Author's Notes
Inspired by:
Jeffthestrider - Want It Need It
Some unicorn spells should have never been devised
This one in particular will leave you traumatized
If you need an example, I'm the perfect paradigm
The 'Want it Need it' spell, works every time
Chorus: Struck by her incantation
Charmed by her sweet sensation
I can't resist, I can't disagree
(Want it!) I (Need it!) can't
(Want it!) break (Need it!) free
Hobbled due to my hesitation
Blinded to her desperation
Her will persists, she toys with me
(Want it!) I (Need it!) can't
(Want it!) seem to (Need it!) breathe
This purple mare can be quite warped and twisted
"It's just a simple spell, where's the harm?", she insisted
Like a fool I believed her, disarmed by her smile
Now she's laughing manically, looks like I'm here awhile
Chorus
Drowning in these compelled desires
Burning down in her alluring fire
Time's slipping by, she commands, I comply
I will never be free from her cruel lies
Check out Crimson Brass' compilation post!
Message to Jeffthestrider: Thanks for the time and the inhuman ammount of patience you had. I am still sorry about sending you all those messages asking for your feedback. This story wouldn't be possible without you! Please guys, give him a shout and check out his other awesome musical works: DeviantArt / YouTube / Tumblr
The best music in the entire MLP:FiM fandom.
Message to SpectrumPony: You're the best pegasister in existence. Thank you so, so, so much for the cover image!
Jeesh, and you would think that Pinkie had issues with having friends... Now you know why Twilight wasn’t willing to make friends in the first episode of MLP:FiM. No, Nightmare Moon is a lie!
Also: Yes, Stud Stamp = Cutie Mark. Go blame this awesome writer.
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...and now I'm depressed.
At least write an epilogue where Twilight sees Crimson years later or something and reconcile.
316691 Aiy
316406 Yes this again.
It has been a little over 11 hours since I read this story and I have spent most of that time thinking about it. The last story that made me think about it this long was Ships That Pass in the Night and its sequel The Three Notes, both of whom were Romance Tragedies. As such I have spent a good deal of this time comparing them to Want It; Need It! , and I have come to a new opinion. I do NOT think there should be an epilogue!
Why the 180 in my opinion you ask? Well its simple, you can blame it on Ships That Pass in the Night and The Three Notes. You see Ships That Pass in the Night, like Want It; Need It!, had a vary sad ending while leaving you with a shred of hope. Its that hope that that you cling to, its the thing that allows you to stand tall and say "things may look bleak now, but as long as there is hope things can work out." So that's exactly what you do, allow that hope to fuel your imagination and you make your own ending. Sad endings just crush that hope and leave you depressed. Happy endings typically wrap things up to nicely so you cant make up your own ending anymore, this typically makes the stories easy to forget as well.
Btw if you like Romance Tragedies you should check out Ships That Pass in the Night and The Three Notes
325971
THANK YOU!
326547 Haven't been a fan of epilogues for a while now. Every time I think about a story having an epilogue I just think back to Ships That Pass in the Night and The Three Notes. The Three Notes was basically the epilogue to Ships That Pass in the Night that took the sad path, and I ended up depressed after reading it. Its always funner to imagine your own ending.
329843, 318367, 316681, 316453, 316406:
"Every picture tells us a story. Sometimes we don't like the ending... sometimes we don't understand it."
329995 OK, fine you win, no epilogue needed
329998
His story. He decides if it needs an epilogue. Personally, I like it like this.
326547
Nope.avi, it is not ending til it is truly a ending.
330692 Then write your own. I'm fine with this one.
I'm best Pegusister?
380413 Damn right you are.
380420
O MI CELESTIA~
Thank you~ You are the best as well
380434 Aw, you flatterer, you.
380447
Ain't flattery if it's true
329995
I recognize this quote from somewhere. However, trying to Google it just brings me back here.
385690 American McGee's Alice's Cheshire Cat.
385698
Do you mean me, purrrrhaps?
P.S. I'm gonna read your story later. Hope I won't regret it if it's as sad as comments indicate...
385698
First game, or second? 
Tagged to read later, but it will probably be a while, I've read too much sad pony fic recently.
I don't think an epilogue would do this story any good, it would be rushed. This kind of confict needs months or years to be solved, not a single night. This kind of stuff leaves a scar too deep to be healed in a single day of talking.
