Oddly, Trixie didn’t feel nervous about the fact that, with the sun directly overhead, it was essentially midday. Perhaps that superstition was keyed more to the time of day than the position of the sun; either that or she was so terrified right now that mere nervousness over the unnatural midday wasn’t capable of registering beyond abstractly noting its absence.
Trixie opened the door to her house, closed it, and let the invisibility spell she had wrapped around her and Ditzy Doo, whom she was carrying on her back, slide off of them. On seeing Ditzy Doo, she almost wished she hadn’t. The pegasus mare’s eyes were wide with panic, and she was holding onto Trixie tightly, sobbing without shame into the unicorn’s mane.
“Dinky!” Ditzy cried out as Trixie made her way into her living room, suddenly finding life in her limbs as her wings began beating frantically, lifting herself off of Trixie’s back and straight up. She was stopped only by the room’s ceiling, and came crashing down to the floor again. Trixie leapt on top of her before the mare could get her hooves under her and go racing outside.
“Ditzy!” Trixie cried as she held the pegasus down. “Ditzy! Stop! You can’t – ”
“Get off!” Ditzy Doo interrupted, foreleg lashing out and hitting Trixie squarely in her jaw. The unicorn stumbled backwards, and Ditzy began running, but Trixie was faster and was once again atop her. “Get off of me! I have to save her!” Ditzy cried out.
“You can’t!”
“Yes I can!” Ditzy shouted, rolling over onto her back in order to buck Trixie. The unicorn’s horn pulsed with magic and stopped the blow, then Trixie once again threw herself atop Ditzy Doo, holding her down. She did not stop struggling in the slightest. “She’s my daughter! I have to save her! I have – ”
“You can’t!” Trixie repeated. She stopped holding Ditzy Doo down, and instead switched to embracing the pegasus. Unsurprisingly, Ditzy latched onto Trixie, once again crying her eyes out – she wasn’t going to run out of tears any time soon, it seemed.
Trixie felt her own eyes watering as well. “I’m sorry…” Trixie begged. “I’m sorry. I didn’t know Corona would do that. I didn’t know, I was just trying to save the mayor, I thought I was going to die but then I thought I found a way to make it out and then nopony would be hurt and I didn’t know…”
The two ponies remained on the floor of Trixie’s living room for several minutes, just holding each other, one wracked with feelings of failure and the other with guilt. At length, Trixie forced herself to pull away from Ditzy Doo, and got onto her shaking hooves, her expression dark.
“She’ll be fine if – ” Trixie began, when the window to her living room exploded inwards in a shower of wood and glass. Trixie’s horn flared, but she didn’t have time to react as a jasmine-and-blue blur slammed into her and forcing her back against her wall. Trixie’s eyes widened as they locked onto Raindrops’ own. “W-wait, I – ” the unicorn started.
“There’s maybe fifteen seconds before half of Ponyville arrives here,” Raindrops interrupted as she pulled away from Trixie. Trixie began to speak, but the weather pony’s hoof was near-instantly in her mouth, shutting her up. “You. Carrot Top’s. Run.”
Trixie blinked once in shock, before survival instinct kicked in. She cast her familiar invisibility-and-silence-spell combo – eliciting a slightly raised eyebrow from Raindrops at the sight of her being erased from the visible spectrum – before dashing off as fast as her hooves could take her. On her way out of her home, through the same hole that Raindrops had made while entering, she saw the mob of ponies approaching her house, cries of traitor and monster on their lips. The mob was surprisingly small; then again, she supposed that a large number of ponies would still be paralyzed with fear and terror over what had just happened.
Despite nopony being able to see her, and so being supposedly perfectly safe, Trixie ran for her life from Ponyville.
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Carrot Top jumped as her door opened and closed of its own accord not long after she had arrived home herself with Lyra and Cheerilee, and was startled again when a blue-coated, white-maned, purple-clad unicorn appeared from nowhere only a few feet away from her, barrel heaving. She looked to Carrot Top. “Hi – ” Trixie began, when she found herself seized in a golden magical aura and hurled upwards, into the ceiling of Carrot Top’s living room.
