Rainbow Dash is fighting for her life after a terrible accident. Will she be able to tell her friends her feelings for them? And will she survive?
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Rainbow Dash regained her vision and looked at her 'freind'
Only error I found..also a really good story If not sad
4109662 Thank you for commenting. If you find anything else, feel free to bring it to my attention.
Any story where dash dies is a good story in my book don't get me me wrong she is my fav pony. Story could use a little more detail.
4110024 Thank you for the feedback. I'll be sure to put more details in upcoming chapters. Hope you stick around for the ending.
4110246 I will stick around as long as some magical bullshit doesn't bring her back to life lol.
Neat! a birthday gift: new Flutterdash! XD
now let me read it...
~Wywint
I think that AJ should have had a more defined western accent, other than that, it was great
but sad...
~Wywint
I'm sorry, what?
i noticed just a few grammer issues, nothing bad...
but what happened? you just did a huge-ass scene change, and i am hoping there is a reason for it...
~Wywint
Hmmm its quite a good story but it left the last chapter hanging and the time skips were extremly uneven and left me a little confused at times
4112853 Any suggestions for improvements? If you have, please let me know.
I have looked over all of the chapters and rewritten some parts. I changed some parts to make the story a bit less jumpy. I hope you enjoy and chapter 4 will be up on Sunday. Hopefully...
"If you know what i mean "
"Oh boy ..."
Keep on whit the story.
MUST.KNOW.WHAT.HAPPEN!!
And, i know get why this story is called Fall of the rainbow
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INSTANT
NEO SPACESCENE CHANGE CARD ACTIVATEDSorry, i have to do that xD
Well, anyway, the "Huge ass scene change" how you said it, is just what happened like 9 days before the Accident-or-whatsoever that happened to Dashie
BTW you got a nice Avatar there
4120090 *whew*
i am content now...
and a few people have commented on my avatar. i like it too!
~Wywint
4120085 I'm glad you are enjoying the story. Also, glad that you understood what I meant. Hope you stick around.
Can't wait for another chapter!
4131994 I am happy to see that you like the story so far. Also, chapter 5 will be out tomorrow, Wednesday, March 26. I hope you can wait till then. I'm free from school so I can work all day... No life Wednesday!
4132472 yay! Can't wait
2 chapters!? So Awesome!
4137699 I was in the zone today, so I wrote two chapters for you all to read. Enjoy.
Cliff hanger? What! No!
2 questions here.
1. How the hell do you not know where the hospital is Fluttershy, how long have you lived in Ponyvillile?
2. What the hell do mean "What happened to her" Twilight did you just forget everything all of a sudden?
Great story by the way.
4138557 Sounds like you are liking the story so far. Happy to see that so many people do.
I just posted chapter 7 and I hope you like it to.
Just a heads up, it's a sad one.
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To answer your first point, Fluttershy wasn't thinking straight, she was holding her dying friend in her arms. She was scared.
The answer to the second point.
Twilight haven't seen Rainbow Dash after the accident. All she knew was that Rainbow Dash was hurt.
If you want, I can change/remove those part, if it will make the story any better.
~Sigge
Can not wait for the next chapter
Nah it's good how it is... And I started crying a bit.
Man I love this story. Brings tears to my eyes. Moment of silence for our rainbow dash...... Anyway! Cant wait for the next chapter!
The first chapter was strong with sentences with a few problems here and there but honestly this chapter felt a pain to read, the conversations between cbaracters and descriptions felt unnatural. It may just be me though don't take it the wrong way its a strong idea.
That's it?
Is just... that of Rainbow?
...
...
...
Dissapointing.
I was specting something much deeper and, i dont know, slow.
Is like:
FS: Rainbow, love ya'
RD: Love ya' too Fluttershy, but is my time
FS: Nooo, dont leave me alone
RD: Sorry.. i have to leave... X.X
FS: Nooooooooooooo
Anyway, im gonna read the other two chapters, just for making me sure that Fluttershy don't kill herself.
I was specting a lot more of this.
Oh man I thought she was dead don't scare me like that man... Unless this is the dream she's in now... DUN DUN DUN!!!
4222267 I can reassure you that this is not a dream. I promiss.
4222648 oh thank god I thought dashie was actually dead for a minute
Phew 4 a second there I thought rainbow died and u made me sob my tears
If rainbow dash is dead then continue if she isn't dead then don't continue
Dark shadow well that's sadness anyways why don't u continue the story how it is and after your done continue where dashie die for the people who want her dead (which is strange but hey I'm wierder)
OPPS if I didn't make it clear I wants u to continue
4233209 I guess since Rainbow Dash is alive, you don't want me to continue? Am I correct?
4233353 well i can't tell if fluttershy is dreaming or halluicnating at this point since Dash has died twice in this story already. And if she does stay alive then title doesn't make sense anymore.
Ps. If you do continue I want a sad ending.
Little spoiler for the next chapter...
Alternate ending, that was planed instead of chapter 8 and 9 and will be about after Rainbow Dash died.
(Gore tag will be used...)
Out Friday I hope...
That is all
Dawwwwww she saw rainbow ;,)
I feel bad for her friends thore :(
Would it be too much to ask for an alternate alternate ending where Dash dies and fluttershy doesn't commit suicide?
4279258 Both yes and no.
4279564 what?
4279622 Yes, it would be a little to much to ask since I feel like the story is complete. Also no, I could write another part but it would take some time, something I might not have for the upcoming week. But if you really want another ending, I will try to find some time for it. Your choice.
4279709 I would like another ending because I really don't like suicide but I'm not going to bug you about other then that the story has been good
4279746 Do you want me to write it and then send it to you? If you want, I'll try and finish it as fast as possible. No promises on the time.