Update August 2nd, 2015: This is my very first story and a very old one at that. A lot of the grammar and punctuation errors that are in this one are those I no longer do, so don't expect all of my stories to be like this.
Fyra is an "alicorn" who has lost her memory , but knows it was wiped. How did she end up in a forest and who is she? Who is this strange black creature who calls out to her whenever she closes her eyes? How will she survive in a world she knows nothing of?
Hopefully a group of six particular mares may be enough to teach her new things , while Fyra starts to remember her past, and helps an old friend in the process.
As noted by the "teen" category , there will be some gore , but not where YOU would expect nor how YOU would expect it.
Also , for those who think this is the overused thing of the Alicorn OC (which I've understood many of you think) , look what the word is in between in the description.
you seem to have hit some of the key elements of a generic OC
alicorn - check
lost memory - check
wierd visions only they can see - check
probly gonna be the only one who can stop some big disaster - check
and i gatherd all that just by reading the description and that's a bad sign
i naturally will give this benefit of the doubt however & thumb it up
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*Adding onto your checklist*
Finds smashing dishes Funny - Check
Likes cloaks - Check
So uh, Defiantly disaster.
Maybe...
Geacu (still new to this site. Dunno how many things work. CURSE YOU TECHNOLOGY!) , I meant to give some form of curiosity as to why she is an alicorn and why she is like she is. While I'm not a fan of the amnesia type , I tried to spruce up the base term by showing that the character actually KNOWS that it lost it's memory. I'm open for suggestions as to how to change the description to mke it fit , but still interest people into reading this.
Oh , and she isn't the only who can stop that "big disaster" you be writin' aboot.. I don't like Mary Sue-ing. Just wait , as the story progresses, you'll see.
Hmm...no criticism. It is what I live for. Noone cares? *starts sulking* You cruel , cruel ********! You force me to....PUNCH THIS BABY!
Awwww........;)
FINALLY FINISHED! I actually finished something that was a story.
Edit: Would you look at that , a triple seven. Seven likes , dislikes , and comments.
*clop clop*......uuuhh......what?
Yeah...I know...I thought of that when I wrote it. I was hoping the non-perversive would ignore it. We seem to have learned something today.
oh noes an alicorn pinkie no wall is safe
683134 Of course, there's the tremendous amount of grammatical errors and whatnot.
690751 Thanks. You also aren't disturbed by them?
694050 Aye. That Bullseye. Imma bring in Motel as well in the sequel.
Also, the creatures that the tower belonged to. They have a much more complex organisation than just the tower.
Fyra means 4 in Swedish.
Just wanted to throw that out there
746986 That's good to know. I just took the name from fiery and fire and put them together. Also, I thought that noone read this anymore.
Okay seriously. I love this story, but the fact that you named yourself "The Psychopath" , just makes me want to hug you.
1022220 You do?
timne for a marathon i shall read all
wut
6270384 GEEBUS! It's been three years since anyone ever came to this story, and pretty much everyone who commented here is gone.
I put the word 'alicorn' between quotes so people would understand that Fyra wasn't a true alicorn, as they all worried she was one and a mary-sue, and so forth. I quelled those qualms as the story progressed, however.
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Mkay. In case you're wondering, I was drawn to you by your picture. It interested me so I decided to look at your stories.
6270793 It's a good thing you didnt notice the subliminal messaging in-I mean, I know. I love this pic, too.
6271021
O.o
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To say, though, this isn't a very good story. Full of errors and other spelling and grammar problems. I never bothered to fix it because it's my first story with a premise that not many see as being good.
6273432
Meh, worth a shot.
6273936 I still have plenty of other stories that are well done.
6273952
Indeed you do.
6273976 I assume they're well done because of reception. I don't judge my own works. That's not how it works.
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Ever considered having an editor go over this story? Just to refine it?
6273989 I can do that myself now. It's just that, as this is a super old story that I don't care much for and not many people read anyways, I never really bothered.
6274164
Meh, that's your choice.
6274171 Well, it's clear that nobody reads this. The last comment was nearly three years ago.
6274242
Oh god, true dat.
6274313 Yeah. You don't repair a bridge that's no longer used so it can fall back into disrepair.
6274355
Actually, you do. Lest someone walk over it and fall to their death. What you said is like saying "I'll never wash myself, because I'll just get dirty again"
6274368 "That's no longer used". Means no one uses it.
6274372
That doesn't necessarily mean that someone won't. There's always the possibility. Am I not evidence enough of that?
6274425 True, but it took three years for someone to walk by. Besides, this thing would need a complete rewrite, and I hate rewrites.
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Oh for fu- this freakin' conversation has made me weary and now I'm second guessing reading this!
6274566 I thought you already read it. You can read it and tell me what you think. I'll do a quick grammar purge for you.
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Oh. Wow. You weren't kidding. This could do with some serious editing.
6997819 YOU TOOK THIRTY WEEKS TO ANSWER?!