“You!” Lyra – still wearing her white-and-gold dress – exclaimed, charging forward despite a magenta earth pony’s attempts to stop her. “It’s your fault! BonBon’s been kidnapped, I’ll never see her again, and it’s your fault!”
Trixie grunted, her own horn flashing and shoving Lyra’s telekinesis off of her. She managed to fall from the ceiling and land on her hooves without problem, and both Carrot Top and Cheerilee managed to stop Lyra’s attempts to abandon telekinesis and use her bare hooves on Trixie. The blue unicorn nevertheless began backing away, but then the door opened again, and Raindrops entered, half-carrying a still-distraught Ditzy Doo with her. The jasmine-coated pegasi glared at Trixie as she did, closing the door behind her firmly before taking in a few deep breaths and letting them out slowly.
Trixie looked around at the situation. Lyra had stopped trying to cause grievous harm to Trixie, instead falling to her knees and crying, with Cheerilee beside her and holding her. Ditzy Doo was at least as distraught; Trixie made her way over to the gray pegasus took up a similar role as Cheerilee’s for Lyra, before looking to Raindrops and Carrot Top. “Okay,” she said, “why are you helping me?”
“You were trying to save the mayor,” Raindrops observed. “Just about everypony in Ponyville’s too angry and too scared to see that right now, but I know that’s what you were trying to do.” Her eyes narrowed, then, and she leaned in close to Trixie. “Right? Because if Corona was right – if you really were just kissing her flank to save your behind – ”
“No!” Trixie interrupted, though she paused. “Not – I was trying to save the mayor. I was ready to die. But then Corona asked me about my noble title and I realized that she wanted me alive because she’s going to need to keep the government intact in order to actually run Equestria, and I thought I saw a way out, a way for me to survive and the mayor to survive and everypony to just make it out okay! I didn’t know she’d kidnap ponies!” Trixie hugged Ditzy Doo tighter at that, as the mare’s tears resumed with even greater vigor. She glared at Raindrops. “But why are you helping me? You and Carrot Top? You two hate me! Princess Luna told me so!”
Raindrops jabbed a hoof at Cheerilee. The magenta earth pony blinked a few times, looking between the five other ponies. “I saw what you were doing,” she said. “With the mayor, trying to save her. I heard what you were saying, and I know you were just trying to make it out okay, but everypony was getting so mad. I’d heard from Princess Luna that you and Raindrops knew each other, so I got her, and got Lyra, and Lyra suggested Carrot Top’s, and we were going to help you hide since the residency wouldn’t be safe for you, but then Corona took the foals…”
“But I thought you hated me. I thought you all hated me.”
“That doesn’t mean we want to see you mobbed.”
“Not even Raindrops?”
The jasmine pegasus whickered. “No. You’re mine.”
“Besides,” Cheerilee said, “I know you were just trying your best to make the festival a good – ”
“What do we do?” Carrot Top interrupted suddenly, as the situation became too much for her. She began to pace in place. “Corona’s free and Princess Luna is gone and I’m harboring a traitor to Equestria – ”
“I’m not a traitor!” Trixie shouted.
“You look like one!” Carrot Top countered. “Even though you’re not you look like one and they’re going to search all the houses in Ponyville and they’ll find you and lynch you and lynch me for harboring you and then Corona is going to get mad and kill all the – ”
Carrot Top’s ranting was stopped by Raindrops shoving a hoof in her mouth. A long silence began, interrupted only by the gasping sobs of Ditzy Doo and Lyra. “That’s not going to happen,” Trixie intoned after awhile. “Corona won’t kill anypony. I’ll…I’ll just hide for as long as it takes for Ponyville to calm down. Corona said she’d return everypony she took as long as Ponyville obeyed all her commands. All that needs to happen is that and for me to not be stupid and run into the Everfree.”
“Why would you go there?” Cheerilee asked.
Trixie grimaced, looking down. “I thought I could get the…nevermind. Nothing. Forget I said anything.”
