"Rainbow? Vinyl?" I wandered through my house, "Anybody?"
"Sean!" A panicked whisper came from below, "Sean!" Noteworthy started shoving my leg, "Sean you have to hide me!"
I leaned down and picked him up, "Why, what's going on?"
Noteworthy looked around from his now elevated position, "I think they're in heat. Sean, I need you to hide me, I won't make it out there alone!"
I started scratching his back, trying to calm him down, "What the hell is-" I was cut off by a blue streak slamming into the wall next to me, "Oookay then...Dash, you alright?" She shook her head out and stared up at my hand.
"Hey, can I borrow that?" Dash shot a hoof towards my hand, "Just for a little bit."
"Sean!" Noteworthy caught my attention again, "Don't do it, please." He started shaking his head violently, "Please don't!"
I shrugged and started towards my room. Dash zoomed past and blocked the way, "Sean...I need that."
I cocked an eyebrow and grabbed her. I dug my nails into her back as I leaned down and set the laughing mare on the carpet. With her out of the picture I scooted her away from the door and stepped in. I let Noteworthy walk down my arm and jump onto my bed, "Oh thank you! Thank you so much!"
"Sure mate," I sat on my bed and turned on the TV.
Things grew quiet as Noteworthy paced around the bed, "So, what now?"
I looked down at him, "I don't know. You can leave when you want."
Noteworthy shook his head, "Not yet, not for a while." He looked around, "You got something to read?"
"Just watch TV," I pointed at the TV. Some show showcasing some car chase was on, "...Err, maybe not." I got up and wandered to the shelves above my dresser. I pulled a stack of books down and set them down on the bed, "There, take your pick."
Noteworthy quickly looked over the spines of the books, "Got any about space?"
I lifted up the stack and looked them over, "Maybe." I picked one about and set it down in front of him, "Might like this."
Noteworthy laid down on the edge of the book and started reading.
A loud thumping kept coming from my door, "It's just Rainbow Dash." Noteworthy pawed at the pages, "Rose locked herself in her little house, Punch is...somewhere, in the kitchen I think. And Vinyl, Vinyl just- I don't actually know where she went."
"You're so helpful." I pinched the skin on Noteworthy rump.
"Ow, trying to read." Noteworthy whined angrily. A bit annoyed I stood up and started towards the door, "Sean?" I put my hand on the door, "Sean, what are you doing?!" I turned the knob and held it closed, "Sean don't!" Finally I swung the door open. Dash flew in and landed on my desk. Her wings fully extended, pose rather violent, entire body language rather aggressive, "Sean you asshole!"
Alerted by Noteworthy outburst Dash locked on and flew at him like an arrow. Noteworthy panicked, tumbling backwards over the book and trying to crawl away, "Oh no you don't!" Dash bit his tail and yanked him back, "Come here big boy!"
"Sean help me!" Noteworthy was nearly crying as he was nearly dragged behind a pillow. I intervened and pulled Dash up and away. She grew extremely angry, biting my hand and kicking with every limb she could move. I moved my hand around her barrel and held her tight, "Sean! Why!?"
I lowered the angry mare and stared at Noteworthy, "Do not bitch at me, I am not nice to bitchy people."
"Sorry! I didn't mean it!"
I nodded and started out the door, I kicked it closed with my foot and set Dash down. She started swearing and kicking the door, "Why!? What did I do to deserve this!?" She went from angry to crying rather fast, "Augh! Why!?"
I ducked down next to her, "Oh calm down, what's wrong with you anyways?"
She let her chin rest on the door as she slid down it, "Hot...."
I blinked hard as I shot upright, "Are we- we're talking about- oh wow." I picked her up and pet her. I rubbed her ears as I walked her to the kitchen. I set her down on my table and found a tray of ice cubes, "This might help." I set an ice cube on a plate and sat Dash on one. It quickly started melting, lowering Dash to the plate and causing her to effectively melt along with the ice cube.
I quickly switched her form ice cube to ice cube, melting them little by little until Rainbow was wearing a stupid smile as she laid in a puddle, "Oh my gosh..."
"You good?"
"Totally...I'm Rainbow Dash...I'm awesome." She quickly flattened out on the plate.
I picked her out of the puddle and held her dripping above the plate, "...All soggy now." I found a paper towel and wiped her down. I walked into my den and set the dopey mare on the nearest seat. Berry was sleeping on the carpet next to a shot glass. Three out of five accounted for.
I looked outside and saw the doghouse Rose had moved into rocking. I pulled the slider open and walked outside, "Rose? You alright?"
"Just fine! Go away!" I saw her head poke out the small window on the second floor, "What do you want!? Spit it out, go away!"
I ducked down and looked at her on her level, "So should I stay or go?"
She stared at me angrily, "I don't know...wait a minute." She pulled herself back into the door and walked outside, "What do you want?" Even while she asked she was constantly shifting her back legs.
"Just checking on everybody...something weird's going on."
"Oh ya think!? You're a freaking genius!" Rose sat down hard, "Augh...sorry, I don't mean it."
"It's cool. You gonna be alright?" I ran my hand along the short of her neck, "So what's going on?"
She wiggled her rump in the grass and enjoyed my hand along her head, "Don't worry about it, everypony's gonna be a bit moody for a while."
I sat back in the grass, "You gonna be alright?"
"No! Augh...sorry, I'll be fine. I'm dealing with it! ...Maybe not well, but I'm fine." Rose sulked in the grass, "The grass is cool."
"Eugh. I picked her up and brought her inside, "Can I help?"
