dash isn't as great as she said she is.
Also imagine what could have occurred if Twilight came too late and if Rainbow wrote the girls a letter of goodbye.
Nice tale as it does show that Rainbow can be a tad careless if she isn't too careful.
hey loved your story man you should make more chapters
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You have encountered what I refer to as 'the Twidash tax.'
Try to not take it too personally; the pairing is one that sparks a lot of strong feelings, both for and against. There's a roving pack of haters that downvote any and every Twidash story they come across.
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also not really fair, but what can you do I guess? It just sucks cuz I never had a story go "bad" before. It made it a little better seeing bats commented on my story though 
That's gotta be really annoying
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Wasn't really planning on this being more than a one-shot
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I tried to make it quite a bit depressing but not TOO bad, and then be able to change that around with the last like 2 lines.
even as a one shot, this feels rather "wanting" I guess, perhaps even rushed. like there was a lot more that could have been added should you have chosen to do so, such as signs of RD's emotional decline before getting to her suicide attempt or some interaction or something earlier so that spitfire's letter was less "out-of-left-field". that's how I feel about it, anyway; and for various reasons, one of those being I haven't written anything that wasn't a school assignment (I can't say they were particularly good either), my opinion doesn't have to count for jack-squat
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I can see how you might think that, but that's kind of how I meant it to be. It's less of a story, and more a telling of the important events and decisions that led up to the present.
....Spitfire you know nothing.Lightning Dust you ARE nothing
This is beautiful. Two days in a row I have read stories where one of the main six tries to kill themselves and is saved by Twilight! In one of them Fluttershy tries to kill herself and then ends up with Rainbow Dash. Now Rainbow Dash tries to kill herself and ends up with Twilight. These two stories have so many similarities!
Great story, many feelings involved, I'm no usually read tragedy tags especially if one of the Mane6 going to die, but I give this a chance and I don't regret, really good story, don't worry about the thumbs down, if a story doesn't have it, is because It hasn't published.
You count with my thumb up and fave.
That was beutiful
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It's something you learn to ignore, or at least I did. Downvotes that don't have comments explaining should be ignored, I think. If someone isn't going to take the time to explain why it is they didn't like something, what weight should you give their opinion exactly? Of course, not all unexplained downvotes are based on petty things like ships or the premise of the story, but still. If someone's not gonna say "I downvoted this, because your grammar is awful," or "Everyone was out of character," or something, then the downvote they've given you is completely nonconstructive and should be ignored.
And I don't know what's special about me commenting; I'm just a guy who likes ponies.
So, for the story itself, which I just had time to read. Overall, the emotional arc is a solid one. Rainbow falling hard after losing the 'bolts is a good theme to explore that fits well with her character and having her friends there to help pick up the pieces, whether she wants them there or not, is very compelling.
That said, it comes across a little thin at times. I'm not sure you need that inner monologue at the start of the story, discussing that old pain in Rainbow's eyes. It's not a bad image and it adds to the lingering melancholy, but it also pulls the emotional punch right from the start, because you know that whatever happens, Rainbow's still kickin'. It doesn't need to be gotten rid of, but moving it, I think, would add an extra blow to Twilight walking in, and up the urgency of the scene as it unfolds.
That whole section could be altered slightly and moved to the end, to render it along the lines of, "I question my actions, and what I've done, and what would have happened otherwise. I see the pain in her face every day, which I have to take some blame for, even if my intentions were pure. I see it, and it hurts me, and I question what I've done...but at the end of the day, her laying next to me asleep and smiling, I know deep down it was the right thing."
My two cents. Overall, a nice story.
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Actually I know exactly what you mean with that, because while I was writing, I completely changed how the story was gonna go halfway through, so it kind of messed it up. It was 4 am and I was too lazy to fix it lol
Dan. See how good things turn out when you write about best pony? <3
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Would you care to tell me the name of the first one? You've picked my curiosity.
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Piqued*
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Damnit, autocorrect.
I put one letter out of place and I get a new word.
Dear Spitfire,
I wrote this letter after reading the one you sent to Rainbow Dash. I apologize for invading her or your privacy, but I was curious about why one of my best friend, and the most self-confidence pony I have ever met was trying to commit suicide this morning.