“No,” Raindrops said, stomping forward. “Get what? What are you talking about?”
Trixie looked up. Raindrops’ eyes were narrow as she regarded Trixie. The unicorn stared for a long moment before letting out a sigh. “Okay,” she said. “Technically this is a state secret. But it’s not in any law books or official orders or anything, it’s just something that only me and Princess Luna and maybe a few others know. Okay?”
Raindrops nodded. Trixie looked to each of the remaining four ponies; Lyra and Ditzy Doo were still mostly lost in their sadness, while Carrot Top and Cheerilee also nodded in understanding. Sighing, Trixie pressed on. “While I was talking to Corona, but before she took the foals, I thought I knew some way to get rid of her. I thought I’d go get the Elements of Harmony.”
Carrot Top blinked a few times. “You wanted to go to Canterlot?” she exclaimed. “Where there’s a good chance Corona is going to be setting everything on fire?”
Trixie shook her head. “The Elements aren’t in Canterlot.”
“Yes they are,” Cheerilee objected, standing, though she remained close to Lyra. “They’re on display in the palace. I’ve seen them, we went there on a field trip when I was a filly, Lyra and all the other unicorns kept going on about how much magic was coming off of them – ”
“Those aren’t the Elements,” Trixie explained. “They’re fakes. Just six random gemstones that Princess Luna pours tons of magic into every year to make them seem like they’re the Elements. I only know because my special talent is magic, and I’ve got a really good feel for magic too, and after I started my apprenticeship with Luna and she taught me the detect magic spell I used to cast it on everything. I cast it on Luna once when she raised the moon and I went blind for three days from how much magic she lets out while doing that. But when I cast it on the Elements, I didn’t even get a headache. I thought that was weird – y’know, they’re the Elements and all – and I asked Princess Luna about it, so she showed me the real Elements.”
Cheerilee blinked. “Why would Princess Luna lie about that?”
“Because the real Elements are petrified rocks,” Trixie said. “They’re in the Everfree Forest, in the ruins of the Palace of the Royal Pony Sisters. After Luna banished Corona to the sun, they just went inert and kind of froze in place. No force – not even Luna herself – could move them. Luna didn’t want everypony to know that, though. So she made the fakes.”
“And she just left the real ones unguarded?” Carrot Top asked. “Why?”
Trixie grimaced. “Not exactly ungaurded. There’s traps, and of course they’re in the middle of the Everfree and all its monsters. As for why, Princess Luna didn’t say, but at a guess I’d say she just didn’t want to ever have to go back to where she’d fought the Tyrant Sun.” Trixie shook her mane. “I thought that if I could get to the Elements of Harmony, I might find some way of getting them free and using them on Corona. But not now, not while she has those hostages…”
“No,” Raindrops said. She wasn’t looking at Trixie, but rather down at the ground, eyes moving a little as though reading. “No, we have to go now. Now’s the perfect time.”
“What?” the five other ponies in the room demanded, with Trixie appending a “and where’s this we coming from?” to her objection.
Raindrops looked between them. “Corona has her hooves full right now,” she pointed out. “That’s why she took all those mares and stallions with her, remember? To keep an eye on the foals. She has a government to overthrow and bring over to her side, and she’ll probably have to do a repeat of what she did with Trixie in most other towns and cities in Equestria, at least until she forces everypony else to bow to her. Plus, there’s the Royal Guard.”
“They can’t win,” Carrot Top objected, shaking her head morosely at the thought.
“But they’ll fight anyway,” Raindrops pointed out. “They’ll be buying us time without even knowing. If the Elements can work at all, then now is our best chance to get them.”
“But Corona…” Lyra objected, as she and Ditzy stood. “Corona will kill BonBon and all those foals if she finds out what we’re doing!”
Raindrops fixed Lyra with a sad look, then turned to Ditzy as well. “If we wait,” she said, “then we’ll never get this opportunity again. One of the first things Corona is going to do, when she gets a chance, is check out where everypony thinks the Elements are. If she realizes they’re fakes, she’ll start hunting for the real ones. And the first place you look for something is the last place you saw it.”
