"I Smell" *SNIIIIIFFFFF* "A party..." Cheese sandwich a crazy random tall orangeish pony with a curly puffy brown mane woke up after a long nap. "Bo Veaner, I sense a party brewing up. Cheese's pet bird cocktail cocked his head to the left as if he didn't understand a word of English . Cheese quickly grabbed his poncho, saddle with a rubber chicken attached to it (don't ask) and his "dusty hat". "Bo, come!" Cheese commanded his bird to come and recline on his back while he traveled. "We have to head to....Ponyville!" Again the bird just cocked his head again. So Cheese headed out the door to proceed to the illusive ponyville.
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"WELL IF IT AIN'T THE PARTY PLANNER HIMSELF CHEESE SANDWICH! WELCOME BACK TO AAAAAPLEOOOLSA" Said Breaburn in one of his loudest welcomes ever. Cheese sandwich had to pass by Appleolsa in order to get to ponyville. Cheese sandwich just kept his eyes closed and kept walking as if he was annnoyed, he spoke in that type of tone.
"Oh it's you... The 'loud' one"
"And what's that supposed to mean?"
"Nothing... Just that I didn't 'like' planning the annual 'peace of species' ceremony..."
"Oh I see how it is," Braeburn replied in an agitated tone. "Well if you're gonna be a sour puss then you can just GIT ON OUT!"
"You didn't let me finish, mr. Apple..." Cheese paused and then out of no where like a meteor from space he said. "I LOVED IT!"
"WOOHOO NOW THAT'S THE PARTY PONY I KNOW AND LOVE!"
"YEEEAH LETS PARTY!"
"Ah haha, so where ya' headed for planing today?"
"Well my cheese senses told me to head to ponyville because a pony will be having a party."
"Hmm ponyville huh? OH YEAH my cuz applejack sent me a letter to come to her friends party." Breaburn paused to think. "I think her name was Rainbow Crash or something like that."
"Well then i guess my senses were right, as always."
"Well Cheese there might be a problem for you..."
"And what would that be?"
"Well in the letter Applejack sent me her friend Pinkie Pie was planning the party."
"HA how could that be a complication?"
"Well she might take up your space or something like that?" Braeburn gave a sheepish look.
"Well if she is already planning it then i will simply have to help!" And with that Cheese Sandwich and Bo headed to Ponyville.
Back at Ponyville
"OOH I am so, so, so excited for today because I'm planning the birthday bash ooofff!" Said Pinkie Pie as she pointed up and gave Rarity a nuggie. "RAINBOW DASH!!!"
"YEAH" Said Rainbow Dash as she blended in with the banner that Pinkie Pie put up for her. Pinkie Pie then grabbed her by the hooves and pulled her to the ground and said with a very serious look on her face. "Rainbow Dash."
"Yes Pinkie?"
"You realize that by enlisting me as party planner that i can garuntte that this is going the funnest! most fantablous, superbly party in Ponyville?" Pinkie looked down on Rainbow Dash.
"Uuh yeah..I guess?" Pinkie put her hoof over Rainbow's mouth.
"No guesses, Parties are no picnic!" Fluttershy then spoke up and said.
"Ooh i like a good picnic party." Pinkie Pie glared at her. Then out of no where a pony in the shadows blew on one of those, ya know party blowing thing that LITERALLY NO BODY AND I MEAN NOBODY knows what their called. Pinkie Pie poked her head out.
"Who are you, stranger?"
"Names Cheese sandwich," Cheese then spat out that party favor thing-a-mi-gigger "I plan parties" He said in his most serious of voices
"What an amazing coincidence, I'm Pinkie pie and I'M planning a party!" She put extra enfaisis on the I'm.
"Ooh its no coincidence my little pony, my cheesey sense was a tingling, telling me a party was in the works..."
"A Cheesy sense? AH double amazing, I have a Pinkie sense!"
