Abandoned.
Abandoned by his own species.
Shatter knew this would happen. He felt it from the day he first opened his eyes. How could anyone appreciate a changeling that was useless? No changeling would care for another who was like that. But one unicorn, suprisingly her of all ponies, might just care enough...
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Thanks!
2786120 Interesting premise, but Chrysalis seemed very OOC (out of character). Try making her less cruel and more apathetic. For example, you might want to change dropping those rocks to putting up a shield spell, because she isn't that mean to her own kind
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True. Thanks. I'll work on that
2786576 No problem! I love Chrysalis fics, but don't really like it when she is evil or a jerk.
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I just edited it. Seem a bit better?
2786614 Yep! She seems ruthless, but not nasty.
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Great! I just worked on chapter two, warning: it's not done yet
Christmas? I'm pretty sure they don't have Christmas in Equestria, they have Hearts Warming Eve (or something like that . I can't remember)
Twilight act strange maybe not so OOC but nearly.
Non so come andrĂ a finire ma credo che il piccolo ha appena firmato la propria condanna a morte!
A meno che Twilight non riesca a nasconderlo abbastanza a lungo da permetterli di poter guarire dalle ferite, trovare un rimedio per il corno e anche un posto dove stare.
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Sorry, I don't speak Spanish.
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To tell the truth is Italian, I do not speak good English and even write it well. However, using the Google translator:
I do not know how it will end but I think the baby has just signed your own death warrant!
Unless Twilight is not able to hide long enough to allow them to heal from the wounds, find a remedy for the horn and even a place to stay.
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I don't want to give out any spoilers, but to tell the truth, Twilight will find Shatter a place to stay.
Scumbag Chrysalis.
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yeah I know
There are many many mistakes in there. (oyu,sometime...)
Besides that:
You seem to go very fast in time without making it a new paragraph and it's kind of hard to read.
Do not post a chapter until it is finished
Chapter one was nice and the second one was too.
This chapter however was hard to read for me. I had to go through some passages more then once to understand it.
I'd love to see where this is going.
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first thing I would like to say is thanks for the fave and liking the story
Second, I'm going to unpublish the third chapter and finish it and fix it some more.
Thanks for the advice
You my friend made a sad gripping story and for that I thank you.
Damn you, having it on hiatus for a year and a half.
~Crystalline Electrostatic~