She looked between the five other ponies. “Come on,” she said. “We all know the stories about Corona. The legends. What she’s like. We’ve seen what she’s capable of. We saw what she did to Princess Luna. Those ponies she kidnapped won’t be safe until Corona is back in the sun where she belongs.”
“But where’s this we coming from?” Trixie repeated, stepping forward. “It’s too dangerous. I wasn’t even thinking of asking anypony to come with me – ”
Raindrops snorted. “Like you’d last five minutes in the Everfree by yourself.”
“Not the point.”
“I know. I also know that now that I know there’s a chance of stopping Corona, I couldn’t live with myself if I didn’t at least try.”
Trixie searched the pegasus’ face. Despite her words and tone, her expression remained surprisingly neutral. “Fine,” she said. “I guess I could use a set of wings, anyway. The rest of you – ”
“I’m coming too,” Cheerilee said, stepping forward. “Those foals are my students, or a lot of them are, anyway. I have to try and save them.”
Trixie began to object, when Carrot Top stepped forwards. “Me too,” she said. “I know a lot about the flora of the Everfree Forest. I might be able to help you.”
Trixie looked between the three ponies. “Okay…” she acquiesced. “Okay. So the four of us – ”
“I’m coming too,” Lyra interrupted, wiping her tears from her eyes. “Raindrops…Raindrops is right. BonBon won’t be safe unless Corona is sealed away again. Plus, Trixie, your special talent might be magic, but I actually went to the magic academy. I might be able to help with freeing the Elements.”
“Fine,” Trixie said, shaking her head. “Fine. Ditzy Doo, I guess you should go home and – ”
“I’m already at the door,” Ditzy Doo’s voice said. Everypony turned to look at her. Her wings were no longer sagging with sorrow, but instead were held at the ready, and her face, though her eyes were still red from tears and walled, was set with a look of determination. “I’m coming too. Dinky Doo would want me to try and save her.”
Trixie blinked, looking between the five ponies. “No,” she said in a small voice, though it was louder for her next proclamation. For some reason, she felt she had to try and stop them, stop this madness. “No! This is stupid! We’re going to get everypony killed!”
“Fine,” Raindrops said. “We’ve still got Lyra for unicorn magic. The five of us will go into the Everfree. You can stay behind.”
Trixie blinked. “Are you trying reverse psychology on me?”
Raindrops’ expression clearly asked do I look like the kind of pony who’d try that, even though she herself remained silent. Instead, Cheerilee stepped up to Trixie. “Nopony will blame you,” she said. “You must have been close to Princess Luna…if you don’t think you can handle this right now, we’ll understand.”
Trixie recoiled a little. She’d managed to not think about seeing Princess Luna so soundly thrashed by Corona…not think about the fact that Luna was gone, sealed away for a millennium…for several minutes now. The image of Corona’s magic sending Luna away in a white comet, straight into the sky, came rushing back to her.
Even if they won…even if they somehow, against all odds, got the Elements, figured out how to make them work, and then used them on Corona…would that bring Luna back?
Trixie looked to Lyra and Ditzy Doo. The former had lost the love of her life. The latter had lost her daughter. Both were willing to put everything on the line nevertheless. Luna would never forgive her if she didn’t act – and just as importantly, Trixie would never be able to forgive herself. Trixie didn’t consider herself a principled mare, but whatever principles she did have, now was the time to be honest with herself about them.
Trixie also grimaced as she looked each of the ponies in the eye. She had been horrible to them over the past few days – well, not Ditzy Doo so much, but certainly Lyra, Raindrops, Cheerilee, and Carrot Top. But these ponies were still willing to go on what she said to try and save Equestria from the mad alicorn queen now trying to take it over – and had been willing to try and help her from everypony in Ponyville landing on her like a ton of bricks.