"Yes i sensed you did." Cheese strutted past Pinkie. "And I happen to be the Premiere party planner in all of Equestria." Cheese looked at pinkies banner. "If there's a party in need there'll I'll be. Be it wingding, hoedown, hootenanny or shindig...I'm your pony." Pinkie gasped.
"Wait are you here for..Rainbow Dash's party???"
"If that's the pony that is having it then I'll plan it ."
"Oohh this is so exciting, cause i happen to be planning it too!" She gasped again. "Maybe we can plan it together!" Pinkie grabbed his front hooves. Cheese didn't know why but he gave the slightest hint of a blush on his face. Pinkie looked at Rainbow Dash and said. "What do you say Rainbow Dash? Should me and Cheesey,"
"Cheese if you would please." Pinkie pie giggled.
"If Cheese and I would plan your party together?"
"I'll tell ya what, making this party EPIC is what you should do!" Rainbow Dash took a prideful stance in the air as she was about to announce something big. "Cause this isn't just any birthday, IT'S also the anniversary of when i moved to ponyville!" Rarity butted in.
"Good heavens Rainbow Dash!" She looked towards Applejack "It's your birth-aversiry!"
"EXACTLY!" Rainbow Dash flew down to Pinkie and Cheese and put her hooves on their shoulders. "So what do you say party planners?"
"OH I think we can do it!" Said Pinkie Pie.
"Oh I don't think so.." Replied Cheese, Pinkie and Rainbow both gasped at this. Then Cheese took off his poncho hat and saddle with a rubber chicken on it to reveal a yellow polo,he stood up on his hind legs. "I KNOW SO!" He was about to break into song randomly. "After all..>" "The super-duper party pony that pony is me! I always knew that was the kind of pony i would be!
"Me too!" Said Pinkie Pie.
"Come on ponies who here likes to party?" So Cheese and Pinkie pie both sang together when a crowd of ponies joind in with all the fun and laughter. After the song the party planners both sat down for a rest at sugar cube corner. "So let me get this straight, You plan parties ALL over Equestria?"
"Yep, from Canterlot all the way to Appleousa."
"OH OH OH do you want a cupcake?!?!"
"Is a Tortise slow?" Pinkie paused as she was clueless to the analogy. "Yes i would love one."
"okey dokey!" Pinkie trotted back to the counter to grab yellow and pink cupcakes. Cheese got a good look at her flank though, she looked quite fine from the behind (Imagine i just did a ghetto voice there).
"Here's your cupcake Cheesy!" Pinkie Pie giggled.
"Thanks?" Cheese didn't know why Pinkie gave him that nick name. But there was something Pinkie wasn't showing, she secretly developed a crush on the equally random party pony.
Okay so since the episode was released some of my ideas were changed so thats why it took so long for me to finnish this.
So the events of "Pinkie Pride" had taken place. Pinkie during the goof off started to loose interest in Cheese as he annoyed her with him winning and all. But during this Cheese started to re-develop his crush on Pinkie as he used to have one when he first met her all those years ago....."Just a little momento of my visit." Cheese sandwich slid a oak wood polished box towards Pinkie Pie. Rainbow Dash's Birth-averisery was going on in the backround. Ponies laughing and having fun whilst Rainbow Dash was wolfing down her cake.
"You're giving me your special rubber chicken friend?"
"Oh.. He's not the only one." Cheese pulled out a bonless with a number 2 on it.
"Come on Bone less 2. our job here is finished." Pinkie Pie saw Cheese Sandwich walk away, the pony she developed a crush on, lost it, and then re-developed it when he told her his past and that he only wanted to impress her. "Cheese, wait!"
"Hmm? What is it Pink-" Cheese Sandwich was interrupted by a kiss from the pink pony. Cheese embraced it and kissed back as he saw his chance.
"Pinkie...I didn't know that you...I mean I... But then you.."