Now, since you were kind enough to give her a piece of your mind about Dash, I hope you don´t mind if I do the same about you:
First of all, while I don´t know you personally, I remember your interactions back in the Gala, when your and your team basically ignored every intent of my friend to gain the attention of her idols, who seemed too much busy talking with the elite and possing to reporters to notice, or when Ponyville´s weather team was trying to produce a hurricane to raise water to Cloudsdale, and Dash´s dire work to train her team was almost thwarted for the lack of a single pony´s wingpower (once again, you didn´t even move a feather to help, if only for the sake of the task).
Regarding Dash´s behaviour on the Academy, and with Lighting Dust, I admit the logic of most of your accusations. However, I could raise three points:
a) Lighting´s actions almost cost the lifes of me and the others Bearers of Harmony, her oldest friends, for the mere sake of showing up, not to mention she didn´t ever apologized to any of us when Dash told her off.
b) I couldn´t help but notice the training space area was not guarded or restricted in any way when my globe entered in, that there weren´t any instructors on sight to watch over the cadet´s manoeuvres or to catch me and my friends when we were falling to our bucking deaths, and that you seemed fully ignorant of the incident until Rainbow personally turned up on your office.
c) You blame Rainbow Dash for denying a second chance to her wing-partner, when you didn´t give it to any of them. Both pegasi are incredible talented, and I´m sure they would have done anything (even to swallow their ego) to to prove themselves worthy on your eyes again, have you ever bothered.
To summarize, even if you could prove every one of the occasions where you acted like a total jerk were a sort of elaborate test over Rainbow Dash (which frankly I doubt), you are definitively incompetent for somepony of your rank. If the Wonderbolts are really an academy who give so little value to their young promises, then I totally agree Rainbow Dash is not the pony for you.
-Twilight Sparkle.
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And yes, if you couldn't tell, her letter was supposed to be flawed and a bit selfish. As was Lightning Dust's
2701299 Would Anypony Miss Me?
At first, I was a little apprehensive about reading this; I thought Dash was going to end up killing herself, then I read it and realised that the suicide attempt was thwarted.
As for Spitfire; bitch please! she got knocked out by one of Rainbow Dash;s friends and then got saved by Rainbow Dash herself. And I'm sorry, but explain to me a situation in which Rainbow Dash would be required to forgive and defend somepony she hardly knew after that somepony almost got her friends killed, casualties or not?
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Like I said, Spitfire's logic was supposed to be flawed.
I'm a big fan of these type of stories and in other fanfictions of mine have used a similar style of writing that you presented in the intro. Overall the story was sad and the emotion was well done for the type of story it was. Spitfire's letter seemed a little bit unrealistic, but believable enough to be used. Dash's lack of defense to Lighting Dust as the reason for her denial into the Wonderbolts is awfully far-fetched in my eyes, but its an insignificant problem really.
I actually think the story could have been done without the romance at all. Twilight's kiss seemed rather sudden and out of the blue, as there wasn't anything leading up to that happening. It just... occurred.
Overall, I did really enjoy it, and that's enough for me. Nice work!
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I can't write a story without a little romance...feels weird lol
Dear Spitfire,
You are a cunt. What are you? You're a cunt, yes you are. You live in a cunty cottage and you drive a cunty car.
Judging from her letter, it's evident Lightning Dust learned NOTHING. She brings up experiences that Rainbow Dash ultimately has outgrown while she herself never did. To me, it looks like she's not upset for her mistakes, she's upset because she paid for them, and as a result blames and resents Rainbow Dash for making her face consequences for her selfish and extremely dangerous mistakes; mistakes that Lightning already showed absolutely no remorse for, nor even concern over when she found she'd nearly killed several ponies to the point it would not be a stretch to call her a sociopath.
As for the instant downvote thing, I've seen it happen, I've HAD it happen to me. There are some called "drive-by downvoters" who essentially trolls who have no lives and thus try to feel special by automatically downvoting fledgling fics in hopes it'll offend the writer. And then there are those who, like bats said, are too immature about their shipping preferences. Long story short, just ignore them if they can't even give a civil reason behind it they aren't worth dwelling on.
And yet another story of Rainbow attempting suicide and Twilight saving her. Actually, this is the second one I've read and the only complete one since it's a one-shot. Have a like and fav!