The Nightmare in pink

trixie has returned, she wants to show off her magic but aciedently puts pinkie pie into a deep sleep she cannot awaken from . its up to princess Luna to save her from this nightmare

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Chapter 1: A Familiar Face · 28th Dec 2013 · 527 words
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Chapter 2: SURPRISE! · 3rd Jan 2014 · 1,355 words
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Chapter 3: It's all a dream · 5th Jan 2014 · 2,376 words
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Chapter 4: The True Evil · 6th Jan 2014 · 1,559 words
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Chapter 5: Believe · 8th Jan 2014 · 1,741 words
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Chapter 6: Five minutes later · 8th Jan 2014 · 302 words
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IceWolf

IceWolf #1 · Jan 8th, 2014 · · · Chapter 4: The True Evil ·

Do you need an editor? I see lots of forgotten capital letters, comma's and periods.

THE MIGHTY PINKIE

THE MIGHTY PINKIE #2 · Jan 8th, 2014 · · · Chapter 5: Believe ·

no Icewolf its fine i just did it quick i will add them when i get chance

Dorvarious

Dorvarious #3 · Jan 9th, 2014 · · · Chapter 6: Five minutes later ·

OKAY!!!!!!!! so i have read the story and loved it, but i feel it was a bit too fast. for instance, where trixie was forgiven, i feel it should take awhile for her to be trusted by Luna and Twilight, i mean hello she did teleport the main Princess. I am not trying to be mean but i am being blunt, but i do not want to hurt your feelings either, becuase i do not like that. anyways, I feel there should be more chapters in Pinkie's mind, i mean Its Pinkie Pie, theres bound to be an interesting adventure in there with really weird disturbing things, that will probably scar Luna and Trixie, mostly Trixie. However you did catch Trixie personality and Twilight reaction when Celetia was teleported, even Luna. You Even got Pinkie's personality as well I would recconmend doing more chapters in Pinkie's mind, because it would be entertaining and seeing the reactions of Celestia and Trixie, i think luna can already expierence it cause she is the princess of dreams. But overall You did very very very well and i like it i also reccomend reading the-wheel-and-the-butterfly-a-dan-x-pinkie-pie-saga its really good and you can get ideas on pinkies personality as well. Stay being Awesome