“I’m going too,” she said. “And…and I’m sorry. I’m sorry for the last two days. I’m sorry for the way I treated you all. I’m sorry for the weather-for-hire ponies, for the blackmail, for calling you useless, for butting in where I wasn’t wanted, for manipulating you to do what I wanted to try and get back at Luna over something stupid that was all in my head…” Trixie looked down. “I’m sorry. If this all goes to the sun, I just want you to know that.”
The other ponies looked between each other. After a moment, Cheerilee, Ditzy Doo, Carrot Top, and Lyra all nodded. “Just don’t do it again,” Cheerilee said. “Provided there is an again for us.”
Trixie nodded once, before looking hopefully at Raindrops. The pegasus considered Trixie for a long moment, analyzing her. For once in her life – or at least for the first time in a long time – Trixie willingly let the emotions she was feeling just display themselves on her face. “Alright,” the pegasus declared at length, waving a hoof as though casting off the murderous intent she’d possessed earlier in the day. “But if you ever do anything like this again, I’m going to hit you. Hard.”
“Fine by me,” Trixie said. “As hard as you want.”
Raindrops nodded as she headed towards the door to Carrot Top’s house. “I’m holding you to that,” she promised.
This chapter feels a little contrived, but then again these scenes in any given fic or novel or show or movie always do to me. So that's that.
Also, continuity! For something that hasn't happened yet! This chapter was almost named "Wherein Raindrops Makes a Promise," but that felt wrong for some reason.
Also, yikes, this story is getting dark. I'm almost wondering if I should add the "dark" tag to it and/or up the rating from "everyone" to "teen."
Eh, probably not. Disney's Atlantis: the Lost Empire opens with an entire island-continent being plunged beneath the waves and tens of thousands of people being crushed by tsunami (if lucky) or drowning (if not lucky). We don't see this, but we're kidding ourselves if we think it didn't happen. Still only got a PG rating, though. Ratings should probably be based on a "shown, not told" policy.
heh, we all know Raindrops keeps her promises...
The party is gathered!!!!
Yeah!!! I am PUMPED!!!!!
now to figure out how the trials of everfree will change..... especially since it's constantly high noon now.
the promise, well done
So we've got the viking, the fool, the bard, the sage, the geomancer and the magician.
Seems like a well balanced party, to me.
I was waiting for the moment when Trixie had Raindrops make that promise. Oh, was I waiting for it.
I don't know about dark. Describing it with the written word can make it come across as such, but the show didn't pull any punches either. Nightmare Moon tried to kill the six on her first attempt with the cliff. So, I think you're in good shape.
Into the Everfree, we go!
And so the epic battle for the fate of Equestria is about to begin! All bets are off! No quarter given! The fight that will shake the foundations of the world will commence...right after the mandatory fetch-quest.
Right, you need daytime monsters. Maybe a phoenix?
Trixie is not speaking in third person. Is it stress on her part?
I like what you're doing with the Luna Six (can't remember who I saw first using that term!), but particularly Raindrops. She's even more of a blunt instrument than Rainbow Dash, but she's definitely got character and a pretty good head on her shoulders.
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I'm not sure I agree that Canon!Nightmare Moon was actually ever out to deliberately kill anypony. Yes, somepony could have died or at least gotten hurt at the cliff or later against the manticore, but after that she doesn't even seem to try anymore -- and even the guards who attacked her as she was giving her grand entrance speech got off with little more than a scare. So in my personal headcanon at least I'm honestly seeing more the neglected little sister goddess throwing a tantrum so the world will know she's back than any sort of hardcore arch-villain; your mileage may of course vary.
Of course, in this story the antagonist is Corona, and her brand of crazy is rather scarier than that. It's probably a good thing that it looks like she'll be distracted at least for a while, because I somehow doubt she would bother with comparatively harmless scares and obstacles when turning "traitors" into little piles of ash is just so much more effective...
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This Trixie only does that when putting on a show. Alternate universe and all that.
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To an extent, Nightmare Moon can be forgiven because this was the pilot and at a guess I'd say Lauren Faust wanted to play it safe with the TV-7 rating.
Having said that - scary trees.
No, Nightmare Moon, I am not gonna let you forget that.