If I may ask, a good way to make people happy would be writing a full story, using this as the first chapter. Could you do it? I would be very happy to see it happening.
385780
This.
Except for the part about writing a complete story. I'd rather "stick with cannon" and leave Crimson Brass to rot.
385787
Thanks.
But leave him to rot is kind of too much. He doesn't need to be with Twilight. What keeps him from getting laid whit anot-IDEA!
The episode left Crimison traumatized, so he decided never to fall in love again. But he breaks his own promisse years later, falling in love with [inset mane six/oc here].
There, now we only need someone to write that. (I cant; already behind the scheldule with my fics.)
385808 Well, feel free to write it whenever you want to. Not wanting to sound rude, but I'd really rather leave it as it is.
Great story. Awesomely depressing, nothing like a horrifying betrayal to sink your spirits. All too often I read fics that rely on death to pull heart strings. Nice to have a good change of pace.
386129 I know what you mean- I still think that Twi is a bit OoC myself... but it had to be done in order to make the story flow.
(Does it count as Deus Ex Machina?)
386465 FYI: Don't care. Used the name anyway.
386773 Wait- where in the story did you find that?
I guess it means like a mausoleum...
386777
Crimson's stud stamp, I was wondering. Sorry, should have said that first. Like I said, air head
386787 A closed tome. Tome = archaic, thick book.
386791
Okay, thanks
Great story, well written.
I don't see why everyone wants an epilogue, stories that end like this one did are supposed to make you think about what happened, and you make your own endings based on how YOU feel about the story.
Why Can't This Be Love - Van Halen
I don't post nearly enough Van Halen.
No, I'm not reading this again.
...
I was too crushed the first time, I still shudder from mere mention of his name...
387355 Wait- his mom is a pegasus. But his dad is a unicorn.
386200
Yeah i guess it would make things flow better. Although, maybe you could have shown some of the abuse Twilight got, not just saying it.
390836
Oh...wow...
The moment I read the line "
"It's just a simple spell, where's the harm?" she insisted.
"
I knew what this was based on... and part of me rejoiced in the dark turn this was going to take... the other part was not yet allert enough to know how sad it was going to be.
On side note, you really enjoy writing stories with no decisive ending, yes?(I had no idea you wrote Borderline till I looked at your account but both of these stories are not super decisive ending)
I don't really mind in this story,(in Borderline I personally feel like the whole story just fell apart in the last act of it... maybe i missed some important step in the story but to me it feels like the story did not take the twist it should have, as such the lack of ending just helped to emphasise the bad last act. I don't hate Borderline btw, I really like the first 3/4th of it... I just think the setup was wasted big time) in this story I managed to picture myself an ending and how Crimson's life will continue after these events.(Granted.. his future is dark.. but that isn't really the point of debate here)
Don't write an Epiloge to this, it works as it is.
391124 I know it sounded rather harsh, but no one should toy with your feelings like that. That wasn't rude, that was..... Evil
393533
But she didn't mean to do it. Something came over her, and she didn't know exactly what it was. She still loved Crimson, right? She never said she didn't love him (she did in the first part, but Lucefudu seems to have fixed it.)
I'm making a follow up to this (already have his permission). I'm still a little fuzzy on some subjects, but I think that the graphic novel where he appears in should be out by June 2012
I need to get 2 other novels out before hand though.
394707 Thank you for that. I really want Twi to meet Crimson again. But really? who do such a thing. but the main part is that this particular event happened to me and my girlfriend a long time ago. Not exactly like this, but she made me feel like shit in front of my whole class. So you can say that it was mostly my feelings getting to me in that comment. I'm sorry
394890
Oh! I'm sorry. I would understand if this story would make you feel that way after that
400491 394890
I had people telling me that my stories made them cry. I sincerely cannot fathom such possibility, since they lack pathos.
400518
Sorry...
400805 It's no problem. I didn't mean to be harsh...
What I meant is: I think my story lacks emotion... that's why I don't picture anyone crying from reading it.
400844 Dude! This story is sad. Whatever you say, it's still sad
326547 Wow, don't be an ass about it.
We're just asking, not forcing you to. And when someone says that he likes it you immediately be all "THIS FAN IS BETTAR THAN U ALL HURRDURR".
Seriously, this was pretty crappy closure. All it says that Crimson moved on(in more ways than one), but like another guy said(Sorry, forgot your name!), he's lost everything now that he left Canterlot.