This story is a sequel to Mouse, Cat & Dog; A Story for a Rainy Day
Why trying to help a new Peach farmer that just come to Ponyville a human and his employer fall victim to a prank.
After which they meet the local bakers and owner of Sugar cube Corners, The Cakes.
While waiting out a storm, the human is inspired to tell them an old fairytale about a equally miraculous birth.
Nice like it I aint hard this story thanks.
3644031 your welcome
Can you believe that I hadn't read the Momotaro legend until now? I mean, I had heard of it and I knew the basic premise, but I had never really read it.
Anyway, nice story
3645691 Thank you
Ohhh.... so much editing and proofreading needs to be done here.... Maybe I should do this, because some of this is just plain painful....
Ok, let's get started... corrections in brackets, italics represent errors....
With me so far? Should I continue?
9250822Yes
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Ok, but something I got to ask, is this related to the Easter story in any way, like does this come before, or after, timeline-wise, because if it does, that would just add a whole bunch of confusion.... anyway, I'll try to get back to editing and proofreading now, but this is just basic, and I think, afterwards, this story might need some more work done to improve the writing quality somewhat....
9251449
Ok, back to editing and proofreading....
How's it looking? Anything you want to add? Something you don't understand?
9251449
Hey, you didn't respond to my last reply, so I was wondering if I should continue with the proofreading/error correction and so on....
9305624 Sorry I got sick for a while and I was trying to pick it up later.
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Oh, ok, sorry about that, are you feeling better, then? Should I continue?
9306963 Yeah, thanks again. Though I probably should say I won't be On line tomorrow because of Thanks giving.
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Ok, just send me a message to let me know how it all looks when you get back online, though I might take a while myself, plus you might want to relook at your edits, because you missed a couple of stuff, I'll try to quote them here:
How about this?
(The one thing you'd think I would hate about my new life would be the constant disasters that occur in this town, but that's not it (or) that's not it at all. (Is this what you were trying to say?) What I don't like about my new life in Ponyville/Equestria (here you could add "is" or " , you ask?" then join the next sentence together or start it, respectively.) The fact that they use solid gold coins as currency and you have to haggle for the best prices.
(After that, you could say- "I. Hate. Haggling." for emphasis, or say " I hate haggling because...") I. Hate. Haggling. I always feel like I'm getting ripped off. (or) I hate haggling because I always feel like I'm getting ripped off.
These ponies are too good at bargaining and I'm not. (This part is relatively minor, though.) If you want to add some more emphasis, feeling, flair or fluidity to this part here, you could say, (Not to mention that these ponies are way too good at bargaining and I'm not. And/Or maybe say something like I'm a complete amateur at it or I completely stink at it. instead.
"Products (Plural) and Pegasi, (also Plural). Other than that, pretty good.
Here's for some of the new stuff....
What do you think so far? Any mistakes? Comments? Anything you might want to add to this? Keep going?
9307193 OK got this one done thanks. Sorry for the wait bad weather and power outages.