This scene is a fair bit less contrived than the equivalent scene in canon, simply because it's established that the new Elements-to-be don't actually like Trixie, with the possible exception of Ditzy. I still think the way Trixie dealt with Corona was pretty brave, though, so she deserves credit for that.
I wouldn't bother changing the rating just yet - as you say, ratings are mostly about what is shown, rather than implied. If Corona starts executing her hostages, then maybe bump it up to Teen. We all know Dinky's going to be okay, though, right?
Someone said that Corona would outright murder the Luna Six as soon as she learns about their plan and not fooling around like NMM. Well maybe it’s the Celestia fanboy inside me, but I don’t think that’s what Corona is going to do. In her eyes the Luna Six are just a bunch of misguided ponies who don’t know any better thanks to of all those evil, evil lies from her evil, evil sister. So instead of killing them she would try to “open their eyes” and put stones in their path. Only if that fails she would consider more drastic measures. She is basically a revered NMM: Her first traps are rather harmless while the last ones are potentially lethal.
And yes most of NMM’s attempts to stop the Mane Six were rather goofy, which made her bad villain. She had a very intimidating introduction and her first attempts to the stop the Mane Six were good. But like RDD said, she lost a lot of credibility with the scary trees. I guess she assumed the Mane Six wouldn’t overcome the Manticore and was running out of ideas.
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If forced to come up with a non-"It was the pilot and they wanted to play it safe" in-universe explenatation for Nightmare Moon, I'd say this:
She didn't want to hurt anypony. Not grievously, anyway.
With the manticore and the landslide, she was acting out of still broiling rage over just escaping from the moon, sealing Celestia in the sun, and seeing these ponies dare defy her. But let's not forget Nightmare Moon's reasoning for being Nightmare Moon: the ponies didn't appreciate her. Nightmare Moon wants love and attention, and a sure way to not get that is to go around murdering ponies. While Lauren Faust has said that Nightmare Moon's reign would being an era of darkness and evil, I've always interpreted it as the darkness and evil would be a result of Nightmare Moon's reign rather than being something actively caused by Nightmare Moon, or at least she would by far not be the worst evil in the resulting Nightmare Equestria.
Furthermore, I've always assumed that to an extent, Nightmare Moon realized what she'd become and didn't like it very much. Given how perfectly each trial set up the pony's ability to claim the Elements of Harmony*, I've wondered if Nightmare Moon subconsciously sabotaged her own efforts in order to create the possibility of Twilight and the gang freeing her. This is also, incidentally, why she didn't bother to try and dodge the Elements' blast. While Nightmare Moon herself was raging, somewhere inside of her was a lonely Princess Luna, just waiting to be freed from her thousand year mistake.
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*Except Applejack's. Sorry, AJ, but that was really contrived for justifying you getting the Element of Honesty. I mean, I get it, but...lame...
If there's ever a crossover with canon... the reactions of the Luna Six will probably be the more entertaining... Except for the Canon Twi vs Luna Trixie.
I was thinking about canon Rainbow vs Luna Rainbow and trying to come up with *any difference at all*. And now I'm wondering if the storm over the Everfree 'mysteriously dissipated' because Rainbow Dash woke up from her nap and took care of it like she'd been planning to all along (but didn't tell anyone).
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That NMM didn’t really want to hurt any pony makes sense. I think Ms. Faust stated in a post that the ponies don’t need a sun to grow food, so the whole Eternal Night thing was more scary than actually life-threatening.
The idea that Luna fought back from the inside is interesting, although I believe that there was no more Luna inside of NMM. For me it always looked that whatever transformed Luna into NMM also corrupted her mind. Hopefully we’ll learn what exactly caused Luna’s transformation into NMM (her jealousy/ Discord/ something else) in a future episode / the inevitably movie.
Yeah that’s not very likely but one can dream, right?
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"An alternative dimension is not scientifically possible. You are not scientifically possible."
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Raindrops mentioned in Chapter 2 that the Everfree's weather is completely out of their control. They have to wait for it to leave the Everfree's airspace. This would apply even to Rainbow Dash (though perhaps not to the Princesses or some other powerful force...)
