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xSirius


Beginning author for a line of fanfictions, an ametuer music producer, and a very sloppy artist. Is hoping to strive in all three areas.

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In a land inhabited by war-hardened warriors, ravenous beasts, and fearsome dragons, a hero was born. His past remains a mystery to this day, but there are whispers saying that this man is the ultimate warrior, a Dragonborn.
The Dragonborn, as legends say, is the only hero who can truly vanquish a dragon by absorbing the soul of the monstrous beast once it has fallen. The people of this land, the land known as Skyrim, almost seemed to bask in his almighty glory. They marveled at the epic journeys the Dragonborn, also known has Dovahkiin, embarked upon and stood in awe at the marvels he produced. He slayed numerous dragons, mastered the way of the Voice, mastered the ways of sword, shield, bow, and magic, became Thane in every city, became Arch Mage at The College of Winterhold, and put an end to the God of Destruction himself: Alduin.
There was not much this hero could not do; however, there was one mystery he never unlocked, and that was the true purpose of the Eye of Magnus. Searching for an entire decade to locate the Psijic Order, he traveled all across Tamriel before he came across Artaeum, the island of which the Psijics resided. He had to know the mystery behind this artifact; he felt drawn to it. There was a sense of longing he could not shake. It was not a longing for power, or really curiosity, but it was more a longing for a piece of himself: a piece of his soul.
As Dovahkiin approached the island, he was oblivious to everything that the Divines--and the Daedras-- had in store. This artifact was a key to something much bigger than he would ever hope to imagine.

Alduin was only the beginning.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 4 )

This was really neat, I liked it a lot! I liked how you used the Eye of Magnus since the thing is literally one big mystery. One question, he does have a proper name right? Because constantly calling him by his title "Dovahkiin" just simply doesn't feel real-life-like. Well, regardless, this was really good, and I hope to seen more soon! Good luck!

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He does have a name, I just really haven't introduced it. I don't want to give a race so people can imagine him in any way that they want.

And I'm just going to have to stop here... you moved the plot to far and to fast that it's seemed like here's one bit of info then bam here's some more and more and more...

It went to fast that people can't follow it...

The idea is good just needs to be worked on more...

Your writing is pretty good. Only flaws I could notice were:

1 The Dragonborns speech is too modern. He comes from a culture that's pretty close to our Vikings. I think their way of talking may be a little more rough. (might be because i haven't played Skyrim in english, though.)

2 Twilight writes a letter to the princess and almost immedeatly decides to go see them, without waiting for a reply?

otherwise pretty solid chapter and I can't wait to see what happens next.

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