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Good story!
keep on writing...
Very nice, very sweet. At points, it did shift from present tense to past, but nothing too bad.
I only wish we knew more about the past, like Pinkie Pie and Spike's family. The thing is, however, that was the beauty of this story. They didn't discuss what happened exactly, because that would feel forced, even more so if explained in narrative, not to mention that it wasn't about explaining what happened, but rather reminiscing about the past and bringing out the good moments to enjoy. Good, sweet story.
A sweet and charming little story that nicely touches on Twilight and Spikes devotion to each other... Well done!
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Thank you very much for reading!
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Good to hear from you again, Miss Dark Angel. I'll be sure to review and fix these errors, where they may appear. Cheers!
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...would you happen to be the same Harwick as harwicks-art on DA?
The "ponies playing poker" painting you drew is my laptop's background! You are an incredible artist, and I thank you for gracing my page!
You're getting a watch.
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Yes, that's my dA page... Thanks! I'm afraid watching me here might be rather boring, as I haven't produced anything for FimFiction and just use the account to read and comment on other people's stories, but I suppose you never know...
Regardless, thanks for sharing this charming Spike and Twilight tale!
I really loved this story!
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I thank you very much for the read! This is my first fic in a year, and it's shown me that I still have ideas that people like. Thank you!
Not too bad. The end was especially sweet, although I like to think Spike will end up with a mare instead of a partner of "his own kind". It was also a little unfortunate to hear Spike saying "your friends" and "your brother" as if he's alienating himself from his friends and family. Also:
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I feel as if Spike's most adamant character flaw in the show is that he is constantly searching for acceptance and familial ties, even though it's been proven to him time and time again that family is in the heart, not in the mind.
It's exemplified in most of his title card appearances (see "Dragon Quest", "Spike at Your Service", or most episodes involving Spike.)
Now where would spike find a 'family' out side the family he had already?
That was a sweet moment for Twilight and Spike.