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If you think that'll be fun, just wait until Lunaverse Trixie meets Mane Trixie.
"Citizens of Ponyville! The Great and Powerful Trixie has returned! With her new wagon and never-before-seen powers, she will restore her tarnished reputation!"
"..."
"Who thinks that they can challenge the Great and Powerful Trixie?! You?
"..."
"You?
"..."
"PERHAPS MY GREATEST RIVAL?"
"You're a MacGuffin, Trixie..."
"The insult! You are not worth the Great and Powerful Trixie's time! Is nopony going to step forward?"
"Is this realy me in this universe?"
"Ah! Trixie sees that she has a fan in Ponyville who decided to cosplay as her! ...and did a very good job, she might add..."
"Uh...thanks?"
"Perhaps after the show you and the Great and Powerful Trixie could...?"
"...I'm okay with this."
"Could either of you GET more vain?!"
"Depends on how tonight goes, I guess."
"I DON'T WANT MY EYES ANYMORE!"
"Liar."
Yeah, I always saw Luna as throwing a temper tantrum almost in canon. Here, a little more extreme...
And the scene of them going out wasn't too contrived. Makes a bit more sense since they've known Trixie for more than an afternoon, actually. ;)
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Would totally pay for that silly crossover
This is the chapter I've been waiting to see ever since Breakdown (Ch. 5) came out. I've been dying to see how Trixie manages to get Raindrops, Lyra and Carrot Top to even approach her without throwing death threats let alone aid her in getting the elements.
Bravo! I eagerly await to see how this tale unfolds to its inevitable conclusion.
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hrm... yeah, it does seem a little forced, but at least they all actually have reasons to be there... 'cept raindrops who's only here to keep the others alive
it's certainly no worse than the original. think for a moment, why was fluttershy there? she should have been at home tending to her frightened animals. her involvement was entirely arbitrary. and rarity? what was her stake in it?
Ok just finished reading up to this point. First off: looking good I love this setting and you've actually been able to get me emotionally invested so gratz to you. Secondly: Thinks to this a Boast Busted your Trixie now has majorly influenced/comprises most of my head cannon for Trixie. Two final things: Will there be any jokes involving Trixie eating pine-cones in you stories, and finally: you &*#$@....
Thanks to you I can't picture drunk OR romantic Trixie without her speaking seductive (at least for romantic) french....
And the resulting TwilightXTrixie mental pictures are glorious.
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Later that night...
"Je t'aime. Je veux passer la reste de ma vie avec vous. J'ai envie de toi!"
"Trixie wonders what you are doing."
"...speaking...Prench?"
"Why?"
"Because I'm from Neigh Orleans...aren't you? Don't you speak Prench?"
"That is not among Trixie's many talents. And no. The show has unfortunately been intolerably silent about Trixie's origins."
"What?"
"Huh?"
"...hey, Trixies, sorry to to just barge in like this but I was wondering if OH MY CELESTIA."
"..."
"...this isn't...wait, no. This is precisely what it looks like, actually."
"..."
"Trixie wonders if you can speak Prench. Trixie requires a translation for some earlier dialogue."
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And then Twi’s alternative universe counterpart appears, too and things get really juicy.
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NO WAIT STOP URGK!!! (passes out from blood loss)
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Nah, I'm pretty sure Twolight would go like so:
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406903 Hey, you saw how 'Shy acted in episodes like Dragonshy or Stare Master. She'll do quite a bit when her friends are threatened, and I don't think eternal night would be good for any of her animal friends. Nor is she going to let Dash wander around the Everfree at night without somepony who's good with animals. The mare's got hidden strength and all that jazz.
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i don't buy it.
you can't really count stare master, she went through significant character development before that episode. namely dragonshy. and even then most of her actions were the result of impulse and panic.
and in dragonshy she was damn near literally dragged kicking and screaming into that situation
but in the pilot she just kind of went with it, not voicing any complaints or fears. and she didn't even bother to check on her animals.
i call shenanigans.