"Same...." They just stared at each other for a good long 30 seconds before they kissed again. This time they broke tongue and it became a full out make out session, they kissed slow and passionately. They finally broke apart and Cheese had to leave. "Wait can't you just stay for one more day...Or week?" Pinkie Pie pleaded as she laid her head low, Cheese lifted her chin up with his hoof.
"Pinkie... I'm sorry but i have a living, and that is to plan parties all around Equestria."
"But your cheesey sense hasn't gone off yet...Has it?"
"Well no...but..I mean maybe."
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"Okay okay i'll stay... but only for you."
"Yay! OH we need to plan a welcoming party for you!"
"Oh my gosh!" You're right!" So the two headed to sugarcube corner to plan Cheese's party.
3 Years later....
"Mom, dad?" Asked a small biege filly with a dark brown and pink mane.
"What is it Cheesecake?" Said a young pink mare with a curly pink mane who had just finished putting up a banner saying: Happy 4th anniversary
"How did you and dad meet?"
"It all started when i came to Ponyville..." Interrupted an orange young stallion with a a curly brown mane.
"Oh there you are Cheesy."
"Pinkie, I told you to not call me that."
"I know sweetie," Pinkie Pie kissed Cheese sandwich on the cheek. "I'm just teasing."
"Okay, now where was I? Oh yeah It all started when i came to Ponyville ready to plan your aunt Rainbow Dash's Birth-aversiery party..."
THE END
That was nice to read. I can't wait for the next chapter, but I recommend something of a conflict, to spice up this story, but great beginning.
No! No conflicts it will just mess the fic up omg plz update soon!
I think you really need to find a pre-reader for this. I'm struggling with the format that this is written in and at times its difficult to tell who is talking.
There is a LOT of telling going on too, and very little showing at all. I really recommend looking at the site's Writing Guide for working and developing more of your skills in writing. Because writing is a really fun thing to do, it gives a release for the imagination and introduces your world to others to enjoy. Instead of telling us so much, tell us the emotions they are felling by the way your characters stand or respond. Paint the background for us so we know where this is taking place - describe the world around them as you see it so we can see it as well.
I know you are jumping on a unreleased episode of the season with this story. Might be a better idea to plan your story out, develop it, and then release it when everyone is in the mood for the episode's slide of fanfics.
3865013 listen thanks for the advice but i have tried in the past (projects for school, fics with friends and others.) but i simply cannot set the setting i was plannaing on editing it in once the fic was done but i need a sub writer someone who can help me willingly by the time the episode comes out unless you or someone else can help i have to put this fic on hold and continue my other story.
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Normally, I would jump at the chance to help someone. That's what I love about being a editor/pre-reader for people because you get to help them make their dreams come true and get to watch someone become better. It's pretty fulfilling.
But I can't help you with this story by the time the episode comes around. I'm already doing a three proofreading jobs, a reconstruction of a story, and my own works to contend with. For future projects if you need help, you can PM me and see if I'm available. I do recommend seeing these guys about someone helping out. They're a bunch of great people who really know what they are doing.
If I were you, besides contacting someone from that group, I would also try to work with your problem of setting up a environment for your characters. Just imagine where it is at and then give some description of it. What do the buildings look like, what do the characters look like, what does the weather look like, are there any items of interest that need to be explained in detail? Those kinds of things. Because it isn't going to matter that you were the first to develop this ship, its going to matter how well you pull it off and how much your readers enjoy it. They are going to enjoy it if it is easy to read and it speaks to their imagination.
Other then that, I wish you good luck on your project. You'll do good, just take some time and sharpen those skills!
awesome keep going please
I totally want you to keep going. And I say this from a entertained point of view since I haven't joined the CheesexPie shipping wagon yet. It's great and I encourage you to continue but it's entirly up to you.
Although I think that you should continue it for yourself and not for others (though it is a good consideration if you have a wide fan base for your fanfic)
I kind of absolutely D'awwed at the end scene.
Aw why can't Pinkie call him Cheesey?