Of Rage and Power

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Tempered Steel

Tempered Steel #1 · Aug 10th, 2013 · · · The Test Subject ·

It took me awhile before I realized that this was leading towards a Human in Equestria, which I remarkably don't like, but this story might actually be an exception, because I've heard a couple of stories about the human having amnesia, was originally a test subject, or had a dark past (Okay, I've heard alot of them but have never read them.), and my initial thought was that it was going to a bit lacking to my tastes, but this is really good so far.

I'm interested about those "white coats" and their specific purpose to the whole story, so that's got me hooked. Another thing was that you didn't immediately get to where he was in Equestria already, and you gave him a small backstory. (Another trait that I liked.)

This looks like it might be going somewhere good, so I'll keep up with it the best I can.

~Tempered Metal

theblarglknight

theblarglknight #2 · Aug 10th, 2013 · · · The Monster ·

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So does that mean you want to read the second chapter?

Though, I think I might re-work it a bit, I just want a different opinion on it. I PM you second chapter.

Tempered Steel

Tempered Steel #3 · Aug 10th, 2013 · · · The Monster ·

Second chapter in and looking pretty decent.

I honestly couldn't think of a better name than the accelerator one, so I just left that alone. Not really that graphic to me. I didn't really feel it penetrate my skull and make me sick, but that's not really a bad thing.

Still interested about the white suits, but I guess I'm going to have to read the whole story once you post all of it.

~Tempered Metal

MarcusBullet