I suddenly had the desire to se a fight between Corona and Nightmare Moon!
All I saw here was a kismesis relationship. That's the first thought that went through my head. Trixie♠Raindrops
>“That’s not going to happen,” Trixie intoned after awhile
"a while" is two words
No offense, but this seems stupid for everyone to blame Trixie in trying to help the celebration out. I would of done the same.
Raindrop: Oh I'm sorry, You were complaining about the weather being out of control, and I fix that and gave you help. Now you are complaining about the help i sent you and your worthless weather manage has yet to appear. Fuck off then and quit.
Applejack: I don't like apples, Luna would hate to keep eating apples all the time during the longest night. And you are complaining about money? You have apple farms all over the country! How exactly will you be out of business if that were to happen?
Rarity and decorations: Really? You are making a big deal about that? Go cry somewhere else please. Give the foals a chance to shine.
Lyra: I'm am truly sorry for putting you into this, but it is either that, or the shy pony dying before she even gets on stage to perform
Really though, most of this should of been trixie standing against them and their issues. It just that with so much problems going about and she is doing her best to solve them and everyone complaining about how she is trying, i would of just skipped town and flipped them off.
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The whole point of the show was that all the characters have faults and that is a trend they are following here as well. Personally I don't think this would be nearly as good if they didn't.
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I'm with Spike on this one...But then again, my mind take permanent residence in the local gutter.
I love how Raindrops is portrayed. She's like an opposite Fluttershy.
Song that was playing to the "Heroes are going off to save the day, moment"
Now back to the review...
OH god I love this moment! IT just feels so right and a beautiful contrast of what happens to our mane 6. Again, much like the mane 6 we see the beginning of heroes in them, we see that they are willing to fight for others even though they are a little fightened and scared of what is to happen. Also, there is a pony who might need help and they will be there to give it, why, because they would never live with themselves if they let it happen.
This is where the similarties end, however.
In the pilot, the mane 6 join in this task because of a few reasons. One, this pony they met just that day had been nice to them, kind to them, and they would like to see her again. Two, she looks like she might know something and since she is the only pony who seems to have her head on about this whole mess, they follow her. Why, for Dash she suspects her, AJ because Twilight seems to know already, Fluttershy because she geninuely can't see anypony hurt and if Rainbow Dash is right, Twilight needs help, Rairty because Twilight is new and would want to do all she can to be there for her, and Pinkie...Do I even need to say it. Third, once they hear the legend, they know this mare will need them. They would never forgive themselves if something bad happend to her.
Its the opposite here- They are all mad at her, with the exception of the grey one but you need to hurt Dinky in order to encourage her wrath. However, there is one thing that they all seen that makes this little egotist appealing-they have seen beyond the veil so to speak. They have seen Trixie as who she is. Lyra has seen Trixie being drunk or friendly, Cheerille has seen how Trixie cna be helpful to foals, Carrot top has seen Trixie's (Albeit misplaced) desire for better, Ditz has seen her kindness, and Raindrops has now seen Trixie's heroism. They have seen the curtain pulled back, and now see, not a traitor, monster, villian, cad, greedy filth, or egotist (Ok, that last one is still true ) but a good mare at heart, and a possible...friend.
Now its time for heroes, now it is time for themm to show what they are made of. For a lover, for a daughter, and for a friend. Off they ride
OH I got so much to say about the next few chapters and the test and how they correspond to the show.I cant' wait!!
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Not much I can add to this, but I think that sums up everything about this chapter and fic/ AU.
And now they have made up. That made this scene awesome.
NOW, ONWARD, FAIR HEROES!assets.dogtime.com/asset/image/515b29476dab6209eb000af2/column_08-funny-dog-meme.jpg
411828 to funny
Typo: "Trixie made her way over to the gray pegasus took up a similar role as" - something missing between "pegasus" and "took", I think.
Promise made...
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It really is a nice contrast to the original
casually mentions how she went blind for 3 days from using magesight on moonbut raising the moon.