She scrunched her muzzle up, "You want me to lift my tail for you ya weirdo!" She realized what she said and shrank back in my palm, "I'm really sorry. You leave me alone most of the time and that's fine, but I don't- I'm not- ...I'm not okay."
"Tea?" I started walking to the kitchen, regardless of her answer I could go for some tea. I set her down on the kitchen table, "Do you want tea yes or no?"
She stared at the water laden plate, "Yes...please."
I started up the kettle and waited.
"Tea...bag...." I mumbled as I dipped the bag, "Tea, bag? Teabag. Tea-bag."
"Can you stop!" Rose laid across the table, "Seriously, you're annoying."
"Teabag." I finished and poured her a shot glass's worth of tea, "There. Should help, maybe." Rose lazily brought her head up and lapped up the tea. Things went quietly as she sipped the tea.
"Okay, so this is good." She sat upright and drank her tea, "I'm really sorry for that. Yelling at you I mean."
"Ain't nothing but a thing." I groaned as I drank my tea. I was happily sipping my tea as the phone started ringing.
I picked up my cup and found my phone, Carmine's picture popped up, "Hello?"
"Sean! I figured it out- err- Hooves figured it out! Get the hell over here and bring the- Holy shit!" What followed was the sound of tires, a loud thud, and the plastic clattering of the phone.
I froze as the call dropped, my cup slid out of my hands and shattered on the floor, "Oh my god." I hit redial, "Come on man..." Nothing, "Carmine come on man!" Again, nothing, "Carmine!? Fuck!" I hurled my phone across the hall. I slowly walked back into the kitchen and plopped down into my seat.
"Sean..." Rose walked over and tapped my head, "What just happened?"
I stared at the table, "I don't know, nothing good."
It's not drek. It's rather fun.
Although personally, I think a story of someone having a mini Fluttershy wandering around their house to pet and play with would be a great story.
Aaaaawwwww.... Is some one sad? Tell your uncle Spoon what's the matter.
3703475
No, I plan to get rid of this. It's going to be fun being rid of it...hitting him with the car was planned for a while.
3703492
Sheesh! Why so hostile?
3703494
Cause he's a Carmine. And I don't like this story.
3703504
I don't understand WHY you don't like the story though..... Also HA! Carmine always die!
3703509
Because it's poorly written, it's cutesy for the sake of being cutesy, and I would rather be known for making better stuff than this tripe on a bike.
I wonder if Miyamoto hates any of his Mario games?
3703518
Dragon kidnaps princess. GOLD!
Zelda, don't play as Zelda EVER Except in a crappy CDI game... 3703522
3703515
Well... I guess I can get that... But what about your two Vince stories... They're pretty good but it seems like you don't update them anymore...
3703530
Giving pants some waiting time to get some ideas. Ivory I updated a few days ago.
Oh dear, glad we got that mostly settled. Now we just have to find the mistress of wub and figure out what the hell happened at Carmine's place. And no, it's not drek.
3703539
Yeah but... It used to update everyday... Don't you love me anymore?
Okay, slightly confused, if Carmine has the answer, why hit him with a car. If you want to end the story quickly this seems like a delay that gets in the way of that goal.
3703553
No I'm improving my writing, better quality takes more time.
Come on, it's an adorable story. You grossly underestimate its value.
3703558
>Adorable
Exactly why I don't like it. That, and what am I going to do with it? I might do something like it, I don't know. But we shall see.
3703560 Oh God forbid, a story that makes people feel good. I guess you're not doing ART if it doesn't make people want to gnaw their own wrists open in existential anguish.
3703628
Sarcasm not appreciated. I don't like it because it's cute for the sake of being cute. If it was cute on its own then that's one thing, but as is it's as I said cute for the sake of it.
I'm also doubtful most fanfics are art, artistic elements may arise in them, but as is most are just a homage to the original work. I mean, mine are just to stave off mania.
3703560
Dear Mr. Sentient Hat,
Adorableness is not a sufficient reason to kill this.
Sincerely,
Me. (With Fluttershy as back up.)
P.S.
Since you have included the personalization of the ponies and the ineptness of the humans you could go a darker route. Or just try to kill us with adorableness. Maybe bring the surviving from the ponies point of view more to the fore ground?
P.P.S.
No to your rebuttal. Checkmate.
3703642
Naw...spiritual successor, expect a plush doll, modest cuteness, but hopefully an actual story this time.
Dagnabit. Previous post aside this might be a good enough excuse. Once you call it "drek" you are usually committed to it being drek. I still think you could flesh it out but, you know, drek...
3703652 Fair enough I suppose. I wouldn't mind one of those plushies. Your story art is rather addictive.
3703663
I'll tell you the same thing I keep telling everyone else. I don't like this story, I especially don't like that it go featured. That said, It has given me a new idea that hopefully will be a little better.
So...that was a long way of saying this is an angry learning experience.
3703515
567 people out of 598 like the story. Just sayin'...
3703676
why do all authors hate their stories being featured?
poor mares,sitting there...being all hot and horny,can't do anything except being horny... poor mares
3705571 Well... Noteworthy...
3706068 poor Noteworthy,sitting there...can't do anything except hide from hot and horny mares,poor Noteworthy
3705404
*Chishk-Chishk* PULL!
3705264
I wouldn't have minded....except that my most popular fic was a clop-fic that I only put about five hours worth of time into writing and editing and only did as an experiment to see exactly how much attention it would garner over my others.
Busted my brain on some of those fics!
Now I kinda see what you were talking about, author.
Yay you can go back to writing fun stuff.
Heeheehee Ooooh jeez, this chapter certainly was something... interesting...
Good show!