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Kwinohiro


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Luna is shunned by society. Her sister is still distant from her. She is told to investigate strange magic in the Ever-free. Can she handle what she finds, and the emotions she has bundled inside of her?

Edit: Logged back on one fateful day, years later from making this. I'm sorry, truly, to anyone and everyone who followed this story for it's short time, as I, like most others, have seen the beginnings of fics that could be great but just get dropped. Not saying my fic is great, of course, was my first attempt at real writing at all. I just didn't have the time to work on this, and when I did have the time, I wasn't the same person with either the same inspiration or motivation. I made this a long time ago when my heart yearned for something I did not yet have and I let it out in a form of a fanfic. I would come back to this, and maybe someday I'll be able to be that person, but I don't forsee it. So I apologise to all those who wanted to see this journey to the end.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 17 )

There are, too many, mother flipping, comma's, in this, story, sort, them, out :trollestia:

Seriously though, decent start, but there are way too many unneeded commas :ajbemused:

I love it you got a like and fav from me.

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I agree that there is an excessive number of commas...

Great start.

This story has a lot of potential, and I hope that the next chapter is out soon!

you missed a spot, you didn't put quotation marks

and said, :We must make camp then, for the Ever-Free is not a friendly place at night, or much ever, for that matter, but if we cannot see, then we could easily be overtaken in the shadows. And, aside that, I could only do so much to heal you, as I am not fully aware of your anatomy, and your leg will still be weakened, so we might as well not take the chance of chase."

Good chapter. little bits of grammar mistakes here and there, but nothing large enough to be a distraction from the story. the story's looking good so far, cant wait for the next chapter!

awesome chapter. :D

so a strange beeing that is evile is watching theme, well interesting chapter so far

Eh i will give this one a shoot

I like the story and have faved and up voted it so as to keep track of it.
The only quibble I have is the mile in fifteen or twenty minutes. That is a rate of three to four miles an hour which is a fairly fast pace for a healthy human. I would think that his rate with an injured leg, still sore enough that he limps, would be perhaps half that. Just food for thought.

I WANT MOAR!!!!!!!!:flutterrage::flutterrage::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

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MAN you should continue this
Why did you quit?

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