It's been about a week of a terrible storm and it doesn't look like it's gonna end very soon and Scootaloo is very scared. Will rainbow be able to help her get over her fear, or will the evil forces romming there world take over Scoots body and life.
Please tell me if you see any typos. I go to a all french school. Not good at english spelling.
The feels!
I like the concept yet you could use to pace yourself a bit better because it feels a bit rushed right now. I'll work on checking for some basic grammar mistakes if you want but the best that I can do is misspelling words and some basic grammar.
I'm loving this so far so please do continue. I'll help you if you need so don't be afraid to ask.
*an all French school
Its Daring, Not darring.
And theres tons of grammatic errors. Ever thought of a proof-reader or an editor?
But anyways... i dont ret grammar errors and misspellings destroy a good story. I liked this one. Good overall, maybe a little rushed?
This chapeter gets 6/10 Photo Finish's Purrfection
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Wow,
thanks and I'll ask if I need help.
I will continue but it mite take a bit of time just this chapter took me about 3 days to rite it. Also I have a hard time comming upp with ideas for the chapter, don't take me rong I know whats going to happen I just want to put in detail like KrishnaKarnak. Go check out her stories, they inspired me to do these and there awesome!
Also I mite take ideas for futur chapter, but nothing too big, say something that will change the hole story.
2934134 1,000 to 4,000 word chapters r just fine their not to big and not to small.
2934134 Your title. You need to fix the word "Rainning" to "Raining".
There are SOOOOOOO many errors.
rainning
baddly
heared
easaly
hade
And these are just a few of them
Also, in the sentence,
"said Rainbow trying to not scare Scoots even more."
You should replace "Scoots" with "Scootaloo" or "The young pegasus". Scoots is a name often used by Rainbow while talking directly to Scootaloo, and it sounds strange to put Scoots in a narrative sentence.
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Okay thx! Really appreceate the help!
What happened to chapter 2 it just disappeared
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I'm working on it right now. I just stopped to see what the comment was. Sorry
Sorry for such a short chapter/intermission, like I said I have writers block, the only reason I posted this chapter/intermission was because I thought I should at least put something up for you guys before I go to Montreal . Once again sorry such a short and crappy chapter.
Au revoir, À la prochaine fois!!!! ( Good bye, till next time!!!!! )
FB
The next chapter will be way better over 1,000 words. I promise!!!! or shsould I say I pinkie promise. Cross my heart and hope to fly, stick a cupcake in my eye!!!!!
i love this story and man rainbow cant cook
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I know she can't cook, I' planning on making her cook some more but burn one or two things. Sorry for spoilling a bit.
orphanage but overall good fic 4out of 5 scootangels for u
Dude. Best. Pony. Parody. Ive. Ever. Heard. EVER!!!!!!
I know this was made a long time ago and chances are my question won't be answered, but I'm going to ask it anyway. Is the backstory based off of KrishnaKarnak's story, "What's Really The Most Important"? Because it is exactly the same. Rainbow adopting Scoots because she was abandoned in everfree by her mother and was found by somepony looking for herbs.
It might just be a coincidence, but it's a very specific coincidence. Oh well, pretty good story either. I'm always a big fan of stories involving Scoots being loved by Dash.
Annnnnd just like that my question was answered. Now we have Scoots with anxiety problems. It's too accurate to be a coincidence.